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Ayaz Warith
Member since July 9, 2010
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Eternal Love
I have my eternal love for you
And feel your love so cool like
A slice of red succulent watermelon
In the hot sands of my life here
And the thirst that parches the throat
Of an Arab on his golden camel
Of half closed eyes and hanging lip
Upon whom the journey of life
Is really a challenge.
And when he bites a cucumber in thirst
It circulates in all his veins and arteries
O really my heart is wet like that in love
And I have the same contentment
But only in a form of abstraction.
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Even if we are miles apart, I believe
There is my love for a single human being
The masses will pass like stations
With brief stoppages in my life
Anyhow I have to bear the painful journey
It’s only transient here and the rest
Is waiting for me somewhere with eternity
With the blessings of my Creator.
I watch the people and their love
With their stories stuffed in my heart
Like a postman whose cycle is loaded
With letters and parcels and gifts
He delivers them all from door to door
But for him there is none.
There are many pearls of your
Remembrances in this young heart
When I am with locomotion on my limbs
And muscles that contract my movements
The days with you are beaded
On the string of my life like garland
My days with you is a symbol
For both of us in both of the worlds
But not for any kind of a lesson
You know what I am talking about?
O! You are never gone I know
Separation is not non-existence
At least for me and a soul I love
I have made the cages of books
You will be locked all years, all decades
For me and me and me always.
Ayaz Warith’s timeline
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08 TueAnniversary
15 years of membership
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08 WedAnniversary
10 years of membership
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08 WedAnniversary
5 years of membership
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30 TueReceived a critique
on Displeasure? from @Ian.T
"This piece needs a little edit and for you to reply to loved, we comment on poems to encourage the poet to learn more and improve their writing, so lets see what you can achieve here, Yours Ian.T" - March 2012
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03 Sat
- July 2011
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08 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- June 2011
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10 FriNew follower
@faithmairee
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02 ThuReceived a critique
on To a Colonel's Daughter from @loved
"Ecstasy with a Colonel’s Daughter Love, Sex and Ecstasy Are defined in love stories Of Romeo and Juliet, Sohini Mahival Laila Majnu And so on They all end in suicide, But love with a Colonels daughter Is like living in…" - May 2011
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20 FriCritiqued
"Oh what a day" by @TheUnknownAuthor
"Waldo, I read this poem only once..........but sang it many times. Don't want to critique. I liked this one. Regards Ayaz" -
18 Wed
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18 WedCritiqued
"Imperfect Future" by @Tam the Chanter
""In all your love you attempt to grow Though you’re fat and bald and slow.".......Ayaz Warith" -
18 WedCritiqued
"FOR ANNE" by @Tam the Chanter
"a-b-ab....c-d-c-d....e-f-e-f....g-g.....great, and I liked the metrical feet (structure)....the inception is not as powerful and mindblowing as the ending...but I must say I LOVE THIS SONNET. Thank you so much. Regards…" -
17 TueReceived a critique
on Last Night from @Nordic cloud
"I found this fascinating the imagery and the thoughts, I see Orphani and Anna have hinted at things so will say no more about the poem. It is a special one I think. "Where eyes had all imaginary reels."...I didn't under…" -
17 TueReceived a critique
on Waiting from @TheUnknownAuthor
"To be quite honest, I've been reading through a lot of your work, trying to find something to comment on. This poem was the first that I've been able to, but I must say that I've enjoyed all the rest that I read as well…" -
17 TueCritiqued
""Ian!". "Has left the Building"" by @yenti
"This poem surely has much concept of what is involved from beginning till end. The idea...the notion is really different and a truly remarkable achievement....great. Regards Ayaz" -
17 TueCritiqued
"Shattered Dreams" by @xena465
"This entire poem is my taste, but I don't know why I loved the second and the last stanzas....but here it would be better if you incorporated 'nor' in place of 'or'...... "Perhaps it’s my simplicity, my spirit I may not…" -
16 MonReceived a critique
on Last Night from @scribbler
"It is impossible,I think< to describe All the thoughts that could go through Everybody's heads in this instance. So please do not take "pretty good" to be damning by faint praise lol............stan" -
16 MonReceived a critique
on Last Night from @loved
"Rather than a wonderful poet, I once read some Urdu poem somewhere Last night the crumpled bed sheet Indicated the sojourn You undertook In the middle Of a stark helpless, Lonely night, As you braved the surf alone Well…" -
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14 SatReceived a critique
on Cruel Love from @magics02
"Ian and the site are trying to cease anything more on this. Can you please try also." -
14 SatReceived a critique
on Cruel Love from @magics02
"Another slight at me again?? Repetitively, un-grammatically, and jingoistically." -
13 FriNew follower
@Rett
- March 2011
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12 SatNew follower
@franny50
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07 MonNew follower
@magics02
- July 2010
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10 Sat
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09 FriFirst critique offered
on "Dead Man Walking" by @xena465
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08 ThuFirst publication
Someone is Calling by my Name
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08 Thu
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08 ThuJoined Neopoet
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First poem published 1 days later.
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