creation

This piece is simply dazzling in its beauty and grace. I wish I had written it. Your talent is stunning. My favorite lines are: as sun and light approached creation the dark veil between us lifted its dawn of eyes looked through us and our wings were given flight above the closed dust of lost eons Always, Cat

Nice one Barry. Like it and that's all I want to say. The image is a picture to be painted Mona

I find richness in its texture. I like the lower case, it seems to make the poem unassuming, yet there is still power in the words. I feel the reader may find many different faucets in its abstractness . The unfolding story of creation presented here is really lovely. I love the idea of being given the gift of spirit to overcome anything and gain what our imaginations can dream up. My favorite lines have to be “in the holy shroud of time in the cracked fist of clay, the mountains opened and in the speech of pines the waterfalls descended pouring into our spirits, what is yet imagined through the black and hidden night starless and unreasoning” We are the elements of our surroundings. Lovely, Lovely, Always, Tonya

A Sigh and ... Applause love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

I enjoyed this piece. Only thing to fix are slight punctuation errors. Great job.

paint what you have written. ~ Gee