magics02

Jun 14, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Waiting For You

I wait for you

as the clock kept chiming

where are you my son

your curfew is past

driving that car out late

why can't you appreciate

my sleep time

the nite's quiet time

as sleep does not come easy

till you walk in,then

I hear the door

close once more

a kiss good nite

I know you're alright

now go to bed

it is late, the work

day is waiting

soon it will be

a half past eight.

6.13.10 mms

— magics02, Jun 14, 2010

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rogerramjet365

16 years 1 month ago

Nice One

A place we have all been I think! Love Roger x

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Yes I asked my mother and father and they said the same thing, especially mom as she still waits up and we are in out 50's. The love of the parent like no other. Thanks for the visit very much. Love,Mona xoxox

Breakinglogic

16 years 1 month ago

My curfew was ten, I’m

My curfew was ten, I'm afraid I made my mom stay up late on more than a few occasions :( always told her to just go to bed but she never did till I came home. That's a mom for ya. Hope your son comes home safe and soon so you can sleep. Goodnight. Peace and cheers, logic

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you Logic son

At least I don't have to worry about my adopted Neo son and that is you!! LOL Thanks for taking the time to visit and comment Love Magics Mom

poewriter58

16 years 1 month ago

Mona

I waited(past tense) keeps chiming( present tense) so perhaps either kept chiming or I wait for you would bring them into the same tense I know the feeling well I had a young one once( well she is still young) Logice a mother never stops worrying about their children , it's an inbred thing Chrys

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Poe

Yes I went in to change it as I was reading all the comments and how does if fair now? Thank you for all your touch ups and the help. I so appreciate it very much. Love Mona xoxox

pleiades

16 years 1 month ago

how this one made me

how this one made me smile... i remember my mother waiting up for all her children as they came of an age when they were allowed a later home time. it didn't matter what time it was, i would come home to find her asleep on the lounge chair where she woud wait 'til dawn if she had to mothers the world over would cry 'comrade!' on reading this mine are not at that age yet... thank goodness! i can still sleep soundly lovingly written mona. i like your structure, the way it falls down the page a wee thing... line 1, waited line 2 keeps 2 different tenses i very much enjoyed the read, and the memories it brought back to me cheers lovely lady p

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you lady friend

So nice to see you come by and the helpful tips you and Poe gave me I sure appreciate it very much. I am glad you liked this one and got to come over and visit you soon. Love,Mona xoxoox

mand

16 years 1 month ago

Every mum can relate to this

Every mum can relate to this poem. Thanks for sharing Mona. Love Mand xxxxx

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Yes Mand Mum

I see we all have gone through it and I know someday he will be away from the house in the service or college and then I would think, darn why did I yell at him as the door then will not open at night at such a late hour. Thank you for the lovely visit and seek you soon lady friend. Love,Mona xoxoxo

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

oh oh...been there!

As an errant teen myself...was a selfish mare keeping my parents up, worrying. Of course, life comes full circle...my daughter does it to me now! Ells x

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

LOL Ells

I got a kick out of that one and is your daughter in her teens too? Yes we all experienced this and now we see what we did to our parents. I think it is a common thing for us moms too. Thanks for the visit and visit you soon lady friend. Love Mona xoxoxo

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Mona

paybacks have been a bitch for me lol I sent my mother and father insane ... my three boys are doing their level best to see I head the same way thank god my daughters an angel lol or id already be there lol love and hugs JayCee x x x sorry great poem I rambled lol ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

No I love all the comments from moms and dads

Thank you lady friend and yes we are getting some payback but only I was never allowed out as much as my brothers were since I was the only girl..They got away with everything:) Thank you for the visit and hope your feeling a wee bit better and how is Lil Angel doing?? So cute so cute... Love Mona xoxox

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

very nice i have that all to come!

i am not a mummy yet, but i know that i would worry! lovely poem and lovely subject, much love Magic Mona........... shirley harrison

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Yes someday it will be you looking

Out of the window and waiting for those car lights upon the yard. Thanks Shirls for your visits and your comments honey Love at ya Mona xoxxo

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

so true

This poem is so true. kids they will worry you to death its weird that we love them at all but we do haha.

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Why of course we love them at all!!!

We just don't rest too easy when it is late and they are still about. Joey went to the show and then to Applebee's last nite and got in a little after his curfew so I let him have it today and warned him never never on a work nite for me again..lol I am just thankful he came home!! Glad to see you Hobo and you are back for awhile now? Love at ya Mona xoxox

scribbler

16 years 1 month ago

waiting

parents get even for worrying by way of children having to worry about their offspring.Found out gray hair is inherited from children lol! nice write.....scribbler

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Probably right about that one

I always tell my son when you have children come back and ask me and I will gladly remind you of things LOL thanks so much for the visit my scribe and talk to you soon. Love at ya Mona xxoxo

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Mona

Nice poem. I remember my mum calling the police if we were more that 3 hours late home when we were very young. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

we mothers never sleep

until we know the last one is home and safe great write mona love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Joseph J. Breu…

16 years 1 month ago

RE: Waiting For You

An enjoyable piece; liked the flow and feel, as the seconds tick away; although I'm not a parent, I've experienced similar events, while waiting on spouses and other loved ones; it's never easy to keep worry at bay - until they show up at home, safe and sound. --Joe Breunig Reaching Towards His Unbounded Glory

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Amen to that one friend

Yes the teen years and I guess my brothers did the same thing my son does and yes to hear the door open and the sound of the car in the driveway is always a relief especially past midnite. Thanks for your visit and come again soon Blessings Mona

faithmairee

16 years ago

Vey Nice Work

This one reminded me of how I used to worry my Mother sick when I was young. She always said she couldn't rest until all seven of her daughters were home at night. Nice poem, Mona. ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

magics02

16 years ago

Thank you for the visit

ANd your comments, if you ever see something amiss with any of my work please feelfree to comment. I will apprecaite that and nice to meet you here this evening Love at ya Mona Florida gal too!!

faithmairee

16 years ago

You are most welcome

I'm happy to have you as a friend. I will let you know if I see something as I hope you will let me know. Best regards, Fith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

tbeaudet

16 years ago

My father used to tell me

"nothing good happens after Midnite", but I wouldn't head out until 11 p.m. anyways! Being a Dad now, I understand the anxiety waiting for the kids to come strolliing in... such a dangerous world these days. Beautiful write, thanks for sharing. (Check out my poem "I Don't Want", you will relate I'm sure) Tom

magics02

16 years ago

Thank you so Tom

For stopping by and reading and yes as my son is 17 these are the years that are the hardest for some parents and for some teens also. I stay very open minded with my son, always have. We have great talks and I assure him he does his part and mom does hers. We are a team and just like a Neo sometimes we knock heads but we always resort to love and communication being the most important aspect of family and friendships. I was listening to your profile page again and when I do it makes me think alot of you and what you endured in your life. No words can ever express what I feel to someone I do not even know but just know I share them with you and know of your hurts. Much love at ya guy Mona

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