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May 26, 2010
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Hell Lake
It feels like
The blood's evaporating
Out the top of my head
Light headed I hang
Hung over and beat red
With my eyes rolled back
And this rope around neck
Watch the hue turn blue
As I hang over deck
My limbs soon numb
All I can think of is hell
Somebody please
Somebody get me some help
I've made a mistake
This fuckin rope is so tight
My feet are done twitching
But I can't see any light
And I fade black
Open my eyes wide
Satan is waiting
But the fire here's died
He says too many
Like me have arrived
Cried out the fires
Their tears just
Couldn't be dried
So here I float
In luke warm pains
Drifting nowhere
As the sadness rains
And hits my face
And Its easy to taste
The bitter sweet
Sorrow we all make
The blood's evaporating
Out the top of my head
Light headed I hang
Hung over and beat red
With my eyes rolled back
And this rope around neck
Watch the hue turn blue
As I hang over deck
My limbs soon numb
All I can think of is hell
Somebody please
Somebody get me some help
I've made a mistake
This fuckin rope is so tight
My feet are done twitching
But I can't see any light
And I fade black
Open my eyes wide
Satan is waiting
But the fire here's died
He says too many
Like me have arrived
Cried out the fires
Their tears just
Couldn't be dried
So here I float
In luke warm pains
Drifting nowhere
As the sadness rains
And hits my face
And Its easy to taste
The bitter sweet
Sorrow we all make
— Breakinglogic, May 26, 2010
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Critiques
Grassfield
16 years ago
hell
Breakinglogic
16 years ago
thanks for the read! I
xena465
16 years ago
Heavy stuff BL
Breakinglogic
16 years ago
Thanks so much Rosina :) you
xena465
16 years ago
Re: Same here
scribbler
16 years ago
hell lake
Breakinglogic
16 years ago
Thanks scribbler :) for the
loved
16 years ago
appreciate and more
Breakinglogic
16 years ago
hello loved,
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Great description of hell
Breakinglogic
16 years ago
Hey DD, thanks for reading
BrightEyed
16 years ago
wow
Breakinglogic
16 years ago
Hey there bright, thanks for
greeneyes
16 years ago
wow
sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
16 years ago
Point Man
Restlesslittlesoul
16 years ago
Really love this poem - the