loveslave

Member since May 14, 2013

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Haiku no 2

Posted Jun 5, 2013 · 3 lines · 1 critiques

Autumn leaves
floating colours
winter creeps.

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June 2013
07 Fri

Received a critique
on Haiku no 2 from @Ian.T
"As Haiku's go this will need attention, modern English doesn't conform to the strict Japanese ways of Haiku where the syllable count is 5-7-5. But we do try to stay as close as possible to their way of writing. So a qui…"
05 Wed

Posted a poem
Haiku no 2
"Autumn leaves"
Open thread 3 lines
May 2013
24 Fri

Received a critique
on Lead from @Linda
"A very sad read."
24 Fri

Posted a poem
Lead
"Take me quickly oh Lord"
Open thread 36 lines
24 Fri

Critiqued
"CrossEyed" by @eightmenout
"I like it. I like the way it reads and I love some of the imagery you've created. It feels angry and desolate to me...I like that."
23 Thu

Critiqued
"A short poem" by @Nordic cloud
"I love haiku. I myself at times try to create good haiku but it's actually more difficult than it seems. It's a challenge, trying to stay within the 5/7/5 three line structure but it's fun nonetheless. Your poem speaks…"
22 Wed

Critiqued
"21 May 2013 (Relativity Workshop) " by @Beauregard
"I like this. It's short and sweet but enigmatic at the same time. Conjures up all sorts of illusions, like the smoke itself maybe... one second it's there and the next it's changed or dissipated completely and you're le…"
22 Wed

Critiqued
"21 May 2013 (Relativity Workshop) " by @Beauregard
"I like this. It's short and sweet but enigmatic at the same time. Conjures up all sorts of illusions, like the smoke itself maybe... one second it's there and the next it's changed or dissipated completely and you're le…"
20 Mon

Received a critique
on Mist from @eightmenout
"I see you are fairly new and asked for moderate/constructive criticism so I will try to be gentle. Please let me know if I overstep. That being said, the theme is a bit cliche as are some of the words (coffin, blood, st…"
20 Mon

New follower
@lonlyhrtsclub13
20 Mon

Posted a poem
Mist
"A coffin lowered"
Open thread 3 lines
17 Fri

Received a critique
on Snow from @lonlyhrtsclub13
"me and rhyming. Sometimes I can make it good, more than often I can't pull it off. All in all, a good poem. I like the concept and the general theme. The images were quite good as well. I would like to see you use some…"
15 Wed

Received a critique
on Snow from @Geezer
"a lot of repetition here. I'm sure that you can consolidate some of these verses and make use of the different ways you describe the flying away. For instance: I'll watch it fly away endlessly floating forever soaring a…"
15 Wed

Critiqued
"Fading Mask" by @arsinBW
"A Suicide poem, correct? That's how I interpreted it anyway. I think it's good when poets tackle difficult, uncomfortable issues in their poems. Poetry should reflect reality, both the good aspects of it and the really…"
15 Wed

Posted a poem
Snow
"I'll take your hate"
Open thread 34 lines
14 Tue

Joined Neopoet
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First poem published 1 days later.
August 2009
01 Sat

Received a critique
on Ninevah from @yenti
"This piece has a fasination of it's own and rings many things in the lines even with the repitition it still rings and somehow holds me to read it all, yet I know deep inside that the cry should be heard and the man tha…"
01 Sat

Received a critique
on I have seen the Ocean. from @Sourav
"I love this passionate write. Something very interesting to read. Nicely done!"
July 2009
31 Fri

Received a critique
on I have seen the Ocean. from @Taylor Delaware
"The passion you put into this and the passion of the words cause quite a stir. Great work!"
30 Thu

Critiqued
"you, noting sapphos" by @whitetea
"This is so beautiful and so delicate and haunting. No idea what it's about could be so many things? It has a childlike quality something innocent and playful but it's also emotive, full of complex imagery. Sweet!"
30 Thu

Posted a poem
I have seen the Ocean.
"Winter has fallen,"
Open thread 30 lines
January 2009
08 Thu

Posted a poem
Ninevah
"Here it is, the story of a man, who went out walking by the sea"
Open thread 29 lines
06 Tue

Posted a poem
Pericardium
"Preadatory, carnal, I hunger, I seek, I thirst, I yearn for your honey and your poison."
Open thread 11 lines
November 2008
28 Fri

Critiqued
"Jewellery" by @Robert Melliard
"I like this, its short and sweet but theres a lot of truth to these words. What else do we have but our memories? Our experiences? Truth is found in the seemingly small and unimportant its not found in overblown, vulgar…"
28 Fri

First critique offered
on "Jewellery" by @Robert Melliard
28 Fri

First publication
November
28 Fri

Posted a poem
November
"Hear me, see me, feel me, breathe me,"
Open thread 13 lines

About Me

About me

I'm Scottish and proud of it. Of course I love poetry otherwise I wouldn't be on here. I love reading it and thinking about it and of course trying to create it once in a while. I don't consider myself to be a particularly talented poet and I'm sure that there are plenty of poets on here who are more talented than I am but I write honestly and from the heart so maybe I deserve a little credit for that at least?... Maybe not lol. I'm naturally drawn to anything which has a real sense of sadness and pathos and I guess my ultimate poetic ambition is to write poems which have a real sense, a true sense of sorrow and pathos about them. Well, that's a bit about me... tell me about you...

Location: Scotland

Favorite Poets

Sylvia Plath

Diamanda Galas

Stevie Smith... Carol Ann Duffy

to name but a few.

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lonlyhrtsclub13

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on Haiku no 2 from @Ian.T

on Lead from @Linda

"CrossEyed" by @eightmenout

"A short poem" by @Nordic cloud

"21 May 2013 (Relativity Workshop) " by @Beauregard

"21 May 2013 (Relativity Workshop) " by @Beauregard

on Mist from @eightmenout

on Snow from @lonlyhrtsclub13

on Snow from @Geezer

"Fading Mask" by @arsinBW

Membership begins

on Ninevah from @yenti

on I have seen the Ocean. from @Sourav

on I have seen the Ocean. from @Taylor Delaware

"you, noting sapphos" by @whitetea

"Jewellery" by @Robert Melliard

on "Jewellery" by @Robert Melliard

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