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Natural_Mystic
Member since April 17, 2011
Member for 15 years, 1 month
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No visitors allowed
My mother lay there dying,
Her moans in the roars of the ventilators drowned.
I stood outside in the parking lot crying,
No visitors allowed
The thoughts of things left unsaid floated all around.
Things I should have told her before the darkness comes down.
Things I would whisper gently in her ear. Kiss her lovingly on her crown.
It's too late now.
She fades away and the machines quieten down. All that's left for me is to leave the place where no visitors allowed
Natural_Mystic’s timeline
- April 2026
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17 FriAnniversary
15 years of membership
- April 2021
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17 SatAnniversary
10 years of membership
- December 2020
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02 WedReceived a critique
on No visitors allowed from @Geezer
"to disagree about the title. It says just what it is supposed to. I have a mother in the nursing home and while she is not infected with the virus, I still cannot go to visit her. My sisters and brother go and stand out…" -
01 TueReceived a critique
on No visitors allowed from @Dandini
"Very sad. Heartbreaking. But the alternative could be worse." -
01 Tue
- April 2016
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17 SunAnniversary
5 years of membership
- January 2014
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23 ThuReceived a critique
on Down Freedom Avenue from @weirdelf
"I think you've really tightened this up, enhancing rather than losing content. Some people say a poem is never finished. I reckon it is when you say it is. Yet you might consider: Let us dance to a rythm of a new life […" -
22 WedReceived a critique
on Down Freedom Avenue from @raj
"A good concoction of passion, rage and sensitivity is very vibrant and appealing in this piece. Jess & Ian have already provided suggestion which you may consider for the edits which will definitely lift it up.. If this…" -
22 WedReceived a critique
on Down Freedom Avenue from @Ian.T
"I have had time to play with this one and have written it as it came to me about life slaves and liberty:- Walk with me down Freedoms Avenue Let us dance to the rhythms of life anew through the hunger the hardships and…" -
15 WedReceived a critique
on Down Freedom Avenue from @weirdelf
"They usually come across preachy. The message here though is impeccable and the first voice full of compassion. An invitation, not a sermon. My only suggestions are to break Walk with me down Freedom Avenue and we will…" -
15 WedReceived a critique
on Down Freedom Avenue from @Ian.T
"You have the ability to write as is shown here, keep away from repetition and think of how the whole piece comes across when read out loud. (Not that I do) but many give this advice so I guess it is the norm. Split up y…" -
15 Wed
- February 2013
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27 Wed
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- April 2012
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17 TueAnniversary
One year of membership
- March 2012
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28 Wed
- October 2011
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18 TueCritiqued
"The Skin We're In" by @Kailashana2
"I really liked this poem and went through soome of your other poems and its really difficult not to love the way you write I think this is my favourite so far." -
18 TueCritiqued
"Sharing the Night " by @Seren1
"Enjoyed that poem it made me feel so at ease with the world around me thank you" -
17 MonCritiqued
"Requiem For A Dying City" by @Race_9togo
"Amazing amazing send shivers down my spine the moment i read the heading to the very last line. Well played sir well played." -
17 MonFirst critique offered
on "Requiem For A Dying City" by @Race_9togo
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- April 2011
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17 SunJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
- February 2010
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03 Wed
- October 2009
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14 Wed
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- August 2009
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07 Fri
- July 2009
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30 ThuFirst publication
Lead Me
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30 Thu
About Me
Location: Kimberley/Northern Cape/South Africa, ZAF
Favorite Poets
Pablo Neruda
Kahlil Gibran and Maya Angelou
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