TheDarkOne

Member since April 20, 2011

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Untitled

Posted Dec 15, 2015 · 27 lines · 3 critiques

A whisper of breath
breaks the silence
A whiff of the sweetened air.
I stare.
...a strained gasp

The sun sweeps the room
caressing your skin
A caramel kiss I crave.
You stare.
...a soft smile

The dust dances in the air to the distant melody
Your hands in mine...

A yearning that echoes in defiance,
yet never came to pass

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You fade, a remnant husk
A rift in what could have been.
An unfleeting memory
edged on the horizon of my mind

I remember. A hollowed souvenir
A flashback bereft of existence.
Spawned of my idleness
surviving only as a distorted antiquity

The cold reality closes around me
You were never mine

Just the whisper of another life
I dream had come pass.

LM 2015/12/15

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April 2026
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Anniversary
15 years of membership
April 2021
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Anniversary
10 years of membership
April 2016
20 Wed

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5 years of membership
December 2015
18 Fri

Received a critique
on Untitled from @wesley snow
"It's as good or better than your other works. Why the apprehension?"
15 Tue

Received a critique
on Untitled from @wesley snow
"I must say though that it bordered western structure in its form. Elegantly written with style. I can make but one suggestion. Use "a" before a consonant and "an" before a vowel. The line below should read "a". survivin…"
15 Tue

Posted a poem
Untitled
"A whisper of breath"
Open thread 27 lines
November 2015
18 Wed

Received a critique
on Into Tartarus from @Sparrow
"Dare you dwell in those places, well I think the answer is yes if it produces a write as this one. I look forward to your next pieces, Yours, Ian.."
16 Mon

Received a critique
on Into Tartarus from @wesley snow
"Fantasy is my thing and this doesn't disappoint. Excellent piece. Good to see you again."
16 Mon

Received a critique
on Into Tartarus from @raj
"Excellent word usage with so many unique verses, not sure which one is better than the other... Regards,"
16 Mon

Received a critique
on Into Tartarus from @emeka ozurumba
"I like the way the plot is unraveling into the perplexed nature of understanding dreams in relevance to the soul or life in relevance to death"
16 Mon

Posted a poem
Into Tartarus
"A single step"
Open thread 25 lines
March 2015
29 Sun

Received a critique
on Oblivion Stirs from @Malice2112
"Now its time to expand on it. I'm a big fan of the idea of oblivion. Still this word as with any others that describe a place or an idea are open to interpretation. So while I may not define oblivion quite as exact as y…"
27 Fri

Received a critique
on Oblivion Stirs from @wesley snow
"With line breaks. It is good prose. It makes me want a little more. An adventure stirs and I want to be aboard. However, as poetry it lacks any sort of rhythm. There is no "dance" in the line. It simply goes on wherever…"
26 Thu

Posted a poem
Oblivion Stirs
"My eyes open."
Open thread 29 lines
June 2014
18 Wed

Posted a poem
Cerberus
"They are buried away, far away."
Open thread 35 lines
August 2013
28 Wed

Posted a poem
Flame
"Drops trickle down my second skin."
Open thread 23 lines
18 Sun

Posted a poem
Death
"It creeps,"
Open thread 19 lines
14 Wed

Posted a poem
The Rising
"Thoughts."
Open thread 19 lines
13 Tue

Posted a poem
Siren Song
"I stare into the rays,"
Open thread 28 lines
June 2013
27 Thu

Posted a poem
Ragnarök
"I sit atop the Frozen Throne"
Open thread 23 lines
25 Tue

New follower
@lonlyhrtsclub13
25 Tue

Posted a poem
The Invisible Man
"I pass, like the"
Open thread 18 lines
May 2013
31 Fri

Posted a poem
Shadow
"Your voice calls from the Dark"
Open thread 22 lines
April 2012
20 Fri

Anniversary
One year of membership
April 2011
20 Wed

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
June 2010
03 Thu

Posted a poem
Les Dossier Amor
"I do not know how to explain myself.  I do not know how to bring forward the things that rest in my prime.  I want to be with you, but I know I shouldn’t.  The pages of history past have written that I should cease to pursue what I want.  It would seem that fate has cast aside the path I wished to walk, the sights that should have reveled my eyes.  The dizzying scents that flow the misty air."
Open thread 14 lines
December 2008
21 Sun

First publication
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About Me

About me

I am based in Cape Town South Africa.

I work as for one of the big university's IT Department, in Security. I started writing when I was 12, most of the things I wrote then were lost to time, guess that happens when only single copies exist(lesson learnt, a few times). I do not know where my writing is headed, but I know it's something I will be doing for a while and with that, why not get better.

My ability to enjoy a book is usually hampered by my own mind getting side tracked, so it's been a very long time since I managed to finish anything I start reading. Little habit I'm still actively trying to break, it's probably one of the few ways to grow in writing, so definitely a must.

I'd like to thank you well in advance for any comments on my work.

Location: Western Cape, South Africa, ZAF

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