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A.S.M
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My Heat Stroke
The moment I open my eyes in the morning,
the thought of you appears in my mind
before the light reaches my sight.
I make my bed knowing
you'll mess it up later.
I can still feel the warmth of your touch underneath my clothing,
even though you never undressed me.
I perfectly picture our last encounter,
the hot weather
evaporated our sweat drops.
Vanilla ice cream seemed like the only possible solution.
For some reason I tasted nothing,
maybe because I was too distracted
from sitting on your lap.
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The sweet coldness of the dessert
followed a pattern through my hands,
when I looked up to your face
it was blurred.
I'm not sure whether it was the heat stroke
or the fact my eyes were still closed.
A.S.M’s timeline
- June 2026
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16 TueCritiqued
"Surfer golden shoreline" by @ahooks4660
"The content is amazing but the pacing is confusing, the stanzas get on top of each other and that makes the reader stop to feel in order to understand what is written. I really like it though, it's sensoring atmosphere…" -
13 Sat
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11 ThuReceived a critique
on My Heat Stroke from @Geezer
"that the emotional impact made this sizzle, without being too forward, I liked it ,~ Geezer. ." -
10 WedFirst publication
My Heat Stroke
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10 Wed
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09 TueCritiqued
"Her own will " by @ahooks4660
"I have a question that will help you notice wheter your rhyming is serving the poem or your poem is serving the rhyming: When you wrote, were you thinking about finding the best word to describe the feeling or were you…" -
09 TueCritiqued
"before my time" by @crypticbard
"I'm so glad to see a poem that doesn't force rhymes. The title is amazing!" -
09 TueCritiqued
"before my time" by @crypticbard
"I'm so glad to see a poem that doesn't force rhymes. The title is amazing!" -
09 TueCritiqued
"Going about blogging." by @leeholland115
"I truly believe that not forcing rhymes into a poem is better. A poem does not need them to be a poem, trust your work more and try to ground it into physical details." -
09 TueCritiqued
"Flashdance" by @WylEWriter
"Maybe if you cared less about rhymes your work could gain depth because the words wouldn't have to be restricted to a "sound" and the feeling would have more room to breathe." -
09 TueFirst critique offered
on "Flashdance" by @WylEWriter
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09 TueJoined Neopoet
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About Me
About me
Hi, I'm from Brazil. I'm 18 right now and my favorite poets are Louise Glück and Emily Lawson.
Location: BRA
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