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8th doublet overcast warm cider you lost the rhyme pattern here how about and by the fire we will cuddle wrapped in eider with out steaming cups of warmed cider last sentence make ways plural to conform to the word days Chrys

Smiles:) Barbara And by the fire we will cuddle together, With our steaming cups of warm cider. I love this stanza and by the fire we will cuddle with steaming cups of cider great poem love it. some more work and it will be awesome. if I am off the mark let me know I usually am.

to take this poem one or two steps farther 1. Try using another word instead of “begins”. I could think of “delivers” 2. Try to use less numbers of “the”. You can replace them by using more adjectives in that line or by adding “ing” to the verb ( to maintain the meter). 3. Replace filling words by adjectives. (now/sadly) Example: Autumn delivering chill under silver moonlight Old warm summery season sadly grieves With many fallen rainbow-colored leaves I like using “the” yet I think it’s better be used either to lengthen the line or when it’s absolutely necessary. Otherwise, it may slow the flow or distract the reader's attention. Season of Special Delight is a wonderful poem that reflects, before our eyes, the different seasons then compare them in an indirect way to the life of loving couples. One can never get enough of reading it…thank you drachm