Dark_Death

Member since January 7, 2010

Member for 16 years, 4 months

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Self Conflict

Posted May 2, 2012 · 8 lines · 3 critiques

Dazed with pitiful bleary eyes
Spirit hopeless but in disguise
He acts strong but inside he cries
His life he wish he could revise
Bound to fail even if he tries
Anger explodes with no surprise
Blood an tears will fall as heart beat rise
Then fall asleep and meet his demise

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January 2025
06 Mon

Anniversary
15 years of membership
January 2020
06 Mon

Anniversary
10 years of membership
January 2015
06 Tue

Anniversary
5 years of membership
May 2012
03 Thu

Received a critique
on Self Conflict from @Candlewitch
"I much like these lines: His life he wish he could revise Bound to fail even if he tries Anger explodes with no surprise I also agree with the suggested changes by Rula. always, Cat"
03 Thu

Received a critique
on Self Conflict from @Rula
"A nice piece to detect the human feelings and what sometimes we intentionally like to hide or show. I believe this is something human ..I like the opening two lines very much Dazed with pitiful bleary eyes Spirit hopele…"
02 Wed

Posted a poem
Self Conflict
"Dazed with pitiful bleary eyes"
Open thread 8 lines
November 2011
12 Sat

Received a critique
on Abuse from @lou
"I like the theme and each stanza rhymes well, but they are little like lists, there might be little more flow if the third stanza rhymed with the first and fourth stanza with the second. lou"
11 Fri

Posted a poem
Abuse
"He Lives with more than one abuser"
Open thread 12 lines
January 2011
06 Thu

Anniversary
One year of membership
February 2010
11 Thu

Posted a poem
Dream
"Lately shit and words just won’t get threw"
Open thread 16 lines
January 2010
15 Fri

Highest posting month
January 2010 — 8 poems
11 Mon

First critique offered
on "Sorry" by @Silent_Rain
10 Sun

Most-discussed work
No Eyes

11 critiques to date.
06 Wed

First publication
What Am I?
06 Wed

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.