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louiemary
Member since October 21, 2008
Member for 17 years, 7 months
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Just walk away
When you see trouble
You better run in a double
So just walk away
There is no reason to stay
You are more of a man
Takes that kind of stand
Remember what I say
Just walk away
You don't have to be tough
You can say that's enough
You did the right thing
So that your soul can sing
Just remember to think
You don't have to have that drink
louiemary’s timeline
- October 2023
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20 FriAnniversary
15 years of membership
- October 2018
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20 SatAnniversary
10 years of membership
- October 2013
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20 SunAnniversary
5 years of membership
- May 2012
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20 SunReceived a critique
on Just walk away from @temidayo
"yes it sounds better as an overall message of plea,an attempt to dissuade a person from hurting others and ultimately hurting himself or vice versa. You have people like the wonderful judy giving you tips so you cant go…" -
20 SunReceived a critique
on Just walk away from @judyanne
"the more I read this over the more i liked it. just the beginning annoyed me a little 'When you see trouble You better run in a double So just walk away' - the actual saying is ‘run on the double’, but that wasn’t the p…" -
20 SunReceived a critique
on Just walk away from @Candlewitch
"Good title it reflects the poem well. Suggestion: In the last line: You don't have to have that drink how about: You don't have to take that drink Good subject matter! always, Cat" -
20 SunReceived a critique
on Just walk away from @docmaverick
"...you have one major, "false rhyme", and that's "man"....and, "stand"...in your third couplet. Other than that, you have delivered a fine effort. Sincerely, docmaverick." -
19 Sat
- April 2012
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09 MonReceived a critique
on Waiting for my love from @Ian.T
"To learn of these thing as they happen and to know is a present, to let you build a barrier for the things that come. Better to embrace that lovely light sent with the wings of a dove to start with then that feeling of…" -
09 MonReceived a critique
on Waiting for my love from @Nordic cloud
"Are the tenses mixed on purpose or is it me? Because of that my reading of the poem is stilted, but that may again, be just me. I permit myself and just throw this out next time I come back.. Waiting for my love to come…" -
09 MonReceived a critique
on Waiting for my love from @Candlewitch
"It is incredible... I was thinking of the Titanic as I read this! Although many women have awaited in vain for the return of fishing boats to return from expiditions. Waiting, holding a lonely vigil for their brave men…" -
09 Mon
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09 Mon
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03 TueCritiqued
"A WALK IN THE WILDERNESS" by @t. reflexion
"I know this is late, but is this workshop still good to do? I just want to do a workshop on my poetry and maybe get better on verse writing on poetry." - October 2009
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20 TueAnniversary
One year of membership
- May 2009
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28 ThuCritiqued
"There Is No Time for Goodbyes" by @findlin
"This poem is very good and very well written and I hope to read more of your work in the future. Maybe alittle long but that is alright with me. I can stand along poem. Thank you for letting me read this." -
28 ThuCritiqued
"Lost" by @HeadGames
"It is pretty good and I like the rhyming in this poem. It is worth reading again. It made me feel that I was there in the poem and you have potential to be a good poet just keep working on your poetry." -
17 SunCritiqued
"Dark Road~an acrostic " by @Morgana Tragic Proprietress
"The writing is pretty good except theone line you missed out a word. Killing me slowly, every slash for ripping the. What do you mean your innerslef. I think I would've written "Killing me slowly, every slash for rippin…" -
16 SatReceived a critique
on The Long Goodbye from @Nordic cloud
"I can't quite explain what i mean but I like this in its simplicity. Good title and yet is it a good bye? Or a hi? I just have some suggestions:- ......... As I walk along the stream I want to liveout my dream----------…" -
16 Sat
- March 2009
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22 SunCritiqued
"Summertime in Texas" by @Rett
"At first it didn't start out so good but when I read this poem through I just want to keep on reading. It got alot better I love the rhyming and this poem really told me alot about Texas. I've always knew about Texas. I…" - February 2009
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21 Sat
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14 SatCritiqued
"Icicles cry Haiku" by @prayersbyPatty
"I can't wait till spring comes either. I enjoy this poem and I don't read much on Haiku but I would like to try to write this sometime. Very creative and the writing is good." -
14 SatCritiqued
"The Monkey's Tears" by @Lonnie
"I think this poem is very good and this could be a winner. I really got into this and really understand what you were writing in this poem. Very creative and I would like to read this poem again and again. The writing i…" - November 2008
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17 Mon
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01 SatFirst publication
Where the stallions roam
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01 Sat
- October 2008
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29 WedCritiqued
"The Dream" by @Kailashana
"I wish could read more on this poem and I want to read more of this poem. I hope the stars come out yellow because I might of accidently pressed the button wrong and they came out read. This poem is very creative the wr…" -
29 WedFirst critique offered
on "The Dream" by @Kailashana
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20 MonJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 11 days later.
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