alanna_91

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The One

Posted Jul 2, 2010 · 21 lines

The pain I feel,
I can't explain,
The tears I shed,
Are just the same.

I go to bed,
And think of you,
The time we spent,
Talking it through.

I long for you,
I can't go on,
The photograph's,
Now you are gone.

My heart is torn,
It'll never mend.

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I need you here,
To dry my tears.

I want you here, by my side,
To kiss me goodnight,
And talk to me.

So after I write this poem tonight,
I'll cry myself to sleep tonight.

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02 Fri

Posted a poem
The One
"The pain I feel,"
Open thread 21 lines
December 2009
12 Sat

Received a critique
on My sister. from @Millage
"I have just come across this one and I think it is wonderful. Heartbreaking. Much love Millage x"
November 2009
05 Thu

Received a critique
on My sister. from @lyz
"Your heart I feel is as caring and as beautiful as this tribute to your sister. Well done, love Lyz. Xx"
05 Thu

Received a critique
on Dad from @lyz
"A sad tale indeed, and straight to the point. Well done. Love Lyz. XX"
October 2009
26 Mon

Received a critique
on My sister. from @Candlewitch
"I like the poem, but I feel it could have been better structured. Something like this: I pretend it (didn't) happen, I even hide the tears, I try and fight my feelings, But I cant control my fears. (Every time) I close…"
23 Fri

Critiqued
"That's not what I am really like" by @Millage
"I really liked this one. I wish i was as good as you love alanna xxx"
22 Thu

Critiqued
"Gizelle" by @lyz
"I am new to neo poet. However, i really like this poem. It is full of feeling and thats what poetry is all about i suppose. I also liked the suspense until the end the ending is one of the things i liked most. I look fo…"
20 Tue

Posted a poem
My sister.
"I pretend it didnt happen, I even hide the tears, I try and fight my feelings, But I cant control my fears. Everytime I close my eyes, I pretend you are still here. I think about those memories, Then remember you are not here. Your face is just a picture, Your eyes are full of pain. Your body completely motionless, You had to slip away. I was not there to see you, Or to hold your hand. I will always blame myself for this, Not being by your side."
Open thread 1 lines
19 Mon

Received a critique
on Dad from @Pseudonym
"Hey there.. although your piece is very very short, i still felt the emotions.. what i also like is, you didn't drag it out, you said what you wanted to and think is needed.. well done :) take care :)"
19 Mon

Critiqued
"Little Sister" by @NaughtyTony
"I feel part off your pain, I lost my sister 2 years ago. My thoughts and prayers are with you, the pain will never fade but all I can say is your sister would be very, very proud of you. You are very brave going through…"
19 Mon

First critique offered
on "Little Sister" by @NaughtyTony
19 Mon

Received a critique
on That Day from @Kailashana
"Just practice, practice, practice! (By writing, no matter how good folks think you are or are not.) And write from your heart's truth, always. ~Anna There are no strangers in Paradise."
19 Mon

Received a critique
on Dad from @Millage
"Hi, I really like this one. It is a very moving piece and I understand your feelings behind it completely. Much love Millage x"
19 Mon

Posted a poem
Dad
"No-one understands me,"
Open thread 8 lines
18 Sun

Received a critique
on That Day from @Kailashana
"We never know do we? Thanks for the reminder. ~Anna p.s. Please reread for punctuation and sentence structure. There are no strangers in Paradise."
18 Sun

First publication
That Day
18 Sun

Posted a poem
That Day
"The sky was blue and the sun was shining... such a perfect morning! After an argument with my second oldest sister, I finally got off to work. I was already late and by the time i got there my boss was ready to kill me, as I was four hours late. I was literally at work 10 minutes when the receptionist ran through, 'Sarah, the phone for you.' I knew straight away it was my mum, phoning me, asking me to come home and sort things out. I was only partially right. 'Sarah, you need to come home.' For a change her voice was calm, worringly calm. She phoned to tell me to get a taxi home. I knew straight away there was something very wrong. It was out of her character to be calm, especially as I was the one who had behaved badly. Then again, I thought, it was also in her nature to be calm until I actually got home, then she would bawl and shout at me. I got off the phone, burst into tears and worried, as well as feeling guilty about the arguement with Hannah. By the time I got home, (it was only 5 minutes away in a taxi) my brother Ryan was waiting at the front door with my 6-year-old nephew, Michael. 'Go your room and I'll be up in a minute.' My brother said. It was then I knew it was about the argument. His eyes were red, full of bloodshot, that's what he was like when he was angry. He looked me straight in the eye, 'I don't know what mum told you, but... Jaclynn's dead.'"
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