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Eclipse

They caused the eclipse of my regal love,
Dashing my spirit and corporal strength,
Mutilating my extremities completely;
I really could have gone to any length.
With venom of thousands of serpents,
You poisoned my love just for your kin;
Dipping utterly in pale, saffron form,
My broken visage and entire skin.

You part yourself between them and me,
With my root in your whole existence;
And as in my hands is a half-torn book,
Half-reading is beyond intelligence.
Listen to the heart thuds that rock,
The world of love of present and past;
The thud of axe in the dark woods,
Will cease with the fall at long last.

I reject all terms and compromises,
For no trade exists in love, I reiterate;
And whole life is there for surprises,
To show my barren heart menstruate.
There is an end of every single atom,
And then again a spark in the coming life;
Just after a break of short siesta,
There incredible pleasures are rife.

Desertion is never the closure of gate,
Of love that fostered on our Belief;
The hope is there for me to radiate
From my heart the final relief.
Before you wake up to see who I am,
Brittle my body will be like date seed;
Never you repent on the terrible loss,
Any happening, any act, any deed.
— Ayaz Warith, Jul 11, 2010

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xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Geeze Ayaz

Wow this is so good. I was totally entranced with the whole write. Brilliant, I can't say more than that, as it's way beyond my expertise to add more. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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Ayaz Warith

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Xena

I am so happy that you like my poem, and I want to read yours as well. I have read some of your poems here, and they are my inspiration. It seems that you are very comfortable with your language. Plz post more poems. Now, I want to ask the meaning of the word "Geeze" as you have written here with my name. It will be so nice of you if you plz explain it to me. Thanks again! Love and regards. Ayaz Warith
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Geeze...

Is just a figure of speech as in "Wow, great, love it, kind of expression I use to say I'm impressed and really like it. I think some people spell it `Jeeze` as in Jesus, but I prefer not to use his name and spell it with a `G`. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Brilliant Poem

Dear Ayaz-I could feel your sadness and frustration as I read your wonderful poem. Your title is great and use of language very good. Good strong writing! This is really profound! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
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Ayaz Warith

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Faith...

I am happy that you liked my writing. You can also tell me the errors if there is any. That's how I am going to improve. I know you poeple are more experienced than I am, and plz post your poems as well so that I can get chance to stir my feelings to write more. Thank you very much for your beautiful comment, faith. Love and Respect! Ayaz Warith
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Here you are Ayaz

we have met in chat room ,this is amazing work,and the title fits it. Eclipse ,,,dear Ayaz,,,GREAT WORK. Mona
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Ayaz Warith

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Mona

Yes, I remember we have met in the chat room. I remember you told me that you had an invitation from Delhi, right? So, you like my work. I am really happy, and I will be much happier if I have a chance to read your poems. plz post your poems too. I really want to read you. Thanks again, Mona. I hope you will be a very good friend of mine. Love and Respect! Ayaz Warith