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Dark Red crooked lines
If thou is to touch thys heart make sure to be careful
becuse this heart is mane of glass
with dark red crooked lines that go thugh it.
Thy's glass heart can't hold anymore of these dark red crooked lines
there are too many
The dark red dripping though the lines and landidng on thy's hands
There is too much thy's hands cant hold it all
One more of these lines and thy's heart will shatter
Shatter into a million tinny pieces
When this happens thy's hands will overflow with all this dark red substance
And thy's heart will be broken forever and no longer exist in this dark cruel world
Thy will no longer own a heart
Thy will never love again
Thy gives you her last chance
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- February 2010
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19 FriReceived a critique
on Dark Red crooked lines from @yenti
"Woops this is a lovely piece but the spelling needs attention, read some of the others poems and comment here and there then write this one again, you have written it well but have muddled it a little, Yours Ian.T" -
07 SunReceived a critique
on one... from @poewriter58
"most and cherish are the correct spellings short but to the point may I suggest a title change as the title you have will not attract attention as it has been overused Chrys" - January 2010
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25 MonFirst critique offered
on "Wings" by @odd molly
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23 Sat
- November 2009
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27 FriReceived a critique
on I give you a black rose from @Dalton
"This is a loving yet naive write, and I don't mean that as a criticism by any means. probably the wrong word, what I mean is it has a certain childlike innocence, as if the poet has a wise head on young shoulders, the r…" - June 2009
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12 FriFirst publication
I give you a black rose
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11 ThuJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
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