Orphani

Member since November 27, 2010

Member for 15 years, 6 months

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From the deep wood

Posted Feb 4, 2017 · 9 lines · 2 critiques

I know you will tell me you are
somewhere
a window once held the frame of your face

I look at the wood that once held the deep secret of a forest
long gone to make the borders of this enclosure
the sun alone finds a way into

if only time could be undone through some kindness
mushrooms and the deep moss hide
before the sharpened ax fell to silence

Orphani’s timeline

November 2025
27 Thu

Anniversary
15 years of membership
November 2020
27 Fri

Anniversary
10 years of membership
February 2017
04 Sat

Received a critique
on From the deep wood from @themoonman
"It's been too long, hope all is stupendous, or at least close. "they put in a parking lot" your poem sent me off in song thanks, Richard"
04 Sat

Posted a poem
From the deep wood
"I know you will tell me you are"
Open thread 9 lines
November 2015
27 Fri

Anniversary
5 years of membership
September 2012
22 Sat

Critiqued
"Maintain The Rage" by @weirdelf
"Dearest Jess, in the moments of shared anguish and grief, I can only be with you in spirit. I can't physically hug you, but you know the ones who have touched your life will always be close to you. Love is the glue that…"
April 2012
19 Thu

Received a critique
on the heart sways from @Nordic cloud
"I realised that, and as that was what I even experienced with it while reading it, I didn't allude to that aspect of it. I love the way you say "oblique love poem" that fits it exactly, like the oblique shadows merging…"
19 Thu

Received a critique
on the heart sways from @Nordic cloud
"Oh I love this, I do... you turn my mind, my eyes, my consciousness together in a floating mysterious manner describing something that evolves into the surge of Spring, so beautifully done, Barry, so beautifully done. I…"
19 Thu

Received a critique
on the heart sways from @Roscoe Lane
"We all have our shapes or paths in lifes momentun, and our hearts at times can lead us into troubled times. But always there seems to be away out, subconsciencly we all sense the dangers in life. Your poem is good but w…"
17 Tue

Posted a poem
the heart sways
"the heart sways the branches"
Open thread 10 lines
March 2012
19 Mon

Received a critique
on scribbler in the dirt from @Cloudthings
"Well, it was worth the wait, a delicate poem that is also beautifully articulate (I mean that in the sense of flexability & agility, but also in a language sense) & a joy to read, I would not want to see a thing changed…"
19 Mon

Critiqued
"Breath" by @Kailashana2
"We now have a dingo dog that insists on always being in the middle with the final word.... her tongue in your mouth and dog breath"
19 Mon

Critiqued
"V E S P E R I N G " by @Esker
"I have appreciated the imaginative quality of your work...the insightful connective tissue of art, and life experience to create a frail, naked beauty...underpinned with a spiritual, moral ethos. I do not like to dwell…"
13 Tue

Received a critique
on scribbler in the dirt from @Esker
"I like the hazy feel of this poem and although I dont understand its depth or meaning fully I like the loftiness of its wording that yearning of the middle distance like fathoming the mirage thats always shimmering Than…"
12 Mon

Received a critique
on myth of myself from @Nordic cloud
"Just yesterday they did it again, a Norwegian cook and a journalist are travelling round to countries with conflicts and inviting the two parties to a meal that is cooked by them, they all meet and discuss all sorts tog…"
12 Mon

Received a critique
on today from @Nordic cloud
"This is "absurd theatre" I can SEEE it all and it is such a little gem of a 'happening.' "streets bent truth" like that. Ann."
09 Fri

Posted a poem
moving man
"if you have never defiled anyone's couch"
Open thread 11 lines
03 Sat

Posted a poem
scribbler in the dirt
"slim is the gesture of the night"
Open thread 11 lines
01 Thu

Posted a poem
urbane
"into the thaw of a dying winter"
Open thread 15 lines
February 2012
19 Sun

Posted a poem
myth of myself
"my soul lost its memory"
Open thread 15 lines
January 2012
03 Tue

Posted a poem
today
"I hope it's not today when the angels come home"
Open thread 5 lines
December 2011
17 Sat

Posted a poem
paper
"there is only paper now"
Open thread 7 lines
November 2011
27 Sun

Anniversary
One year of membership
March 2011
17 Thu

Critiqued
"New Orchard Contemplation" by @Race_9togo
"I'm glad to know that Jim. I really am. ~A"
16 Wed

Critiqued
"surface" by @Esker
"Your shits getting tethered to a circle most likely better smell your way out between the spoon and the spirit free i"
14 Mon

Critiqued
"Simply Diana" by @Licia Daniels
"Your use of rhyme and meter are excellent. A superb write in the comedic genre. B"
13 Sun

Critiqued
"A KNOWLEDGE OF BEING" by @Bonitaj
"Welcome back Bon, a little busy at the moment and tired so I'll forgo crit until I can climb over your acnestis. Only you would find the most difficult word in the dictionary to put in a poem. We have to talk. Welcome b…"
09 Wed

Critiqued
"Last Night" by @Ayaz Warith
"Ayaz, The first question question I ask myself when reading someone who is unknown to me is: do they have a poet's heart, or are they merely trying to copy what they believe to sound poetic. The most telling point of re…"
04 Fri

New follower
@loved
January 2011
09 Sun

New follower
@RSScheerer
09 Sun

New follower
@Blue_Halcyon
November 2010
27 Sat

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
July 2010
18 Sun

Posted a poem
last child of the gang war
"one tearful voice hears"
Open thread 14 lines
15 Thu

Posted a poem
escape
"there's always an escape to make"
Open thread 16 lines
12 Mon

Posted a poem
creation
"in the imposed oneness of the last bird to fly"
Open thread 17 lines
10 Sat

Posted a poem
heads have ceilings
"heads have ceilings that look up"
Open thread 9 lines
June 2010
25 Fri

Posting milestone
100 poems posted
May 2010
30 Sun

Critique milestone
1,000 critiques given
January 2010
15 Fri

Highest posting month
January 2010 — 20 poems
12 Tue

Most-discussed work
Forever in your eyes

33 critiques to date.
September 2009
09 Wed

First publication
seagull days
09 Wed

First critique offered
on "A Mad Mathematician" by @Diatom Shells