TheUnknownAuthor

Member since April 8, 2011

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A welcome defeat (Revision)

Posted Jul 11, 2011 · 21 lines · 11 critiques

In death I’ve found love,
Longing,
Desire,
But much more thought of you;
To make it seem right,
With a heart full of anger,
Yet have not found what to do.

Not in my walking. Not in my waking,
It’s fog,
And thought,
And far too many days between;
That I have will, but no feet,
Urge, but no way,
Nor hither that I have seen.

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Besides, I’m too tired,
And wasted,
And spent,
To even think of a way to go;
My plans have all failed,
My toil has borne no fruit,
And fate, it seems, is far too slow.

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July 2011
16 Sat

Critiqued
"You’re Lips Divine " by @loved
"I'm glad there's someone like you out there who can help her, Loved."
15 Fri

Received a critique
on A welcome defeat (Revision) from @magics02
"Okay here is what I did or didn't do for your write and let me say this first. This is a deep write and one to really make the reader think of what your thoughts were under that pen In death I have found Love Longing de…"
15 Fri

Critiqued
"You’re Lips Divine " by @loved
"You asked me if it does the person justice, and I can't honestly answer that without knowing the person. But I'd say that any person should feel honoured to have this written about them, and to have themselves so beauti…"
15 Fri

Received a critique
on A welcome defeat (Revision) from @loved
"please comment on this poem my 1000th poem written at request of someone... do i do justice to the person??"
14 Thu

Received a critique
on A welcome defeat (Revision) from @loved
"My Honour It’s a signal honour, Whenever you visit my leaf, It helps me turn, A new leaf, In my life!"
14 Thu

Received a critique
on A welcome defeat (Revision) from @Kailashana2
"A poet is reborn.... your labour has borne fruit. ~A"
14 Thu

Received a critique
on A welcome defeat (Revision) from @magics02
"I need to go now but in brief reading here I would omit the ands and buts in the beginning of the lines. I have to come back to see about this one later as I let it sit for awhile in my mind It is emotive poetry and I d…"
12 Tue

Critiqued
"SANCTUARY" by @scribbler
"Don't worry about it. Last night was the first time in two or three weeks that I had the time to comment on something here. And actually, as I'm writing this, I'm only biding a few moments before I should start on some…"
11 Mon

Received a critique
on A welcome defeat (Revision) from @loved
"Doesn’t scribble He speaks And if I can add on be positive There’s only 100 years ahead to live In the terms of time It’s just a bubble You have only one choice To flow a while Or burst, As bubbles do So a positive thou…"
11 Mon

Received a critique
on A welcome defeat (Revision) from @scribbler
"Poem has heart and some good bones. I'll throw out some alternatives and let you decide which or any should stick: L-4 try but much more the thought of you ( might clarify meaning) L-7 start with I L-9 try but in fog L-…"
11 Mon

Received a critique
on A welcome defeat (Revision) from @lou
"This poem contains a mixture of pain and beauty, I like the title I think that works. The rythm works for me as does the ending. Lou"
11 Mon

Posted a poem
A welcome defeat (Revision)
"In death I’ve found love,"
Open thread 21 lines
11 Mon

Critiqued
"The River Never Returns Regrafted" by @loved
"And may I share, Fair, bonnie lass, That days do keep, Naught of my form, I am but lost to my own mind, My Twain's distraction, Shared of a kind, But I am here, No less, No more, And shall defend, Those I adore, Fear no…"
11 Mon

Critiqued
"Gerry's Question" by @yenti
"The changes I'd make are small, and inconsequential. It's only because I do things differently anyway. But the message "touched" me, even though I regard myself quite oddly for using that word. The last line's my favour…"
11 Mon

Critiqued
"SANCTUARY" by @scribbler
"*Sigh* That's my initial response, but not in a bad way whatsoever:) Title's fitting. Patterns amazingly peaceful. Slightly grandiose use of language at times, but only when fitting, and only because I like simplicity t…"
11 Mon

Critiqued
"Medea (Edit)" by @Dalton
"...but, wow! Intrigued from start to end! I agree with Yenti; there's nothing I would change. But I would like to know what happens next. Please? Yours Waldo"
11 Mon

Critiqued
"Smokeless..." by @Geezer
"I've got to say, that's one habit I'm glad I never picked up. Though my sister was not so fortunate, unfortunately... ;) It is actually only the last two lines that I can find fault with. The thing is, you speak about "…"
June 2011
07 Tue

Posted a poem
Our Beach
"I looked at you and I felt guilty,"
Open thread 21 lines
May 2011
12 Thu

Posted a poem
Oh what a day
"Oh what a day,"
Open thread 16 lines
11 Wed

Posted a poem
A moment in the many
"The days pass like mist now,"
Open thread 18 lines
April 2011
11 Mon

New follower
@loved
10 Sun

Most-discussed work
Di Vanita (Revision)

53 critiques to date.
10 Sun

Posted a poem
Di Vanita (Revision)
"I wrote once of leaves,"
Open thread 36 lines
09 Sat

Posted a poem
Moonlit eve's & Sunbathed days
"Moonlit eve’s"
Open thread 18 lines
08 Fri

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
October 2009
05 Mon

Posted a poem
A Lonely Breath
"Let poets then dream and cure their strife,"
Open thread 8 lines
February 2009
26 Thu

First critique offered
on "~Inspirations~" by @LissaMine
26 Thu

First publication
True
26 Thu

Posted a poem
True
"When all the world is blue and my sadness does not depart,"
Open thread 22 lines