Kira ~ who rescued who?

Perfect words, and great rhyme, to describe something so sad. 

why did you stop? I wanted to know the ending of the story! Has she been adopted? I've known too many "backyard" dogs, dogs that are never let in the house, because they get too wild! Well, sure, it is a big deal for them, they are happy, jumping around, and the next minute, they are back outside looking at the house, like what happened? it sounds like they are still having fun...

I think you better go back and write another story about how she has been adopted and living a great life. ~ Geez.

"then" ?,,,, "than" ?,, a bit pernickety I know!

The previous keeper of the dog ought be shot.
As for Who rescued Whom,
I rather think that You rescued Her,
then She set You free.,,,,, hopefully.


Obi

impatiently, by the way.  ~ Geez.

Tink the poem powerfully captures the bleak reality of animal neglect, specifically focusing on the physical and psychological toll of tethering a dog. The title, “Kira ~ who rescued who?”, introduces a redemptive arc, suggesting that while the speaker saved Kira from her chain, Kira ultimately brought profound meaning or healing to the speaker's life. This creates a beautiful contrast with the stark, heartbreaking imagery of the stanzas that follow.

The imagery of the "chain" and "circles" serves as a poignant metaphor for helplessness and stagnation. The poem shifts beautifully from the physical constraint—the literal length of the chain—to the psychological cage it creates ("your mind suffered too").

The final lines touch on a deeply insightful aspect of canine neglect: the loss of socialization. By noting that Kira had "no interactions, no teachings of who was friend or foe," the poet highlights how isolation strips an animal of its ability to understand and navigate the world, making the eventual rescue even more profound.

To elevate the poem's professional polish and natural rhythm, a slight adjustment to the grammar and syllable flow in the second couplet would enhance its impact.

The word "then" should be "than" to correctly indicate a comparison.

The phrase "that kept you from being free" feels a bit rhythmically crowded compared to the clean pacing of the opening line. Streamlining the wording can make the line hit harder emotionally.

Fixing this minor typo and smoothing the meter ensures that the reader remains fully immersed in the emotional gravity of Kira's story without getting tripped up by the phrasing.

This is great I loved it 

You are such an incredible writer

Wow looks great Tink!

I would wrap it in a knitted shawl.  Give it a warm bath in flea soap then rinse it with warm water.  Give it some dogfood with fresh egg then off to the Vet!

I would need at least 1000 in my pocket. With that I know I could maintain it.:

If the dog is alert, walking, and has no visible wounds, a baseline "all-clear" visit to a standard clinic typically ranges from $250 to $500.

Because this dog was chained up, the vet will focus heavily on parasites and basic immunity. Here is a realistic approximation of how that total breaks down:

• Physical Exam Fee ($50 – $150): The base cost just to get in the door. The vet will check the dog’s teeth (to estimate age), listen to their heart and lungs, check for skin infections or flea dirt, and look for physical signs of neglect or chain injuries around the neck.
• Core Vaccinations ($60 – $120): Because a stray’s medical history is a mystery, the vet will treat them as unvaccinated. They will need a Rabies vaccine (usually legally required) and a DHPP combo shot (Distemper, Hepatitis, Parvovirus, and Parainfluenza).
• Heartworm & Tick Panel ($35 – $75): This is critical for a dog that lived outside on a chain. Mosquitoes transmit heartworms, and if a dog was left unprotected, they are at high risk.
• Fecal Exam & Dewormer ($50 – $100): Outside dogs almost always carry intestinal parasites (like hookworms or roundworms). The vet will test a stool sample and give a broad-spectrum deworming medication.

If the dog has been neglected on a chain, the bill could climb if they find any of the following common issues:

• Flea/Tick Treatment ($20 – $40): A one-month immediate dose of preventative to kill any active pests.
• Heartworm Treatment ($500 – $1,500+): If the heartworm test comes back positive, treating it is a multi-month, expensive medical process. (If it is negative, you’ll just pay around $15–$20 a month for preventative pills).
• Antibiotics/Ointments ($40 – $100): For skin hot-spots, fly-bitten ears, or neck sores from the collar/chain.

 Dewormer) often for flat rates between $140 and $200.

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Stats on the dogs fix are from Gimini Google and Free!

Mark

This is actually so sad but so beautifully written. I wanna be able to write like you!! I love it!

i love the way you conveyed such a heavy message. The images i got in my head were sad and conveyed the message that that pain was inexcapale

The AABB rhyme scheme was very well executed. I did find myself stumble a bit with flow, but the pacing within the plot was pleasurable. The message as I seen it was distress and abuse alleviated by an outside compassionate hand. The abrupt end at the arrival of hope left me both intrigued as well as shocked. I was left wondering, "Will there be more or is it over?". Over-all I enjoyed the poem. 

tethering may be too complicated a word for the poem. Maybe write by it's deffinition? 👌😁

This poem you wrote, did so many things right. I felt like I saw the story in motion. 

The ending line of the first stanza was my favorite. 

Whether this was inspired by some truth or not, I would like to see more, especially with that consistent rhyme scheme! 

This poem you wrote, did so many things right. I felt like I saw the story in motion. 

The ending line of the first stanza was my favorite. 

Whether this was inspired by some truth or not, I would like to see more, especially with that consistent rhyme scheme!