bloke

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Limitation of Emotion

Posted May 2, 2014 · 26 lines · 7 critiques

Cells were closed off,
Charred on the outside fresh on the in.
A wall of non-energy surrounded my skin.
Gut was disconnected from the cognitive,
No feeling not living.
My biological imperative,
To wonder why there are stars at night.
Feel a sense of peace, looking on,
even release of fright.
Feeling is the weight in every decision,
Giving meaning to orbital vision.
Morbid attrition incorporate in wisdom,
Reminder; of the limitation of emotion.
The blank page you can never write.

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The length of time since you’ve cried.
The sound that makes you wish you’d died.
That song that never sounds right.
A thought, leaning against the intangible,
Waiting for the signal to let go,
It won’t though.
A reason we believed in gods and heathens,
When we thought the stars were heavens.
Why we developed nuclear weapons,
Gauge weight in vapid treasures.
Emotion is useless without cognition,
The Cognitive corrupts our use for feeling.

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July 2014
27 Sun

Received a critique
on Limitation of Emotion from @weirdelf
"Great revisions, turns it from prose to poetry. A few stanza breaks would improve its readability and enhance its content and meaning The last two lines suck and detract from the overall message. Emotion is useless with…"
May 2014
15 Thu

Received a critique
on Limitation of Emotion from @weirdelf
"I can't agree with all your ideas. Emotion and cognition are not polar opposites. The true genius combines them."
12 Mon

Received a critique
on Engorged Pointlessness from @Ian.T
"This is the first of your writes I think I have seen, you seem to have a dilemma here where you live in a state yet it makes you sick.. Suggestion, just move over, stop pissing against the wind, all you do there, is get…"
11 Sun

Critiqued
"ninety parts to God" by @emeka ozurumba
"The internal logic is consistent. The title is all the more powerful after having read the poem. There is much to think about after reading it. Once again, thank you for the write."
11 Sun

Critiqued
"sonnet +1" by @emeka ozurumba
"Well, I'm going to read all of your work now. I'm still contemplating this one, and will likely continue to throughout the day. I can't offer critique as your skill level is far beyond mine. Thank you for the write. Bre…"
03 Sat

Received a critique
on Limitation of Emotion from @emeka ozurumba
"very solid initiative"
03 Sat

Received a critique
on Limitation of Emotion from @Eduardo Cruz
"In reality it was you who sparked these thoughts. everything is already in your write. Sometimes we have to step away from what we wrote to look at it from a different prospective. The prospective that was already in ou…"
02 Fri

Received a critique
on Limitation of Emotion from @Eduardo Cruz
"We live in a world filled with fear, but those fears are what keep us alive. if we had none, we would be dead. When we are younger our fears are, for some the buggy monster, or rather to say what is hiding under the bed…"
02 Fri

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Limitation of Emotion
"Cells were closed off,"
Open thread 26 lines
April 2014
07 Mon

Received a critique
on In a Moment from @emeka ozurumba
"blue then shouldn't be fecund but futile"
November 2013
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Anniversary
5 years of membership
April 2011
27 Wed

Received a critique
on Engorged Pointlessness from @CCfire
"I write them the way I hear them in my head, so how ever it comes out is how it's written, right or wrong it's me :)"
15 Fri

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"Sometimes my heart hurts like so much dust covers it."
Open thread 19 lines
15 Fri

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"pagan" by @CCfire
"Be not afraid cc."
15 Fri

Critiqued
"pagan" by @CCfire
"Great title, you need not change it, you must have some knowledge in pagan precursors."
15 Fri

Critiqued
"pagan" by @CCfire
"This poem hit me hard, quite hard indeed. The last three lines especially. I am definitely looking forward to reading more of your work."
13 Wed

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"i hate her" by @prettyprincess
"I really enjoyed this poem, it created a powerful 30 second movie in my mind as i read it. It also made me think deeply about the emotions, and daily thoughts of the person behind it. Really enjoyed this poem. The title…"
January 2009
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on Limitation of Emotion from @weirdelf

on Engorged Pointlessness from @Ian.T

"ninety parts to God" by @emeka ozurumba

"sonnet +1" by @emeka ozurumba

on Limitation of Emotion from @emeka ozurumba

on Limitation of Emotion from @Eduardo Cruz

on Limitation of Emotion from @Eduardo Cruz

on In a Moment from @emeka ozurumba

5 years of membership

on Engorged Pointlessness from @CCfire

"pagan" by @CCfire

"pagan" by @CCfire

"pagan" by @CCfire

"Tasting the Fire" by @themoonman

"Thrilled savagely" by @weirdelf

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"i hate her" by @prettyprincess

on " It’s all Einstein’s Fault (revised)" by @weirdelf

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