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Goodbye

We are about to say goodbye
Who knows what will happen before we see eachother again.
We have these few moments
Only a few moments...

You raise your voice
And you lose your temper.
You swear at me like I'm some lowly creature.

I'm afraid to walk out of this room
I hear doors slamming
I hear voices booming
I hear my heart breaking.

I'm afraid to say a word
The last ones made you curse
I dont know what I did...
I want to take it back.

I see your eyes flashing
I see your jaw clenching
I see the blackness in your eyes...
And soon we'll say goodbye.

We have these few moments
Our last memories of each other...
Don't you want them to be filled with love?
I dont know what I did...
I want to take it back.

You've made your mark
You've had your say
Now all I have to do...
Is say goodbye.

 

— Liela, Jul 11, 2010

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Hello

Nice to meet you. I have a couple of suggestions for you. In these lines it might be better if you brake up a couple of the longer lines, like this: We are about to say goodbye Who knows what will happen before we see eachother again. (each other is two words) We have these few moment Only a few moments… You raise your voice And you lose your temper. You swear at me like I’m some lowly creature. I hope I have helped you. I can relate to this piece as I have been there before. Always, Cat