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Liela
Member since June 28, 2021
Member for 4 years, 11 months
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Goodbye
We are about to say goodbye
Who knows what will happen before we see eachother again.
We have these few moments
Only a few moments...
You raise your voice
And you lose your temper.
You swear at me like I'm some lowly creature.
I'm afraid to walk out of this room
I hear doors slamming
I hear voices booming
I hear my heart breaking.
I'm afraid to say a word
The last ones made you curse
I dont know what I did...
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I want to take it back.
I see your eyes flashing
I see your jaw clenching
I see the blackness in your eyes...
And soon we'll say goodbye.
We have these few moments
Our last memories of each other...
Don't you want them to be filled with love?
I dont know what I did...
I want to take it back.
You've made your mark
You've had your say
Now all I have to do...
Is say goodbye.
Liela’s timeline
- June 2022
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28 TueAnniversary
One year of membership
- June 2021
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28 MonJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
- July 2010
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11 SunReceived a critique
on Goodbye from @Candlewitch
"Nice to meet you. I have a couple of suggestions for you. In these lines it might be better if you brake up a couple of the longer lines, like this: We are about to say goodbye Who knows what will happen before we see e…" -
11 Sun
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02 FriReceived a critique
on Let's pretend from @Sinbadthesailorman
"1st Stanza A little to Negative without even a wisp of positive except for it being there. Note: This is only my preferred Taste when dealing with the positive or negative that they are neutral or positive. I like the n…" -
02 Fri
- June 2010
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10 ThuReceived a critique
on There is a secret from @judyanne
"lovely write - and you're not alone, we all know there is a secret we don't know. the people you're talking about think they've found it, but i don't believe they have really, and don't try to pretend - i really like th…" -
10 Thu
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05 SatReceived a critique
on Trust in me from @hardcore
"love poems are, my faviorite to read,I enjoyed yours emmincly. Watch for mine,it's comming soon. Hardcore." -
03 ThuReceived a critique
on My daddy loves me from @magics02
"I share those same stories as you in your write. Very nice one here. Will be back to read more of this I had a couple of stumbles but I shall return back when I have more time.:) Mona" -
03 ThuReceived a critique
on My daddy loves me from @scribbler
"How refreshing to see an upbeat write about childhood innocence.Great write....scribbler" -
03 ThuReceived a critique
on My daddy loves me from @xena465
"So many people have not had the love of their father and some, well; the wrong kind of love...sounds to me like you’re dad has been there for you. Just one line where you forgot your apostrophe... He {didnt} show me ugl…" -
03 Thu
- May 2010
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31 MonReceived a critique
on I'm still that little girl from @xena465
"It helps to get some feedback on your poetry if you reply to the comments on your previous poems. If you read my greeting to you on your homepage it may help you to make friends...nice poem. Rosina xena465" -
31 Mon
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28 Fri
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23 Sun
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22 Sat
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15 SatHighest posting month
May 2010 — 6 poems
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08 Sat
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08 SatFirst critique offered
on "the weird stage" by @billie
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07 FriFirst publication
Running Away
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07 Fri
About Me
About me
16, new poet
Location: Britain
Recent Work
Goodbye
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Let's pretend
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There is a secret
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My daddy loves me
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I'm still that little girl
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I am Home
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My Sanctuary
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Don"t look back
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Trust in me
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Running Away
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