paleoray

Member since June 10, 2014

Member for 11 years, 11 months

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34 Poems

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My Dinosaur Chewed This Poem

Posted Jun 3, 2024 · 13 lines · 6 critiques

My dinosaur found this poem today,
And started biting the letters awa_;
He swallow_d many synonyms,
While I was eatin_ my M&Ms.
The beast kept chewin_ th_ words that rhym_,
Right as I was flippin_ throug_ his spine;
I wrot_, he chewed -
I searched, he spew_d.
Then fina_ly puttin_ my pencil dow_
I scold_d him, an_ he just frowne_.
Thoug_ he’s not a Tyrannosaurus -
He is a carnivor_us Thesaurus.
Down boy!

paleoray’s timeline

March 2025
12 Wed

Received a critique
on Car Problems from @Geezer
"story told in good rhyme. Nicely done. I came back to this because I felt that you deserved a better response than I gave you the first time. I reread this and wasn't satisfied that I had made it clear that it was an in…"
December 2024
28 Sat

Received a critique
on The Dishwasher from @Jackweb
"The poem is a heartwarming portrayal of a lord who hosts a charity gala at his chateau on Christmas Eve, but then humbly washes dishes himself after giving his staff the evening off. The contrast between the luxurious g…"
25 Wed

Received a critique
on The Dishwasher from @Rula
"Always nice to read you! A great narrative piece well told and nice message woven between the lines. Great and enjoyable read."
24 Tue

Received a critique
on Don’t Ever Grow Up All The Way from @Rula
"Thank you for the clarification."
17 Tue

Received a critique
on Don’t Ever Grow Up All The Way from @Rula
"nice to read you again. Welcome back. I like your advice pretty much yet found that the two stanzas contradict-b at least in their first lines. Maybe I've missed something? I know I do. Maybe someone can help out here"
16 Mon

Received a critique
on Don’t Ever Grow Up All The Way from @Lavender
"Hello, Paleo! So good to see your work! This skipped along happily, much like the theme infers. Good advice to your younger self, we can all benefit from these words! I think I might keep "out" as the last word of the p…"
September 2024
14 Sat

Received a critique
on Welcome Home from @Tawny023
"The ultimate prayer is to be righteous in God’s eye My favorite line: all I know is praising has begun , because after reading this poem all I can do is give praise to you the poet for a job well done. Thank you for all…"
13 Fri

Received a critique
on Welcome Home from @Lavender
"Hello, paleoray, A sincere "Hallelujah!" A joyful poem, and an intriguing entry to the contest. Thank you! L"
August 2024
31 Sat

Contest commendation
08/24 Beach Day

with "Shore Watch" (since unpublished).
June 2024
10 Mon

Anniversary
10 years of membership
03 Mon

Posted a poem
My Dinosaur Chewed This Poem
"My dinosaur found this poem today,"
Open thread 13 lines
May 2024
26 Sun

Critiqued
"Mum... You and I" by @Rula
"A well deserved poetry winner. Congratulations. :-)"
26 Sun

Critiqued
" Ethereal" by @David Grigorian
"The passion and emotion expressed in the loss of a love in your poem can be felt in every line. Your last stanza is especially beautiful with its descriptive summation of your love while concluding with its title ending…"
26 Sun

Posted a poem
At The Theatre
"When I saw you across the aisle, I held the arrow that Eros had just flung in me."
Open thread 11 lines
25 Sat

Critiqued
"A WAY OUT" by @tyro
"filled with nature-final days metaphors. I like your last stanza the most which describes the final journey passage to Heaven. I would however capitalize the last word - "God." Thank you for this fine post."
23 Thu

Critiqued
"Homemade Peach Cobbler (Romance Contest) " by @Kristen H.
"Keep the fire burning in a relationship. Those late night drives together to nowhere just to listen to music or just to view the stars together are also excellent kindle burning moments. Thank you for this fine romantic…"
21 Tue

Critiqued
"Granny Overthere." by @Alex Tanner
"As I myself have a strong passion for children's poetry, I have to say that your poem is absolutely wonderful! I love the way you explain how you came about the giving of your Grandmother's name as "Granny Overthere" as…"
21 Tue

Critiqued
"Mum... You and I" by @Rula
"A beautiful poem Rula. Thank you for posting it. :-)"
20 Mon

Posted a poem
Bookworms
"Jasmine and Jeremy loved to read"
Open thread 25 lines
20 Mon

Critiqued
"Artificiality" by @Sen99
"Yes indeed - I agree with you...Artificial Intelligence involved with any form of writing or publication is a big concern I have as well. Our current technological age makes it way too easy to imitate the works of other…"
17 Fri

Critiqued
"Locked In a Basement" by @Michael Keens
"I liked the way you describe different fear and anxiety imagery that runs through your head while being locked and trapped in a basement. This seems to be the main emphasis of your piece. Your caveman imagery is my favo…"
16 Thu

Posted a poem
By Tooth Fairy Rules
"A boxing punch knocked out my tooth"
Open thread 24 lines
04 Sat

Posted a poem
Army Men Memories
"When I was young in my youthful years -"
Open thread 28 lines
February 2024
29 Thu

Contest commendation
02/24 Warning

with "Ghostly Graveyard Warning".
19 Mon

Posted a poem
Ghostly Graveyard Warning
"When the pumpkins turn orange and maples turn red –"
Open thread 24 lines
December 2023
30 Sat

Posted a poem
Old Ailment
"Each time I played some basketball"
Open thread 32 lines
November 2023
17 Fri

Contest commendation
Harvest Feast Image Prompt Contest

with "The Family Holiday Table".
16 Thu

Posted a poem
The Family Holiday Table
"While turkeys are roasting"
Open thread 40 lines
16 Thu

New follower
@M. Browne
01 Wed

New follower
@Clentin
October 2023
31 Tue

Contest commendation
Monthly Contest Halloween

with "Just Move On To The Next House".
28 Sat

Posted a poem
Climbing A Tree
"The grasp of flaky bark holds strong"
Open thread 24 lines
19 Thu

Posted a poem
To A Secret Garden
"Past the gate unhinged and worn,"
Open thread 40 lines
18 Wed

Most-discussed work
Window Smudges

11 critiques to date.
18 Wed

Posted a poem
Window Smudges
"The windows here are cleaned each night"
Open thread 28 lines
15 Sun

Highest posting month
October 2023 — 9 poems
14 Sat

Posted a poem
Just Move On To The Next House
"I wouldn’t walk to the old mill house"
Open thread 28 lines
04 Wed

New follower
@Lavender
September 2023
30 Sat

Contest commendation
Neopoem Of The Week September 24th To September 30th 2023.

with "Symphonic Ecstasy".
23 Sat

Contest commendation
Neopoem Of The Week September 17th to September 23rd 2023

with "A Youthful Enterprise".
16 Sat

Contest commendation
Neopoem Of The Week September 10th to September 16th 2023.

with "In Memory of Our Heroes".
16 Sat

First contest commendation
Neopoem Of The Week September 10th to September 16th 2023.

with the poem "In Memory of Our Heroes".
June 2019
10 Mon

Anniversary
5 years of membership
June 2015
10 Wed

Anniversary
One year of membership
June 2014
27 Fri

New follower
@Bloodstone
13 Fri

First critique offered
on "ON DEAF EARS" by @scribbler
10 Tue

First publication
At Last With Fall (since unpublished)
10 Tue

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

Retired Real Estate Professional
BA in Business Management from NC State University -1983
Married for over 44 years with two grown children and 1 grandchild
Enjoy reading and writing. Have been a writer for over 25 years now - especially love writing children's poetry, creative/whimsical stories and Christian theme pieces. Love animals and love nature.

Location: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets

I have many and not in any particular ranking or order:

Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Alfred Lord Tennyson

Edgar Allan Poe

Robert Frost

Rudyard Kipling

Emily Dickinson

Maya Angelou

Eugene Field

Edgar Guest

Langston Hughes

Ogden Nash

Christina Rossetti

William Blake

William Shakespeare

James Whitcomb Riley

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Contest Wins

Winning Submission	Contest	Contest Date
Shore Watch	08/24 Beach Day	1 August, 2024 – 31 August, 2024
Ghostly Graveyard Warning	02/24 Warning	1 February, 2024 – 29 February, 2024
The Family Holiday Table	Harvest Feast Image Prompt Contest	7 November, 2023 – 17 November, 2023
Just Move On To The Next House	Monthly Contest Halloween	1 October, 2023 – 31 October, 2023
Symphonic Ecstasy	Neopoem Of The Week September 24th To September 30th 2023.	24 September, 2023 – 30 September, 2023
A Youthful Enterprise	Neopoem Of The Week September 17th to September 23rd 2023	17 September, 2023 – 23 September, 2023
In Memory of Our Heroes	Neopoem Of The Week September 10th to September 16th 2023.	10 September, 2023 – 16 September, 2023

Workshops

Followed By

on Car Problems from @Geezer

on The Dishwasher from @Jackweb

on The Dishwasher from @Rula

on Don’t Ever Grow Up All The Way from @Rula

on Don’t Ever Grow Up All The Way from @Rula

on Don’t Ever Grow Up All The Way from @Lavender

on Welcome Home from @Tawny023

on Welcome Home from @Lavender

10 years of membership

"Mum... You and I" by @Rula

" Ethereal" by @David Grigorian

"A WAY OUT" by @tyro

"Homemade Peach Cobbler (Romance Contest) " by @Kristen H.

"Granny Overthere." by @Alex Tanner

"Mum... You and I" by @Rula

"Artificiality" by @Sen99

"Locked In a Basement" by @Michael Keens

October 2023 — 9 poems

5 years of membership

One year of membership

on "ON DEAF EARS" by @scribbler

At Last With Fall (since unpublished)

Membership begins

About Me

Recent Work

Contest Wins

Workshops

Followed By