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TheDarkOne
Member since April 20, 2011
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Untitled
A whisper of breath
breaks the silence
A whiff of the sweetened air.
I stare.
...a strained gasp
The sun sweeps the room
caressing your skin
A caramel kiss I crave.
You stare.
...a soft smile
The dust dances in the air to the distant melody
Your hands in mine...
A yearning that echoes in defiance,
yet never came to pass
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You fade, a remnant husk
A rift in what could have been.
An unfleeting memory
edged on the horizon of my mind
I remember. A hollowed souvenir
A flashback bereft of existence.
Spawned of my idleness
surviving only as a distorted antiquity
The cold reality closes around me
You were never mine
Just the whisper of another life
I dream had come pass.
LM 2015/12/15
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- December 2015
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18 FriReceived a critique
on Untitled from @wesley snow
"It's as good or better than your other works. Why the apprehension?" -
15 TueReceived a critique
on Untitled from @wesley snow
"I must say though that it bordered western structure in its form. Elegantly written with style. I can make but one suggestion. Use "a" before a consonant and "an" before a vowel. The line below should read "a". survivin…" -
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- November 2015
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18 WedReceived a critique
on Into Tartarus from @Sparrow
"Dare you dwell in those places, well I think the answer is yes if it produces a write as this one. I look forward to your next pieces, Yours, Ian.." -
16 MonReceived a critique
on Into Tartarus from @wesley snow
"Fantasy is my thing and this doesn't disappoint. Excellent piece. Good to see you again." -
16 MonReceived a critique
on Into Tartarus from @raj
"Excellent word usage with so many unique verses, not sure which one is better than the other... Regards," -
16 MonReceived a critique
on Into Tartarus from @emeka ozurumba
"I like the way the plot is unraveling into the perplexed nature of understanding dreams in relevance to the soul or life in relevance to death" -
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- March 2015
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29 SunReceived a critique
on Oblivion Stirs from @Malice2112
"Now its time to expand on it. I'm a big fan of the idea of oblivion. Still this word as with any others that describe a place or an idea are open to interpretation. So while I may not define oblivion quite as exact as y…" -
27 FriReceived a critique
on Oblivion Stirs from @wesley snow
"With line breaks. It is good prose. It makes me want a little more. An adventure stirs and I want to be aboard. However, as poetry it lacks any sort of rhythm. There is no "dance" in the line. It simply goes on wherever…" -
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25 TueNew follower
@lonlyhrtsclub13
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- April 2012
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20 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- April 2011
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20 WedJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
- June 2010
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03 ThuPosted a poem
Les Dossier Amor
"I do not know how to explain myself. I do not know how to bring forward the things that rest in my prime. I want to be with you, but I know I shouldn’t. The pages of history past have written that I should cease to pursue what I want. It would seem that fate has cast aside the path I wished to walk, the sights that should have reveled my eyes. The dizzying scents that flow the misty air." - December 2008
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21 SunFirst publication
The Dark One...
About Me
About me
I am based in Cape Town South Africa.
I work as for one of the big university's IT Department, in Security. I started writing when I was 12, most of the things I wrote then were lost to time, guess that happens when only single copies exist(lesson learnt, a few times). I do not know where my writing is headed, but I know it's something I will be doing for a while and with that, why not get better.
My ability to enjoy a book is usually hampered by my own mind getting side tracked, so it's been a very long time since I managed to finish anything I start reading. Little habit I'm still actively trying to break, it's probably one of the few ways to grow in writing, so definitely a must.
I'd like to thank you well in advance for any comments on my work.
Location: Western Cape, South Africa, ZAF
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