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I cry

 
I cry 

and  I  cry
and  I  cry.
The tears keep running down my face
I’m not sure why
I lost my job, my glasses and my wallet
that’s not enough reason for a man to cry.
It gives me time for my work
and yours.

I realised,

my rage and resentment
is against corporate cocks
who rule our lives
without a  thought
for our future,
or our children’s future.

Fight, fight
against  the dieing of life.
I cry 
and I mourn
and I fight
 


 
 
— weirdelf, Apr 05, 2008

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

Jess

Seems we are all fighting that fight "realize" Just a suggestion and nothing more what if you were to say the Death of life and at the end I cry , I fight and I mourn just a thought Chrys
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 2 months ago

I kept dieing of life

because it's not dead yet and also to reference Thomas. Added mourn, that works well for me. Thanks for the tips cheers, Jess
Mark

Mark

18 years 2 months ago

Fight Those Cocks

I'll join ya and we'll start a revolution for evolution make her beautiful once more. Don't cry no more, fight! Where to start? I'm thinking good old fasioned violence for the cocks :) Like blowing up buildings ! I have nothing to lose, you? The likes of Michael as man on earth. For earth ! Mark
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barbsdad2003

18 years 2 months ago

FYI, Jess ...

from my perspective, when a man cries, it's axiomatic he (including you, of course) has reason enough. And that even if the reason's not explained ... or understood---either by himself or by others. Thanx, Chuck
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orgami

18 years 2 months ago

when all else seems to have already failed...

Well Weirdelf my week was another lost week yes i love this poem and like you i lost my brand new bike downtown i woke up still alive and full of knocks and bumps lost some I.D. also but kept the money and bike lock strange apparations of thought as for corporate affairs i worked once for the union a good one and a big company now called ACEON a big construction do that was once known as Cliffside here in Ontario Canada i worked for a lesser unit of them at that time but the bosses didnt care and the foreman was a rude pig and they dumped me more or less red necks but i had fun with my fellows i made freinds with and i have lost wallets too and probably glasses if i had any but so i relate as of late i am going back to meetings now and trying to be good too much to lose from what i have all been given by nice helping people well i care i hear you and i like this poem straight from the heart take care my freind here i can hear new birds singing as the grass emerges and soon flowers will rise and bloom and the lake will be free of ice and alive again as we are too Your brother with love O
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 2 months ago

thanks Orgami,

knew you would understand. Meetings are starting to look like an option for me again too, cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

I like this also

True male emotions. Makes me sad that this world can treat people this way with out any compassion. The biggest company in out little town is being shut down all over the US because a huge company don't like them. No thought of those working there. These are critical times hard to deal with. You have captured the plight of many perfectly. I can see the realization that love resides with the few and lost to the many. I agree the ending could flow a little better. From beginning to end the images flow perfectly. Great no changes I feel is needed Smiles:) Barbara
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 2 months ago

smiles right back at you

It's seldom I reveal myself this rawly in my work. Truth is I don't remember writing or posting it, amazing it's even readable. cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

I like this also

True male emotions. Makes me sad that this world can treat people this way with out any compassion. The biggest company in out little town is being shut down all over the US because a huge company don't like them. No thought of those working there. These are critical times hard to deal with. You have captured the plight of many perfectly. I can see the realization that love resides with the few and lost to the many. I agree the word ending could flow a little better. Otherwise From beginning to end the images flow perfectly no changes I feel is necessary Smiles:) Barbara
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rider68

18 years 2 months ago

The World We live in

Liberty lost to governments Corporations putting us down, – rubber stamping The likes of me & you Throwing Breadcrumbs For the lucky Few, Jess Sad times we live in! Peter
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Alobar

18 years 2 months ago

Corporate cocks and uncaring

Corporate cocks and uncaring gods they all screw us in the end what's one to do? live your life and relish in the ironies when those cocks get lopped off by other knives wielded by other cocks, bigger than them and pointed at them ...and not you. Unfortunately, that's all there is to do. (oh and write more poems, damn it man, write more poems!!!)
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 2 months ago

I write rarely,

try to make it count when I do. As I said, I don't even remember writing or posting this... a worry. cheers, Jess
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Jess

I have a suggestion. To cut down on the repitition, you could say: I cry and I scream and I howl and I sob Losing all three of those items are major. I can relate to all of it. Like the poem. Always, Cat
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 2 months ago

Thanks for the suggestion

and re-reading it a agree the repetition was too much. But I wanted that feeling that the crying just won't stop. So I deleted one of the "I cry"s. cheers, Jess
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muttering_madwoman

18 years 2 months ago

oh yeah

you have a new fan right here. Niki
Mark

Mark

18 years 1 month ago

Glad you kept the begining

on another note I once read a comment where somebody said they were pushing 5,000 points and I thought - how can that be? But then I think that was the only person ever having read the entire stream. So I decided to land here far from perfect but always giving it a good go. Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 1 month ago

don't want to brag,

But I have over 9000 points. I've been here close to the inception of Neopoet, but time is not all. Points are earned by commenting more than posting, they are not based on votes for poems. It simply reflects that we are more about feedback and help than dumping poems. Dare anyone to a race me too 10000! teehee. It's not competition either, Andrew is a brilliant man and has set up these things to help ensue the "culture " of this site. cheers, Jess
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drachm

18 years ago

I Cry

That is a very sad poem! I like the free style using a few short lines to draw the reader into the poem and then you keep their attention throughout. Sorry ole fellow about the loss of the job---if they paid you for your poetic talent you would be a millionare. In the simplist words you haved conveyed great beauty in our language. Drachm
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years ago

Sad but Good poem

Smiles:) Barbara Reading this again it just gets better. Agree with Drachm your poem are great, I always look forward to reading them.
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

ta Barb

I have six sisters, one called Barbara... hang on! I feel a poem coming on! This is an opportunity not to be missed, been so dry lately, look for "Sorority Benefit" cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years ago

Thanks Jess

Smiles:) Barbara Barbara is a special name so many Barbara's Can't wait to read it.
docmaverick

docmaverick

18 years ago

Mr. elf...

..I really felt the loss of hope, as you cried. It matters not, "why", or "how hard"; what I felt was, that you cried so uncontrollably, at all. I felt this, because I've been there. In fact, I'm still wiping away the tears. Who says that we cry, alone? I think, NOT. Waiting for a bed, doc.
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years ago

Men

you are always searching for the reason you cry instead of just accepting the fact that perhaps you need to do so. Is it society that tells you to do this, or some dark inclination that voices its opinion with whispers in your ear of weakness and frailty. I prefer a man who cries without reason or fear. It shows far more strength than those who hide behind either as an excuse for tears. Best, Ronda
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orgami

18 years ago

frustration of the larger shop

Can relate to crying when i get frustrated full of fear and feeling helpless i stop and let it out rather then shut down smash it down and cover it up with my old addictions not first without sparks though but its not the old ways i do now poem is beautiful large companies come and sweep up everything devouring competition like Star Treks "Borgs" (not a big fiction fan but loved those shows!!!!) Just heard up here in Oshawa Canada that GM is shutting down the truck plant A thousand workers out of work and in Mexico a plant there and two in the States so yes its natural and fair to have something that large to even think about going up against
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

thanks Orgami, Janice, everyone who replied.

It all helped me feel less alone, but also realise we are not completely powerless against the corporate cocks. Protest, letter writing, other forms of political action, even (heaven forfend!) voting. All make a difference. cheers, Jess