Indivisible_Origin

Member since December 7, 2022

Member for 3 years, 5 months

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58 Poems

61 Comments

5 Followers

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Terminus

Posted Dec 26, 2025 · 15 lines · 2 critiques

you fell softly

back into my life

like a promise to

predate all others

pressed on my lips

good intentions tile

the road we traveled

to get here but

speak not of the

terminus today

hell be tomorrow

no god can stop me

from being the

devil you need

tonight

Indivisible_Origin’s timeline

December 2025
29 Mon

Received a critique
on Terminus from @Lavender
"Hello, IO, I felt the urgency in those final lines. Can only wonder about the poem written in the morning - hell be tomorrow. Very strong, L"
28 Sun

Received a critique
on Terminus from @Geezer
"we get a second chance. I like it! ~Geezer. ."
26 Fri

Posted a poem
Terminus
"you fell softly"
Open thread 15 lines
May 2024
25 Sat

Received a critique
on Bedfellows from @Lavender
"Hello, IO, I agree that it is good to read your poetry again. I would never claim to understand the entire work completely, but so many feelings surface when reading: loneliness, discontentment, defiance - and, with tha…"
24 Fri

Received a critique
on Bedfellows from @Geezer
"I feel that I am woefully ill-equipped to understand how deep these pools of poetic feelings are. Your skills of enigmatic writing intrigue me, and I am again, left wondering where I have been when so many of your works…"
24 Fri

Received a critique
on Legion from @Geezer
"or something, to have missed out on leaving a comment on this one. [I am going to claim this every time I miss out, so, get used to it]. I'm sure that I can do no better than the poets here, and their comments; will suf…"
24 Fri

New follower
@Geezer
23 Thu

Posted a poem
Bedfellows
"So that a mighty god from your bosom"
Open thread 34 lines
December 2023
07 Thu

Anniversary
One year of membership
July 2023
15 Sat

Posted a poem
Roots
"you're supposed to have roots"
Open thread 30 lines
14 Fri

Received a critique
on Empathy from @Geezer
"with Lavender, I think I get what your work is saying. That we take our empathy into hostile places, and being soft and squishy, it gets hurt and eventually we leave our empathy home, and it dies of neglect. [Or somethi…"
14 Fri

Received a critique
on Empathy from @Lavender
"As with most of your work, I may not completely understand all the poem, but I get a strong sense from it. A lot of this is very compelling, but the "silent chorus of gods" stands out the most for me. To me, it defies e…"
14 Fri

Posted a poem
Empathy
"you could be a god"
Open thread 18 lines
07 Fri

Posted a poem
Fingerpaint
"I want the moment love ends"
Open thread 26 lines
June 2023
19 Mon

Received a critique
on Kodiak from @Breakinglogic
"I like the title, Kodiak. It reminded me of the idiom no man is an island—which I feel ties back to this piece in a couple ways. It's short but felt whole."
18 Sun

Posted a poem
Kodiak
"I resent the ones that can't tell an errant glance from a second look"
Open thread 11 lines
April 2023
17 Mon

Posted a poem
The Devil You'll Find
"The devil, you’ll find"
Open thread 16 lines
13 Thu

Posted a poem
This Factory Life
"you don't have to scream"
Open thread 55 lines
03 Mon

Posted a poem
Cheshire and Fat
"you be the iconoclast"
Open thread 12 lines
March 2023
31 Fri

Posted a poem
Perdition
"You are the gait poetry takes when it wants a fight."
Open thread 13 lines
24 Fri

Posted a poem
Ink
"Separate brick from bone"
Open thread 26 lines
23 Thu

Posted a poem
Grace
"Mend my break"
Open thread 22 lines
February 2023
27 Mon

Critiqued
"Pretty Girl" by @Abby
"may very well be my favorite of all the pieces I've read on this site by any author"
24 Fri

Critiqued
"Soup." by @Obadiah Grey
"But this is fucking amazeballs. Nicely done."
24 Fri

Critiqued
"The Clown" by @Michael Keens
"This one works for me. Really enjoyed. Thank you."
22 Wed

Critiqued
"A sparrow " by @Rosewood Apothecary
"I used to have a practice of writing one 5 7 5 per day. I found it was good practice and honed my writing. Fantastic imagery packed into a tight format. I see an avian's footprints in snow. Well done."
21 Tue

Critiqued
"Gray" by @Lavender
"It creates quickly a change of scenery for the reader. Veery immersive. Nicely worded generally. I particularly liked "Earth and sky surround me / in a memory of yesterday." IO"
January 2023
26 Thu

Critiqued
"Hybrid" by @RoseBlack
"What of those? Any in your repertoire? I wrote of one once ages ago. I'm a fan of your work."
26 Thu

New follower
@Ekaterina Alexandrovna Sherbatskaya
26 Thu

Critiqued
"Revealed" by @Lavender
"Poetry will not lie. And I've tried. It is a great oracle and equalizer in that way. Of course you have to be a poet to use it And you my friend are every inch that description. Skillfully done. In the mind they riot. I…"
24 Tue

Critiqued
"Sunshine" by @Kristen H.
"A lot. Touching sweet well written and just plain good stuff."
21 Sat

New follower
@Seren
December 2022
21 Wed

New follower
@lovedly
16 Fri

First critique offered
on "Spoonerism (June Contest)" by @Lavender
15 Thu

Highest posting month
December 2022 — 14 poems
07 Wed

First publication
Legion
07 Wed

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

I come from creating and moderating a poetry/prose/microfiction online writer's group now in it's 3rd year and with a membership of over 2000 writers. I'm looking for a new place for my words to call home. I'm in the IT industry by trade. I am a poet at heart and a devotee of the power and the energy that can live in the written word. Especially when they are in the right order. I seem to write best when I have a muse....would be the generous and discreet way of saying I fall in love entirely too much and often with the wrong women but possibly for the right reason I see in doing the diligence good poetry requires. Of course that could just be an excuse. It is for me, all about the words.

Location: Louisiana US, USA

Favorite Poets

Ocean Vuong

ts eliot

Charles Bukowski

Warsan Shire

Rainer Maria Rilke

Contest Wins

This member has not yet won any contests.

Workshops

Followed By

Ekaterina Alex…

on Terminus from @Lavender

on Terminus from @Geezer

on Bedfellows from @Lavender

on Bedfellows from @Geezer

on Legion from @Geezer

One year of membership

on Empathy from @Geezer

on Empathy from @Lavender

on Kodiak from @Breakinglogic

"Pretty Girl" by @Abby

"Soup." by @Obadiah Grey

"The Clown" by @Michael Keens

"A sparrow " by @Rosewood Apothecary

"Gray" by @Lavender

"Hybrid" by @RoseBlack

"Revealed" by @Lavender

"Sunshine" by @Kristen H.

on "Spoonerism (June Contest)" by @Lavender

December 2022 — 14 poems

Membership begins

About Me

Recent Work

Contest Wins

Workshops

Followed By