Tam the Chanter

May 14, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

FOR ANNE

What can I tell you, Love of mine?
That I have never told before.
To say "I love you" one more time;
How many times? who's keeping score?

Another day dawns, for we two,
We face the world , we are a pair.
For what I am, then so are you;
The one for whom I deeply care

I feel the years now have some weight
They start to slow me but its true
That I can face my final fate,
For I've been blessed by loving you.

The years ahead may be too few
But what the hell, you've me - I've you!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Comments

scribbler

14 years 11 months ago

hi Roscoe

Here was old stupid just reading along making note of alternatives then I came to last 2 lines and it finally got through my skull this is a sonnet lol. A well written one in my opinion . And one to which I relate well............stan

Tam the Chanter

14 years 11 months ago

sonnets

Thanks for taking the time to read this, and for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed it.
Regards

Ian

Tam the Chanter

14 years 11 months ago

sonnet

Thanks for the kind words, Lonnie, glad you approve

Regards

Ian

Psyve

14 years 11 months ago

Tam the Chanter,

Like Stan, I too was wondering about the meter till I came to the last two lines and then it all fell into place.
Went back and read the whole thing, and it read WONDERFULLY well. All fell into place.
A sweet sentiment, and one which doubtless should win you favour with Anne.
My compliments,
Psyve

Tam the Chanter

14 years 11 months ago

sonnets

Thanks for the kind words, and for taking the time to visit. Yes, she still falls for it lol

Regards

Ian

Ayaz Warith

14 years 11 months ago

A Shakespearean Sonnet

a-b-ab....c-d-c-d....e-f-e-f....g-g.....great, and I liked the metrical feet (structure)....the inception is not as powerful and mindblowing as the ending...but I must say I LOVE THIS SONNET. Thank you so much.

Regards

Ayaz

Tam the Chanter

14 years 11 months ago

sonnets

One of my favourite constructions. Glad you enjoyed it. I guess I am a bit blinkered by rhythm and rhyme. Thanks for dropping by

Regards

Ian

mand

14 years 11 months ago

Hi Ian

Well written and enjoyable to read. I agree with all of the above. I enjoyed the read.

Love Mand xxxxxxx

Tam the Chanter

14 years 11 months ago

Hi Mand

Thank you very much for the kind words. I'm trying now to make a poem from a joke. This could be a whole new Genre!(depending on how good the joke was to start. I started with "DECEPTION"

Love

Ian xxxx