The Long Goodbye

hey liked this one .. it has a nice flow but I have one suggestion hun I think accomplished would work better than accomplish Just a suggestion but I liked the poem anyhoo .. you take care Love and light JayC x

This was touching, but I do agree "accomplished" would work better for that line. Well done.

I didnt meen the content sorry I should have been more specific its the middle of the night here ... I liked the imagery you gave someone reaching out as if grasping at something just out of reach but it becoming closer as you earn more right to have it ... still a good poem JayC

I can't quite explain what i mean but I like this in its simplicity. Good title and yet is it a good bye? Or a hi? I just have some suggestions:- ......... As I walk along the stream I want to liveout my dream-------------------live out It maybe out in space I’m battling in my own race I have looked out real far To reach out for that only star That I haven’t accomplish much-----------------accomplishED It can be so far for me to touch I can’t wait this long For a new song The long goodbye I rather say hi------------------------------I'd rather... To be with you To earn everything that is due Yours Ann of Norway