Let's pretend

1st Stanza A little to Negative without even a wisp of positive except for it being there. Note: This is only my preferred Taste when dealing with the positive or negative that they are neutral or positive. I like the negative content, but I am missing the positive side. 2nd.Stanza Has a very good feel, but may flow a little better with another That line I would Break the 3rd. line at its comma and add That's and amp up pixie dust with and [always], But that is How I would do it. It is and flows very well now. 3rd. Stanza rock solid, but the 4th line, I feel can be tweaked By a simple Cliche like (come and go), but again these are only things I would do and I am a glass 3/4 full guy when its damn near empty. I know it's hard to tell, but every once and awhile when I write, Those writes, I write are my pent up failings. If these are yours Every well said and done. 4th Stanza Is a perfect wrap up I would Leave It as it stands Very Strong and feels right. Donnie/Sinbad a very strong poem now, but I think you can get another "very" in there.