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Dec 22, 2012
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TWILIGHT
TWILIGHT
The sun sets low into the sea
casting phantom shadows
soulless
empty
reflections of me
and I am surrounded
by my own emptiness.
— Geremia, Dec 22, 2012
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loved
13 years 5 months ago
such thoughtful
deep poetry
lovely words yours
Ian.T
13 years 5 months ago
Joe
Your first line didn't work for me
"the sun sets low" It has to be low to set
" the sun is swallowed by" Meaning sounds better
Good theme I go along with the despair..
But I await the dawn where all the shadows will melt, to warm my Soul, Yours Ian.T
sueb
13 years 5 months ago
lovely x
lovely x
Nordic cloud
13 years 5 months ago
This is psychologically
This is psychologically subtle,
the movement around you of warmth and coldness
shaped in phantoms of yourself.
I still enjoy this, saw it elsewhere,
as you know Joe.
Love as aye Anni