whitescatter

Member since October 2, 2008

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"Pantoum For The Christmas"

Posted Dec 16, 2012 · 16 lines · 3 critiques

Everyone's searching for that magical star
As the world is waiting for that eve to come..
Others keep guessing where the three kings are..
The Giver of Light is just yet seen by some.

As the world is waiting for that eve to come..
Songs of the children fills up all the streets..
The Giver of Light is just yet seen by some.
On that eve,it will be all for those who fits.

Songs of the children fills up all the streets..
Touching the hearts with love and peace.
On that eve,it will be all for those who fits.
His sincere promise laid on the star-lit trees.

Touching the hearts with love and peace..
Others keep guessing where the three kings are..
His sincere promise laid on the star-lit trees.
Everyone's searching for that magical star.

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October 2023
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Anniversary
15 years of membership
October 2018
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Anniversary
10 years of membership
January 2015
03 Sat

Received a critique
on Through Pains and Tears from @weirdelf
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02 Fri

Received a critique
on It's Christmas!! from @weirdelf
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02 Fri

Received a critique
on The Invention from @weirdelf
"to your return remember to tell me your new name"
December 2014
30 Tue

Received a critique
on Someday This Gonna' make Sense from @Ian.T
"This seems to be more of a RAP than a poem, and I agree with Jim that it needs a good edit and some of the debris removed. Have a go and as this one has good bones we will see what the end product can be, Yours Ian.T"
29 Mon

Received a critique
on it's better if she doesn't know... from @Ian.T
"It is four years now and about time this one was polished for the new Neopoet, Yours Ian.T"
December 2013
16 Mon

Received a critique
on Winter To my Summer Heart from @Ian.T
"A lovely name, and as your words are a tribute to the gentle fall of snow in its whiteness. I haven't enough time to read more of your works but you stir a beauty here in these two parts. In the first part you have put…"
October 2013
01 Tue

Anniversary
5 years of membership
December 2012
18 Tue

Received a critique
on "Pantoum For The Christmas" from @weirdelf
"It's not Jesus' birthday it's the solstice, which has much more meaning in terms of the seasons, the coming of the light etc. Also while giving gifts it is the highest suicide time of the year, why not practice love and…"
16 Sun

Posted a poem
"Pantoum For The Christmas"
"Everyone's searching for that magical star"
Open thread 16 lines
December 2011
27 Tue

Received a critique
on A Story From The East (Inspired By The West) from @Candlewitch
"My favorite lines: back to the trail where I fell dead with a dance and breeze so that little by little I could retain courage to leave this fright, whenever the ghost of her is drawn to my dimming sight... I liked your…"
July 2011
08 Fri

Posted a poem
The Other Side Of A Love Story
"You don’t have to say that you’re already bored,"
Open thread 16 lines
June 2011
12 Sun

Posted a poem
I Thought You Know
"i thought you know,"
Open thread 16 lines
10 Fri

Critiqued
"What Will Tomorrow Bring ..." by @kaligantsaros
"nice theme ...only the verse needs to be paid a little more attention....it sounds a bit good for a poet..but when the poem is read by a "normal" reader,who will be the very reader of poems, will see it as confusing..an…"
May 2011
19 Thu

New follower
@Barbara Writes
03 Tue

Posted a poem
A Story From The East (Inspired By The West)
"It's more of a Friday night though it's a Sunday morn"
Open thread 16 lines
March 2011
30 Wed

Posted a poem
More Than Just A Dream
"the graphics of the past always blur her way,"
Open thread 16 lines
22 Tue

Posted a poem
"LISA"
"when the clouds up there stop playing across,"
Open thread 8 lines
February 2011
10 Thu

Posted a poem
She's Not My Loss
"she said no,"
Open thread 12 lines
January 2011
05 Wed

Posted a poem
Winter To my Summer Heart
"a new image of life fell down from the clouds"
Open thread 8 lines
December 2010
23 Thu

Posted a poem
It's Christmas!!
"the nights were now filled by wonderful carols"
Open thread 8 lines
22 Wed

Posted a poem
Through Pains and Tears
"there are times where i cannot see,"
Open thread 8 lines
20 Mon

Critiqued
"Master's degree in frozen hearts (edit) " by @mona
"the flow is great..the word usage is pretty good too. i like the theme.. coz i also encountered a person like whom mona dedicated the poem... what i like most here was the pattern of the poem..i think you are good in fr…"
20 Mon

Posted a poem
(untitled)
"maybe in the way of owning your loving heart"
Open thread 8 lines
07 Tue

Posted a poem
Into The Stars
"i looked up in the stars then made a wish,"
Open thread 20 lines
October 2010
31 Sun

Critiqued
"Lacerated " by @lou
"i guess you mean "your eyes"..right? but great write by the way..keep it up.."
June 2010
27 Sun

Critiqued
"Fate Vs. Will" by @Diatom Shells
"great work...it is important that in writing you have something that connects the readers with what your work is trying to imply or mean.. gratitude for that.. always take care^^ "i'm the kind of poet who likes to revol…"
March 2010
25 Thu

Critiqued
"At the End of My Rope" by @docmaverick
"this is where pessimism and optimism is grabbing a heart of man...nice shot..speechless.. "i'm the kind of poet who likes to revolutionize poetry.trying to put the usual and unusual in the same mix.." i want to hear fro…"
25 Thu

Critiqued
"Three" by @Diatom Shells
"body..good...logic..consistent..all is well...i'm watching for the number two... p.s.: this numbers can match my verses 1 to 15 haha.. "i'm the kind of poet who likes to revolutionize poetry.trying to put the usual and…"
February 2010
22 Mon

Critiqued
"CYBERGRANNY!!!" by @Dustyverse
"yeah..great job..you entertained readers..provided that the stuffs here were on-the-date..but let me tell you a suggestion,why dont use literary formality on ur works..?"
15 Mon

Highest posting month
February 2010 — 8 poems
14 Sun

Critiqued
"Four" by @Diatom Shells
"were u the girl on that one..i think..are u talking bout adam and eve.. watever it is...you got the flow magnificent..keep it up.. "i'm the kind of poet who likes to revolutionize poetry.trying to put the usual and unus…"
January 2010
31 Sun

First critique offered
on "Le Rossignol ::English and French versions" by @Geremia
October 2009
01 Thu

Anniversary
One year of membership
October 2008
01 Wed

First publication
Spent A Day With Him
01 Wed

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

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Mastering in the Experimental Poetry..

Location: Laguna, PHL

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William Shakespeare And the NeoPoet Family

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15 years of membership

10 years of membership

on Through Pains and Tears from @weirdelf

on It's Christmas!! from @weirdelf

on The Invention from @weirdelf

on Someday This Gonna' make Sense from @Ian.T

on it's better if she doesn't know... from @Ian.T

on Winter To my Summer Heart from @Ian.T

5 years of membership

on "Pantoum For The Christmas" from @weirdelf

on A Story From The East (Inspired By The West) from @Candlewitch

"What Will Tomorrow Bring ..." by @kaligantsaros

"Master's degree in frozen hearts (edit) " by @mona

"Lacerated " by @lou

"Fate Vs. Will" by @Diatom Shells

"At the End of My Rope" by @docmaverick

"Three" by @Diatom Shells

"CYBERGRANNY!!!" by @Dustyverse

February 2010 — 8 poems

"Four" by @Diatom Shells

on "Le Rossignol ::English and French versions" by @Geremia

One year of membership

Membership begins

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