Natural_Mystic

Member since April 17, 2011

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No visitors allowed

Posted Dec 1, 2020 · 9 lines · 5 critiques

My mother lay there dying,
Her moans in the roars of the ventilators drowned.
I stood outside in the parking lot crying,
No visitors allowed

The thoughts of things left unsaid floated all around.
Things I should have told her before the darkness comes down.
Things I would whisper gently in her ear. Kiss her lovingly on her crown.
It's too late now.

She fades away and the machines quieten down. All that's left for me is to leave the place where no visitors allowed

Natural_Mystic’s timeline

April 2026
17 Fri

Anniversary
15 years of membership
April 2021
17 Sat

Anniversary
10 years of membership
December 2020
02 Wed

Received a critique
on No visitors allowed from @Geezer
"to disagree about the title. It says just what it is supposed to. I have a mother in the nursing home and while she is not infected with the virus, I still cannot go to visit her. My sisters and brother go and stand out…"
01 Tue

Received a critique
on No visitors allowed from @Dandini
"Very sad. Heartbreaking. But the alternative could be worse."
01 Tue

Posted a poem
No visitors allowed
"My mother lay there dying,"
Open thread 9 lines
April 2016
17 Sun

Anniversary
5 years of membership
January 2014
23 Thu

Received a critique
on Down Freedom Avenue from @weirdelf
"I think you've really tightened this up, enhancing rather than losing content. Some people say a poem is never finished. I reckon it is when you say it is. Yet you might consider: Let us dance to a rythm of a new life […"
15 Wed

Posted a poem
Down Freedom Avenue
"Walk with me down Freedom Avenue"
Open thread 14 lines
February 2013
13 Wed

Posted a poem
The end
"So this is how it ends"
Open thread 16 lines
April 2012
17 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
October 2011
17 Mon

First critique offered
on "Requiem For A Dying City" by @Race_9togo
16 Sun

Most-discussed work
Lead me

10 critiques to date.
April 2011
17 Sun

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
July 2009
30 Thu

First publication
Lead Me