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Dec 22, 2012
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TWILIGHT
TWILIGHT
The sun sets low into the sea
casting phantom shadows
soulless
empty
reflections of me
and I am surrounded
by my own emptiness.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
loved
12 years 10 months ago
such thoughtful
deep poetry
lovely words yours
Ian.T
12 years 10 months ago
Joe
Your first line didn't work for me
"the sun sets low" It has to be low to set
" the sun is swallowed by" Meaning sounds better
Good theme I go along with the despair..
But I await the dawn where all the shadows will melt, to warm my Soul, Yours Ian.T
sueb
12 years 10 months ago
lovely x
lovely x
Nordic cloud
12 years 10 months ago
This is psychologically
This is psychologically subtle,
the movement around you of warmth and coldness
shaped in phantoms of yourself.
I still enjoy this, saw it elsewhere,
as you know Joe.
Love as aye Anni