The Voice

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While Other Things Happen

Posted Nov 30, 2009 · 29 lines · 3 critiques

The shoppers shop their lives away
while religions kneel to stop and pray
for the kids who sit on the couch all day
to watch music on TV

While just down the block not far away
is a young girl raped with scars to stay
when the men are done, she'll smile and say
"I'm fine, just let me be."

Across the street, another dies
just two floors up somebody cries
for a son that bleeds but holds to lies.
The gang wont set him free

But the shoppers shop their lives away
while religions kneel to stop and pray

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for the kids who sit on the couch all day
to watch music on TV

Across the seas live hungered eyes
no food, no water, who hears thier cries?
No hero be? what man may rise
for the the hungry world we see?

While just next door, both night and day
the parents fight for kids who stray
they fight for custody to get their way
and ignore their childrens plea

Still.....
The shoppers shop their lives away
while religions kneel to stop and pray
for the kids who sit on the couch all day...

to watch music on TV

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Received a critique
on Blind Princess from @shirley harrison
"what a fantastic poem full of life and love "wonderful" shirley harrison"
December 2009
21 Mon

Received a critique
on Dark Orb from @weirdelf
"what does the line we breathe but of undead mean? I like the gothic atmosphere you create but it feels a bit contrived. I haven't checked out you other work yet, mostly because I follow comments to find interesting poet…"
November 2009
30 Mon

Received a critique
on While Other Things Happen from @poewriter58
"I felt every word of your poem. You are spot on with this one Chrys"
30 Mon

Received a critique
on While Other Things Happen from @ngaioBeck
"This is your best so far,(in my humble opinion) I personally love any verse with a repetition of a theme.We always return to what you have identified as a major flaw in our society."
30 Mon

Received a critique
on While Other Things Happen from @Candlewitch
"I think this poem would make great lyrics. It really says something about today's society. Always, Cat"
30 Mon

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While Other Things Happen
"The shoppers shop their lives away"
Open thread 29 lines
28 Sat

Posted a poem
Dark Orb
"Dark orb of the universe"
Open thread 20 lines
27 Fri

Received a critique
on Man In A Dark Black Suit from @ngaioBeck
"Your writing becomes very interesting by the application of one of the oft quoted dicta of Americas' famous folk(sic) poets the great Yogi Berra, catcher/manager of the New York Yankees, through the application of his (…"
26 Thu

Received a critique
on Walking In The Rain from @michael
"That sounds touchingly beautiful. :)"
25 Wed

Received a critique
on Walking In The Rain from @Candlewitch
"We have not met before, so let me say "welcome." I used to love to walk in the rain, too. I really like how this poem flows. It touched a chord in me. Always, Cat"
25 Wed

Posted a poem
Walking In The Rain
"The drops come down"
Open thread 18 lines
19 Thu

Posted a poem
Man In A Dark Black Suit
"a troubled man"
Open thread 78 lines
15 Sun

Highest posting month
November 2009 — 6 poems
09 Mon

Critiqued
"Oedipus in Catharsis" by @ngaioBeck
"Your flow is awesome! Not just in this poem but your others as well. The concept of this one has an eerie tone to it. Kinda creepy. I thought the way you ended it was interesting, you left the last stanza one line short…"
09 Mon

Critiqued
"Auntie Sam" by @Rett
"Interesting poem. I'm curious, is it referring to ones overwhelming protection over another in proclamation of supposed love? I think this poem is honest and thought-provoking. Thank you for your contribution. The Voice"
04 Wed

Posted a poem
Blind Princess
"Once upon a time"
Open thread 36 lines
03 Tue

Critiqued
"the dancer" by @smilecatcher
"Beautiful imagery. Your choice of words really paint a portrait within the mind. Thank you!"
03 Tue

First critique offered
on "the dancer" by @smilecatcher
03 Tue

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If
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If
"If I had the power"
Open thread 40 lines
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on Blind Princess from @shirley harrison

on Dark Orb from @weirdelf

on While Other Things Happen from @poewriter58

on While Other Things Happen from @ngaioBeck

on While Other Things Happen from @Candlewitch

While Other Things Happen

Dark Orb

on Man In A Dark Black Suit from @ngaioBeck

on Walking In The Rain from @michael

on Walking In The Rain from @Candlewitch

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November 2009 — 6 poems

"Oedipus in Catharsis" by @ngaioBeck

"Auntie Sam" by @Rett

Blind Princess

"the dancer" by @smilecatcher

on "the dancer" by @smilecatcher

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