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Abi
Aug 17, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hiding behind this fake smile

Ive been hiding behind this fake smile for so long
I'm perfect, I can fool anyone.
I barley remember but i remember some of me
I remember there was a time when I smiled and my smile was real
when I would laugh of joy and happiness
back then when I loved with my heart 
not like now that all I can say is "I think I love you".
I got used to this all of this, living this so called perfect life
where everyone looks at you and says "they make a perfect couple"
But if only they knew what was behind my chest, in my heart  
if only they knew that as i keep wrighting more and more tears flow down my face
not of happyness but sadness
because in my head I am knowing that its to late
to late.
I got used to being alone and sad
I dont want to ever be happy i like being alone its beter

some people brake up and cry saying I miss him (her) but the truth is they're just afraid of being left alone


— Abi, Aug 17, 2009

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yenti

yenti

16 years 9 months ago

Abi

Pressed the wrong button so this was a duplicate, Yours Ian.T
yenti

yenti

16 years 9 months ago

Abi

A great touch of life after sadness passes into realisation of the fact that life is ok if you can live with yourself and be true and happy, maybe this is so that you can comes to terms with a situation or pure writing, either way a very good write,with loads of feelings, well done. Picky me wants to correct the two spellings in the line :- where everyone looks at you and sais “they make a perferc couple... Says and a T on the end of perfec and dropping the extra R that's there LOL A small thing in a lovely piece of feelings, Yours Ian.T
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Sourav

16 years 9 months ago

You should be happy. No

You should be happy. No matter you are alone or with someone. If you are alone and happy then that's fine. But if you are alone and sad then something is wrong! Live happily that's the mantra! Overall nice emotional write.
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 9 months ago

Hi Abi...

There were many spelling mistakes within this write, are you using any form of spell-check? Even with the spelling errors it is easy to grasp your feelings in this write, and it is important to write it down, and we thank you for sharing! There are repetitive words that could be left out or replaced with others that would make the piece a much stronger poem. If you take a look and read your poem aloud you may see some of what I'm talking about. keep writing and sharing, you are generous with your feelings, and that is a very important attribute in writing. Richard