Kailashana

Oct 26, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Dream

Last night i dreamed i saw the light
and then the light was questioned
by a voice
from someone, somewhere else
which side it takes...

the light walked over to the
other side....

and for a moment only darkness
prevailed....

and i saw the frightful face of darkness
pock-marked where the light had burned
through, leering and sneering, snickering
of his darkness, disembodied and without soul

and then the light remembered her purpose
and found herself burning brighter with every
passing moment

and the darkness was no more

— Kailashana, Oct 26, 2008

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Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Anna,

Isn't it amazing how darkness overtakes us at the some unsuspecting moments, and some how we see our way through back to our shining moments. this is so well written I really enjoyed it. this particular line tells it all: "and then the light remembered her purpose and found herself burning brighter with every passing moment" beautiful!! Thanks, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

And I love your quote

And I love your quote Eddie.... May have to borrow it on occasion. It's strange... few read and even fewer comment on my poems and sometimes I think I won't post any more. What for? And then you and Orgami make me remember that if only one person is touched, it is *enough*. Thank you both. Love. ~A "Your own Self-Realization is the greatest service you can render the world." Shri Ramana Maharshi

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Anna,

Do not let that thought cross your unstoppable and amazing mind, because there are few people who can see far ahead beyond the darkness and you are one of them!! Never stop posting, please! Thanks, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo

Janice Pearce

17 years 7 months ago

~A

Anna You are one of a kind, and your words touch the souls of others don't ever second guess yourself. Your in-depth words are appreciated here. "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Anna

Never thought to personify light and dark - interesting! Nice work. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"So you stand on the corner in your new English clothes, and you look so polished from your hair down to your toes. Ah, but still your finger's gonna pick your nose after all." - Billy Joel

yenti

17 years 7 months ago

The Light

Lovely Piece and well thought of, or written as the thought of light prevailed. I notice that you mentioned people not commenting on work that is submitted, sometimes it is hard to keep up with the volume of things to be done, always remember that your work will be there for always, and will be read time and time again by a lot of poets and other writers, they most times only read, but read they do and get great pleasure from your work and that of others. I myself don't like to vote on poems as I cannot read them all and that would be biased. Today at this moment, I have your light to follow, Thank you and keep up the lovely poems, Yours Ian.T We always learn from others if we have a chance of learning most things here.

Arrow

17 years 7 months ago

I second Yenti.

"they most times only read, but read they do and get great pleasure from your work and that of others." I read a lot more than I comment on. I think I catch most of yours. I hope you don't stop posting.

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Anna...

sometimes we can't help but have discouraging days, I hope that is all you are having... and I hope that your friends and fans here can maybe set you at ease about whether or not you are getting read... I can't say there are not poems I miss but anytime one of yours is there ... I read it.. I am guilty as well of not commenting enough... time is a commodity that I often don't have much of... hoping here to spread it out a little along with a little love Richard and oh yea... liked your poem! the light and dark... one without the other would leave an unbalanced state of affairs... but that isn't quite the way the was meant... right?

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

Sad smiles. I am guilty of

Sad smiles. I am guilty of not commenting on many many poems and many poets have come and gone since my arrival. Once in a while I just do a mental inventory, an emotional housecleaning so to speak; where is my time best spent? Truth be told, I enjoy the conversation as much, maybe more, (as if that ain't obvious!) it's real and not subject to well, you know what i speak of....and i was actually debating about just enjoying our debating... Many thanks and really, my ego is not that huge....but poems die an unnatural death if no one reads them, eh? Light. ~A

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Beautiful Anna

This was well thought out and written and so true. Thanks for sharing this. Patty

zarul

17 years 7 months ago

HI KAILASHANA

Personally, this is a poem that needs me to read it several times to get the full messages.and this is such a nice poem that contrasting bth light and darkness. and it tells us that the good always win over the bad, just like all happily ever after movies. nice job 5 stars for you, my dear friend SMILE GREAT DAY ZARUL

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

One star is enough…. the

One star is enough.... the one reading.... for we are all stars of our own tragedy/comedy/drama/love story... until we stop waking up. ~A

professor

17 years 7 months ago

The light it is always coming and going Anna

the trick is not minding the darkness and having an inside track on who or what currently has control of the damn light switch lol. Does light really have a conscious purpose i wonder or is it merely elusive because we often fail to find or generate it within ourselves? If the light does have independent purpose then we are indeed "as flies to wanton boys". Your poem made me think, as always. Keith

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

In essence, Keith, this was

In essence, Keith, this was a real dream I awakened with... In dreams we can see clearly that we are the dreamer...playing all parts with gusto. So this is a poem about seeing the seeming aspects of creating differentiation, then attributes... then feelings... then awareness... And we are also "as flies to wanton boys". In as much as we make much ado about nothing... in this dream of life. Love makes all dreams possible and bearable. ~A

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

why can't you delete an accidental 2nd posting?

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Anna

Congrats on spotlight. Put a 100 watt bulb in that sucker, and make it burn bright. :~) ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"When there's no good answers, and no new questions. Another personal disaster, there's nowhere to go but down..." - Gin Blossoms

Mark

17 years 7 months ago

The best poem

This is the best poem about a dream I have ever read. Thanks, Anna. I also pictured the light as sort of moving around. As the world turns, yes? Mark Man thinks this.

louiemary

17 years 7 months ago

very good

I wish could read more on this poem and I want to read more of this poem. I hope the stars come out yellow because I might of accidently pressed the button wrong and they came out read. This poem is very creative the writing is done fine. I want to read more of your writing okay.

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

I never know about this

I never know about this spotlight thingy.... is it supposed to be a surprise? Now i feel guilty for bitchin' would it have made the *spot* if i hadn't? Questions on a Wednesday evening... Thank you one and all. Now get that damn light out of my eyes!!! Smile! ~A

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Your complaint had nothing to do with this poem being spotlighte

Do not doubt yourself, This poem is in the spotlight because its great and people loved it, voted and decided. Some of my poems get lonely too, but this one was very well written. Patty

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

Anna, Beautifully writte

and an interesting take. Personifying light and dark is quite good. I sometimes wonder how many would choose the dark and how many the light. I prefer the light. Excellent write and I enjoyed it tremendously. Good work! BTW, congrats on a deserving spotlight. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008

Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 7 months ago

Kailashana

Your poem is really worth reading. Very well articulated. When darkness of despair comes it seems that all is gone. Then the bright sun of hope arises banishing the darkness. Your work is always enjoyable. See, what a response you have from the poet fraternity. -Mohammad

TheLetterJ

17 years 7 months ago

awesome.

love this poem. especially the last stanza. great job!

pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

D'ONT

direct anything at me you can piss off, even worse then when your ancestors were native American Indians when you are saying God bless America-God belongs to the Supremacist( take over another peoples country and attempt to obliterate them) White man-DONT DIRECT ANYTHING AT ME RIGHT-PISS OFF ONCE MORE-

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

do what?

I think you're on the wrong poem, Pink. This has nothing to do with anything you've just said... ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"The fortunes of fables are able To see the dawn Now witness the quickness with which We get along To sing the blues you've got to live the dues and Carry on." - CSN&Y

yenti

17 years 7 months ago

Pinksheep

If you take some Grey paint, which is a mix of black and white, and put it over your words they will seem a lot better. I notice that you are from Manchester in UK and as I am from that country, I am forced to say that I would like to see constructive comments here, and this one confined to the recycle bin after it has been painted with grey, so that it cannot even be read in there, Yenti

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

er…????? ~A

er...????? ~A

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

Well, aside from pink

Well, aside from pink (perhaps i am mistaken and you did write in response to the poem?), many thanks to all who read and commented. Weird dream so I guess one weird response is in order. Lol. Nachos gracia, ~A

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

Well, I don't quite understand

What pink was trying to say. I he is upset with us American or what. Struck me as odd. Still love the poem Anna. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008

vonnegutfan

17 years 7 months ago

kailashana,

It’s strange… few read and even fewer comment on my poems and sometimes I think I won’t post any more. What for? Don't write for them, write for you, the rest will take care of itself. Also do not, doubt you're talent it is real.

pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

DULL

poem- also study more art history- also using colour well is good in art, also using black and white and shades of this OK TO-D'ONT LECTURE ME- D'ONT WANT TO POSSESS ART IT IS IN GALLERIES FOR JOE PUBLIC NOT JUST SOLELY FOR YOU YOURSELF-

pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

DULL

pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

Also

c'ant find that other spotlight poem by infinite , got it wrong white man did not attempt to obliterate the planet of other people and their cultures he actually succeeded in doing this-

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

What?!

I'll leave this one last comment, so as not to be too rude on Anna's page... Pinksheep, you totally misunderstood my poem. I was saying that other people would like to see America obliterated. It had nothing to do with white, black or red - there is nothing racial behind the poem. I take high offense to your statement. I think you should take a crash course in demographics, history, and general social science. Everyone's culture is intact - you need only visit the countries - or read a book. I don't know where you're trying to go with all of this naff praddle, but I would suggest highly not to try to engage me in this sort of arguement.... you will not win. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"If your mother still drives you to school, you ain't no 'gangsta', pull your damn pants up!" - Bill Engvall

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

Pinksheep, I ask this with a

Pinksheep, I ask this with a straight face, mind you: Are you from Alaska? ~A

tbeaudet

17 years 7 months ago

kailashana, why does where Pinksheep is from matter?

You refuse to give us any of your own details. What's good for the Goose is good for the Pinksheep? http://www.neopoet.com/node/12548

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

The question was the comment

The question was the comment (and the comment was the question in case you didn't get it Tom, perhaps making a quantum leap to the *inside joke*)... no need to get all riled up again. ~A

gumpymonkey

17 years 7 months ago

your poem

The ambiguity of your message seems to enchant fools and intellects alike in this piece. It swing rings deep echoes of some thrown away by Johnny himself Cash song napkins and does not tell a real story. More of a suggestion of built up events. Inflated events that lack an inverse or conclusion. Dark vs. Light. Whoopity f'ing doo. We both know you are better than that. Better than being romanced by the fifty-fifty obviousness of life. Push me Kailashana. Are you suggesting that just because the female "light" heroin recognizes herself...she negates darks existence? How trite/loose ended. Give me something more!!! _an actual critic of spotlight fever

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

O my…. i gave you what I

O my.... i gave you what I had from the dream.... you are free to extract, detract, subtract, retract, keep intact anything of substance, consequence, influence, confluence negating or infuriating obfuscating overrating, sublimating, reiterating, tolerating whatever precludes includes vicissitudes hindsight insight and respite, viewing skewing misconstruing and ruing whatever the poem inhaled exhaled railed failed or detailed in the mining of your mind. However, never mind the mind. ~A

gumpymonkey

17 years 7 months ago

I am trying to remove

this comment I made while overly inebriated. I apologize for it and wish it would give me the option to remove it. Those are the types of comments my subconscious makes without my approval. I do tend to be critical when everyone else is praising a pieace, but this is overly harsh. It also does not take into the account the positive qualities of the piece. A very ignorant mistake by my drunk self. Again I am sorry you were the target of my ramblings. _dan

gumpymonkey

17 years 7 months ago

hot

nevermind

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

I took no offence cause I

I took no offence cause I felt nothing to *defend*. That about does it. And the subconscious is a good thing to let out of the trick or treat bag once in while. Trust me, it's the stuff of poetry.. :-) ~A

Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 7 months ago

Kailashana

It is sheer madness. Enough is enough. I advise you to stop answering any more comments. "Jawab-e-Jahilan bashad khamoshi" -Mohammad

Tink

17 years 7 months ago

i enjoyed your poem. being

i enjoyed your poem. being a "good over evil" type of person, your piece ignited hope for me. thank you. please keep posting, i feel the same way you do, i check with anixousness to see a encouraging word or critic to make me think of how to do better, i feel so let down when there is no new comment or even none at all. please continue. and thank you.

pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

Infinite

but wot is all this about GOD-GOD belongs to the white man, I am aware that not all people of 'colour' will agree with this sentiment-I am from woollyback land Manchester Salford, i am white, and i can not stand Bruce Springstein-John Coltrane and Pavarrotti-Puccini are names i like to hear-Even i cringe at the name Bruce Springstein not 'serious' music like Paco de Lucia- etc etc etc

pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

Infinite

Jasmine

17 years 7 months ago

Amazing

What a beautiful flow....so filled with hope... Jaz