WonderGolly

Member since January 26, 2012

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DAZED

Posted Jan 24, 2017 · 23 lines · 1 critiques

In my own eyes
I cannot see myself again.
Every vision looms but a
coy and treacherous image of she,
born bright by the spirited moon
mad with beauty of the noon
and drunk with a wildness
many a menfolk are forced to knee.

Tranced in her melancholic abyss,
the sure peril of loss
amid the howling thunders
the echoes,
and the deafening silence
I can no longer hear myself.

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The soul of my time and space;
of my sense of place and thought
are all but misplaced
into a meaningless naught

Finally, and surely - finally,
I am lost in the sea
of a poisonous passion,
and drowned deep in a dream
perhaps not meant to be

WonderGolly’s timeline

January 2022
26 Wed

Anniversary
10 years of membership
January 2020
28 Tue

Received a critique
on DAZED from @cathy mccormick
"i love this. the only word i don't care for is naught. keep in mind i am in the u.s.a. and naught is not a word i often hear. the only line i'm not crazy about is last line first stanza. to me it sounds a little like a…"
January 2017
26 Thu

Anniversary
5 years of membership
24 Tue

Posted a poem
DAZED
"In my own eyes"
Open thread 23 lines
April 2014
06 Sun

Critiqued
"Shadow Valley" by @raj
"most times loneliness is the best company one can ever wish for. Peace. quiet. I like to visit the Silent Valley after u.lol Powerful imagery."
04 Fri

Received a critique
on Into the Beyond and Hope to be Back from @weirdelf
"You were successful in this brave experiment. It is a rare fusion."
03 Thu

Critiqued
"wither by corpus incentives" by @emeka ozurumba
"can't really say that I grasped the imagery of your poem right from the onset except from your LAST FEW WORDS which u took time to explain. But I can say that your choice of words is bold. welcome to Neopoet."
02 Wed

Critiqued
"Friends Forever" by @alidzain
"you must have loved your friend to pour out your heart this. And yet in your sadness you find the light of laughter from memory's house. ”In the whisper of a gentle wind I could hear your laughter, the sweet echoes of o…"
March 2014
22 Sat

Received a critique
on EVEN AS TIME HAS PASSED from @scribbler
"I find this poem to be wistful and beautiful. The only thing that I'd suggest is to find some alternates for using "time" so much. As a sample for alternate words in stanza 1, line 2 you could use memories instead yet s…"
22 Sat

Received a critique
on EVEN AS TIME HAS PASSED from @alidzain
"I do have a poem with the same theme but it is nowhere as good as this one. Thank you for sharing this lovely piece with us. This will be a good reference for me as I try to improve on my writing skills;) Alid"
22 Sat

Received a critique
on LOVE HAS PASSED from @alidzain
"I like this, man. I agree with Jess. It is a class of its own. I'm going to check out the rest of your works. Good job Keep on writing. Alid"
21 Fri

Received a critique
on A Stranger Knocking: from @weirdelf
"and I find the allegory as simple storytelling, which all the best allegory should be. Once again, I offer my reading. http://vocaroo.com/i/s0ePOjnhGfcy"
21 Fri

Received a critique
on Into the Beyond and Hope to be Back from @weirdelf
"and the tone is painted as eerily accurately as an opiated Romantic. I offer you my reading of it. http://vocaroo.com/i/s13gnW3UIdH2"
21 Fri

Received a critique
on LOVE HAS PASSED from @weirdelf
"there is a wonderous elegance to this piece that elevates it beyond the mundane. I will be sure to check out your earlier works. I'm afraid I can offer no constructive criticism however perhaps hearing it in another's v…"
21 Fri

Posted a poem
LOVE HAS PASSED
"Love has passed us"
Open thread 15 lines
November 2013
07 Thu

Critiqued
"Black and Grey (audio link to recorded reading)" by @William Saint George
"Beautiful verses. the melancholy moved me. "There are no happy ever afters on this side of Gloomy Hill." to think that there will be some happy ever after as consolation for our struggle here. sad. nice theme."
September 2013
07 Sat

Posted a poem
EVEN AS TIME HAS PASSED
"Who says this love, our love"
Open thread 20 lines
January 2013
26 Sat

Anniversary
One year of membership
December 2012
11 Tue

Critiqued
"Party Invite" by @Ian.T
"wish I could see the face of the speaker. He is shadowed but his/her voice is clear and precise right from the beginning declaring his "unseen presence". ======== I shall attend your party You just will not see me A can…"
July 2012
30 Mon

Critiqued
"A post depression haiku" by @Conect11
"Good question. and my answer is "yes" man will eat the apple over and over again that human nature. our imperfection is the quality that truly defines our continues existence as we keep on evolving in all aspects of lif…"
30 Mon

Critiqued
"A TAILLESS COW" by @t. reflexion
"A Tailless Cow is a clear cut wording poem that takes one straight to the imagery of a cow farm and then hits one hard with the reality of pain we suffer which we have very little to do in other to find relief. In my vi…"
30 Mon

Critiqued
"Religion and Reality ?" by @Ian.T
"Sure, I do acknowledge your unrelenting comments and contributions in shaping us amateur poets. I was always want to give a second look to my poem before posting because I know mastery minds of your likes do come around…"
05 Thu

Posted a poem
Into the Beyond and Hope to be Back
"If they ask about me, tell them these"
Open thread 20 lines
June 2012
25 Mon

Posted a poem
A Stranger Knocking:
"Knock, knock… knocking on your door"
Open thread 29 lines
20 Wed

Posted a poem
Destiny’s Train
"Although we know not"
Open thread 21 lines
18 Mon

Posted a poem
Solidified Hurt
"Today, I have grown a heart of stone"
Open thread 27 lines
May 2012
08 Tue

Posted a poem
Feast of an Apple Bite
"Asked by them that shaped him"
Open thread 10 lines
06 Sun

Posted a poem
Free Bird
"I am a free bird"
Open thread 18 lines
03 Thu

Posted a poem
Love is Ugly
"To him, love is ugliness hatched from Aphrodite’s beauty"
Open thread 32 lines
April 2012
28 Sat

Posted a poem
Gone Into The Beyond
"Man’s days will soon be vaporized histories"
Open thread 28 lines
27 Fri

Posted a poem
Trapped in a Nightmare
"For some of us, life is but a garden of thorns"
Open thread 31 lines
March 2012
19 Mon

New follower
@Barbara Writes
February 2012
15 Wed

Most-discussed work
The Forgotten

17 critiques to date.
15 Wed

Highest posting month
February 2012 — 10 poems
January 2012
26 Thu

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
September 2008
03 Wed

First critique offered
on "I have a Problem" by @Rio_SU_Kashyap
01 Mon

First publication
A Heated Desire

About Me

Location: Volta / GH, GHA

Favorite Poets

Kofi Awoonor

Kofi Anyidoho

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Workshops

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Working With Meter in Poetry	(syllabus)	Splash Pool	Started 2012-03-20	Concluded

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Barbara Writes

10 years of membership

on DAZED from @cathy mccormick

5 years of membership

"Shadow Valley" by @raj

on Into the Beyond and Hope to be Back from @weirdelf

"wither by corpus incentives" by @emeka ozurumba

"Friends Forever" by @alidzain

on EVEN AS TIME HAS PASSED from @scribbler

on EVEN AS TIME HAS PASSED from @alidzain

on LOVE HAS PASSED from @alidzain

on A Stranger Knocking: from @weirdelf

on Into the Beyond and Hope to be Back from @weirdelf

on LOVE HAS PASSED from @weirdelf

"Black and Grey (audio link to recorded reading)" by @William Saint George

One year of membership

"Party Invite" by @Ian.T

"A post depression haiku" by @Conect11

"A TAILLESS COW" by @t. reflexion

"Religion and Reality ?" by @Ian.T

February 2012 — 10 poems

Membership begins

on "I have a Problem" by @Rio_SU_Kashyap

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Contest Wins

Workshops

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