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bloke
Jan 22, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Endurance

There’s that guy at the supermarketLying in bed With his wife, their sonWriting instead Passing the glass, lookoutIn a contented chair The son, a track starWith beer bought welfare  There’s that woman at the meeting placeWalking alone With another manLove Postponed Ignorance by blissful thinkingWishful thinking  Where’s that man endured muchOn the bottom



Are you the top?
— bloke, Jan 22, 2009

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yenti

yenti

17 years 4 months ago

Lost me

Sorry the whole piece seems to have some form but could you please give me a clue as to the overall picture, With respect Ian.T
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bloke

17 years 4 months ago

yeah

i was experimenting, trying to write two poems in one, with the top lines as one poem and the bottom another, the top representing success in life the bottom failure. cheers for the comment mate:)
yenti

yenti

17 years 4 months ago

Sorry

I missed it. Have re read it and it will be missed by a load of people, reason for it being in the lonely poem board list. I have been going through the list from the end, up to 5 days ago trying to give each one a comment as I can. There is a place at the bottom when submitting a poem where you can put a short explain of what you are up to, All the best for future writes, Yours Ian.T