Edevold

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Just friends

Posted Oct 19, 2012 · 44 lines · 1 critiques

Lately this just friends
Thing seems more like a one
way street than any kind
Of friendly relationship

one can't help wonder
if you wouldn't feel better
just doing your own thing

Does a person really
need that many
Friends anyway .....
Just a few good friends
that should be sufficient
But we all have some
want or need to be liked

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some friends can be
A burdensome dissapointment
at times
And a drain on ones energy.. ....
Which, I don't have all that much of
and time....
Extra time and/or energy

And ...
Things always get complicated......
Like when
Phone calls get dropped
At the most inconvenient
Moments
left hanging ........
wondering and somewhat frustrated ......

Then the conversation can shift to texting ...... OMG .......
Text messages just tend
To aggravate instead of inform

It can be sadly wearing -I get tired ............

Then....
More and more frequently
These fucked up moodswings
Come on so suddenly.
And .........
They can recede slowly ....... unevenly......
Or linger ...........................
Like an soggy damp overcast
Morning that turns into
A gloomy overcast cold dark
Endless rainy night

Edevold’s timeline

July 2023
07 Fri

Anniversary
15 years of membership
July 2018
07 Sat

Anniversary
10 years of membership
January 2015
05 Mon

Received a critique
on The morning After a November Storm from @mand
"I absolutely love this Haiku - the imagery is iconic of the next day after a winter storm - white and pristine! but it comes with a deep bitter cold. I'm not sure if it really matters but the second line has eight sylla…"
05 Mon

Received a critique
on The morning After a November Storm from @Esker
"descripts spot on....'fierce' indeed it is.. Thank you!"
02 Fri

Received a critique
on The morning After a November Storm from @weirdelf
"it works for me"
December 2013
16 Mon

Received a critique
on Closer to Home from @Ian.T
"Found this at the bottom of the pile here in "Undiscovered works" The theme is OK now you must put it to poetry. At the moment it reads as a diary entry with suggestions thrown in. Needs a rythme and rhyme you have all…"
July 2013
07 Sun

Anniversary
5 years of membership
November 2012
09 Fri

Received a critique
on Just friends from @Seren
"I cant see anything that needs to be changed, its well crafted ... it sounds like someone really depressed with their life ... its a depressing read dont know if that was your intention but it is I will read some of you…"
October 2012
19 Fri

Posted a poem
Just friends
"Lately this just friends "
Open thread 44 lines
18 Thu

Received a critique
on And ..... from @themoonman
"Love the idea and the write, the only suggestion would be to come up with a catchier title and remove all but perhaps two of the "ands", just a suggestion, good to see you here. Richard"
18 Thu

Posted a poem
And .....
"And,........"
Open thread 24 lines
January 2011
02 Sun

Critiqued
"everything that is killing you" by @Kailashana2
"I really think you wrote a heckuv an awesome poem here!!! Two thumbs up."
December 2010
19 Sun

Received a critique
on I'll try this again from @Kailashana2
"Hmmm. Seems to me that you're saying poetry is not obviously oblivious to subtlety. I wonder what you mean by that? lol. ~Anna"
19 Sun

Received a critique
on I'll try this again from @Victorclaude
"Oh, I do love it so . . . This one made me smile~! We both get points. Victor"
19 Sun

Critiqued
"TAKING RISKS" by @scribbler
"I like the way you just let your consciousness and thought flow into this poem..... Kudos It's not great, but it's good,,, and thoughtful, and a good shot of honesty with some flow......(again the word flow) I like your…"
19 Sun

Critiqued
"una oración" by @Victorclaude
"mucho aplauso y aclamacion ......... Bueno!!!!"
15 Wed

Posted a poem
Pumpkin pie
"There's really nothing better"
Open thread 21 lines
14 Tue

Posted a poem
I'll try this again
"Don't expect a clever rhyme"
Open thread 26 lines
09 Thu

Posted a poem
What happened ?
"Please tell me the story"
Open thread 23 lines
07 Tue

Posted a poem
Closer to Home
"We all do our small part"
Open thread 47 lines
06 Mon

Critiqued
"PRISMS" by @scribbler
"I could hear the ice cracking on the lake as it was freezing (already 10" +) , it was about the 12th of November here in Northern MN.... I still refuse to hunt in headed stands/blinds - nothing like sitting in a tree an…"
06 Mon

Critiqued
"PROMISCUITY'S PRICE ( THE EPIC )" by @scribbler
"splicing that all together.........."
06 Mon

Posted a poem
A long string of horseshit poems
"when you're just not"
Open thread 27 lines
06 Mon

Critiqued
"Forgotten Briefly" by @Race_9togo
"you should have put in a line like: and I stayed half hard more or less all day damn distracting that perfume I liked the poem..........."
06 Mon

Posted a poem
less is more
"It got me thinking"
Open thread 29 lines
03 Fri

Posted a poem
coded message
"under the layers"
Open thread 21 lines
November 2010
28 Sun

Critiqued
"desert love" by @Victorclaude
"I'm not much of a commentator, but I like this poem... not quite as visual as "a normal day", but thoughtful, and thought provoking..........."
27 Sat

Posted a poem
Neurotransmitters
"Each of us humans"
Open thread 20 lines
26 Fri

Posted a poem
The morning After a November Storm
"The snow is here now"
Open thread 3 lines
26 Fri

Critiqued
"a normal day" by @Victorclaude
"It's awesome................."
24 Wed

Posted a poem
Nothing to write about
"Sometimes it starts this way"
Open thread 32 lines
July 2009
07 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
August 2008
02 Sat

Most-discussed work
No more Love Letters

10 critiques to date.
July 2008
15 Tue

Highest posting month
July 2008 — 8 poems
08 Tue

First critique offered
on "Why Should I Read " (since unpublished) by @amalzamani
08 Tue

First publication
It's not that easy
07 Mon

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

15 years of membership

10 years of membership

on The morning After a November Storm from @mand

on The morning After a November Storm from @Esker

on The morning After a November Storm from @weirdelf

on Closer to Home from @Ian.T

5 years of membership

on Just friends from @Seren

on And ..... from @themoonman

"everything that is killing you" by @Kailashana2

on I'll try this again from @Kailashana2

on I'll try this again from @Victorclaude

"TAKING RISKS" by @scribbler

"una oración" by @Victorclaude

"PRISMS" by @scribbler

"PROMISCUITY'S PRICE ( THE EPIC )" by @scribbler

"Forgotten Briefly" by @Race_9togo

"desert love" by @Victorclaude

"a normal day" by @Victorclaude

One year of membership

July 2008 — 8 poems

on "Why Should I Read " (since unpublished) by @amalzamani

Membership begins

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