True

When all the world is blue and my sadness does not depart,
When all the grains seem as thunder and disaster for my heart,

When screaming, writing, even thought eludes my brain,
When hoping and keeping faith seems all to be in vain,

When I cry dry tears that do not wish to leave my eyes,
When I feel like it is time to say my last sad goodbyes,

I will remember then a thing long lost but still my shining light,
I will remember then the soft gentle grace of a touch like a butterfly in flight,

More then the whisper of your voice in my ear,
More then the conscience you were to me, the voice of reason to take away my fear,

Why can I not twirl thee once more across the floor?
Why can we not spin and laugh like once we did before?

Patient then I will be my love, patient for you to be granted by the divine,
Patient then until the day that fate allows you to finally be mine,

Until then my world will be blue and I’ll laugh it off as the sky,
Until then I will dance to the thunderous beat and give my heart the wings to fly,

No more will I stop my screaming at destiny,
No more will I keep my words inside and let thoughts of you get the best of me,

Even though I cannot cry, cry for the love I feel for you,
Even though we may never meet, I will keep course, keep faith, keep myself good and always,
Always to you be true.

— TheUnknownAuthor, Feb 26, 2009

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Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Oh I am sure you will

be true, H.W. and I liked the way you say it with a poem, there's no better way to put such things and they float in the air around you, the words so felt and important to you don't they? I am as I have said here before, not a scholar of poetry but I love it and do something that resembles it in my own way, I like the way your lines rhyme in sporadic lengths. I welcome you if you are new, and hope you will find help, enthusiasm and encouragement to make some more good poems here. Yours Ann of Norway (Is not always cold up here, sometimes too hot for me in the Summer!!) P.S. Thank you for commenting on mine too! Ann

TheUnknownAuthor

17 years 3 months ago

Just call me Waldo

And thank you very much for your comment. Feelings I would say are more important than words, but sometimes the soft bend of a verse and the turn of a word can do more than an elegant touch ever could and can convey more emotion when the time is right, creating world for only the ones that hear the words at that moment in time. I must say that this piece is one of my favourites so I am glad that you liked it. And one thing I think I should state now already though, is that I have never studied poetry, not the forms, the small tricks or anything of the sort. I just get the urge to write and so I do, hence it is likely that my writings won't have any classical form. Point some things out to me if it is something that is more commonly used please, it should be interesting to see what I have unknowingly done:) Yours truly Hern Waldo Pienaar (As I said, just call me Waldo)

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

What a wonderful name you have

Hello Waldo, Where does it come from? I have been looking more closely as I had intended and have a few thoughts, you can ignore them but here goes:- ...faith all seems to be in vain, (?) its a clearer statement and not necessarily poetic as you have it. When I feel like it is....The 3 last words are a little colloquial, they are pure American, not English More THAN (?) or have I misunderstood? More THAN(?) Patient then I will be my love.........a long line that seems to disrupt the rhythm a bit here I think I love the ...blue..."laugh it off as the sky" an odd saying but so nice as a surprise. Well there you are

TheUnknownAuthor

17 years 3 months ago

Hmmm

Germanic and Tuetonic I think and you do have a couple of good points here. The first one I respectfully disagree with but the second I apologise for, I really had no idea it was American, the curse of Americanisation I'm afraid. As to the "More then" "More than" question, I intentionally put it as "More then" because it is actually an extention of the previous two lines where I said, "I will remember then..." So in essence it is the list of things to be remembered that goes on there. In hindsight, yes, the "Patient then I will be my love..." bit does break the rhythm but I just can't bring myself to change the words because then it would change the meaning as well. Thank you for these points, if it continues like this then maybe one day I'll have learnt enough not to make mistakes anymore, a man can hope for perfection at least:)

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Oh don't curse the American language

I would not like to be the one to bring forth such a comment, the American is American and as such is correct, I should perhaps not have mentioned it as it is commonplace for them, its only me being bl-British that found it didn't fit, I have no right to judge other's languages, none of them are logical or even sensible in any case, thank goodness, as we can toss and tumble among them in the most fantastic ways and make poetry out of them. Yours Ann

TheUnknownAuthor

17 years 3 months ago

Oh of course

Meant no offence to the Americans, it's purely just that I was taught the British way and I'd like to keep to that. I wouldn't want my native language to be insulted so I wouldn't do it to someone else either.