pleiades

Member since August 11, 2009

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Waiting

Posted Jun 29, 2021 · 41 lines · 2 critiques

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Winter is leaving.
With each slant of sun,
another leaf unfurls

The room
with its' faded walls
and melancholy air, seems
pale and wan
in the watery light, and yet -
his brown length seems darker.

In the distance
a train whistle sounds,
a plaintive cry
like the drawn out soul of a note,

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and the moon is a pearl
hiding her fading glow behind
the pink yawn of dawn

He sighs in his sleep

The cat meows at the door, wanting
to be let out

The tick of the bedside clock
keeps solemn time

He sighs again,
his warm breath a hush

Passions' memory
drapes over her like a pashmina,
as she lays there
watching him

Last night -

She remembers the gentle heaviness
of him

She recalls his touch,
his hands like stars
upon her wanting skin,
and it's all she can do
to not wake him -
confess to him -

her darkness,
her longing,

her ache.

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August 2024
10 Sat

Anniversary
15 years of membership
July 2021
01 Thu

Received a critique
on Waiting from @Arrow
"I find this a mixed bag, which seems pretty normal for a rough draft. There are some stellar lines: the moon and the dawn, the pashmina, hands like stars and some cliched ones: watery light, the soul of notes, the train…"
June 2021
30 Wed

Received a critique
on Waiting from @Geezer
"the scene you bring to us. It is accurate, in as much as the late night, early morning after-glow, when one wishes that the moment would last forever and you could tell all your secrets to your new-born lover. Stunning…"
29 Tue

Posted a poem
Waiting
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August 2020
31 Mon

Received a critique
on of Saturdays with jam and cream from @scribbler
"For those who have trouble deciding what the difference is between chopped prose and free verse Poetry.....well here it is. Most excellent free verse in my opinion"
29 Sat

Received a critique
on of Saturdays with jam and cream from @Lavender
"For many, to read and write poetry is a necessity - like air and food. This poem sustains the reader, satisfying in every way. I especially love the stanza referring to the comfort of sound - a sense not appreciated as…"
29 Sat

Received a critique
on of Saturdays with jam and cream from @Geezer
"like the prelude for a novel, setting the scene for memories of a lost love. From there, it can go anywhere. Spy-thriller, murder -mystery or romance novel. I enjoyed the scenes being set and the vivid colors and reflec…"
29 Sat

Posted a poem
of Saturdays with jam and cream
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28 Fri

Received a critique
on July from @Gracy
"Hi pleiades, lovely poem about sex on the beautiful island of Mikonos. I've been there myself. It's as you describe it...all white and the sea is brilliant. I remember there was a tame pelican walking around and we used…"
27 Thu

Posted a poem
July
"When July arrived"
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24 Mon

Received a critique
on September from @Ray Whitaker
"Very sensual, the unspoken Images sent me to intimate times I fondly remember."
20 Thu

Critiqued
"Son of the Moon" by @Dramen85
"This is a cathartic write of some kind, yes? That's what I get from it. This stanza: "Peering through a window a family dines together Tender words heard; love exchanged affectionately...", and so on until the end... Qu…"
19 Wed

Critiqued
"Picnic by Limay " by @Gracy
"I love this. My favourite kind of poetry...narrative/prose. Usually I'm pro, lose the definite article wherever possible, but UNusually, I feel the opposite here...I think a few, in different places, would enhance your…"
19 Wed

Critiqued
"Coffee" by @Lee
"So I won't bang on with any unwanted critique. Loved it when I first read it. In my head, the pace was pretty frenetic, and I didn't so much read it in my head, as I did rap it... and rap's not a genre I particularly li…"
18 Tue

Received a critique
on September from @Lavender
"Hi, pleiades, So many separate images here, but softly connected as if it's all one continuous deep thought which seems to travel outward and then makes its way back into the room in the form of the breath of winter thr…"
18 Tue

Critiqued
"Low Setting Sun" by @Lavender
"The first time I read this, I was struck by the quiet air about it, a delicate, sweet melancholic air. I've read this a number of times now, and liked it more each time. As I delved deeper, your words conjured the image…"
18 Tue

Posted a poem
September
"All we had was September"
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August 2019
10 Sat

Anniversary
10 years of membership
August 2016
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New follower
@Esker
August 2014
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Anniversary
5 years of membership
May 2013
28 Tue

Critiqued
"M a r a c h i n o . . . " by @Esker
"i am in love with this poem i was captured at the first line, and even after reading it four times, it still hasn't let me go rare for me (particularly recent months) to be so ensnared by a poem .. to feel so naturally…"
March 2013
04 Mon

Critiqued
"S L O T * * * T A N G E R I N " by @Esker
"how spooky is this? it's stinking hot here...i've just come in from the decking after ferrying all my plants into shade...my poor old basil plant is limp from the heat back inside, i turn on the ceiling fan... then, i t…"
04 Mon

Critiqued
"heaven earth.....life" by @loved
"beg to differ loved...as an aussie, i "hold hands" with a canadian wolf i'm in two minds over this write. i don't immediately see a lot of poetic value, but then i think to myself, must every thought have poetic value?…"
01 Fri

Critiqued
"Who I am" by @Starlight
"not convinced it's a poem as such, but for me, a sort of quirky, kinda pretty, take on our shadow i enjoyed it cheers p"
July 2012
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New follower
@Dalton
May 2012
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@loved
April 2012
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darling dash, love lily
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Highest posting month
June 2010 — 6 poems
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ode to a grecian night
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Waiting
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marionette
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of saturdays with jam and cream
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a few delicate minutes
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August 2009
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First critique offered
on "Between our wisdom and our weakness, I find your birdsong nonchalance (2nd revision)" by @Cloudthings
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First publication
Love like a woman
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Most-discussed work
Love like a woman

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15 years of membership

on Waiting from @Arrow

on Waiting from @Geezer

on of Saturdays with jam and cream from @scribbler

on of Saturdays with jam and cream from @Lavender

on of Saturdays with jam and cream from @Geezer

on July from @Gracy

on September from @Ray Whitaker

"Son of the Moon" by @Dramen85

"Picnic by Limay " by @Gracy

"Coffee" by @Lee

on September from @Lavender

"Low Setting Sun" by @Lavender

10 years of membership

5 years of membership

"M a r a c h i n o . . . " by @Esker

"S L O T * * * T A N G E R I N " by @Esker

"heaven earth.....life" by @loved

"Who I am" by @Starlight

One year of membership

June 2010 — 6 poems

on "Between our wisdom and our weakness, I find your birdsong nonchalance (2nd revision)" by @Cloudthings

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