Jordyn

Member since June 23, 2022

Member for 3 years, 11 months

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12 Poems

24 Comments

2 Followers

Most recent

Crop Circles

Posted Apr 15, 2026 · 17 lines · 5 critiques

Stuck in this loop;
Where does it end?
And where does it begin?

I win and I lose.
But then, I lose my win.
And then, I win my lose.

I can‘t see where I‘m going,
But I know I‘ll go there.

Is this place good?
Good for me?
Or is it good for the bad parts of me?
Or maybe even bad for the good parts of me.

I keep going round and round,
Will I ever get out?

I know I keep asking all these questions, but I can‘t help it.
I need to know.
Am I actually stuck in this loop or am I just stuck in my thoughts of delirium

Jordyn’s timeline

April 2026
17 Fri

Received a critique
on Crop Circles from @Geezer
"thumbs up!"
17 Fri

Received a critique
on Crop Circles from @Geezer
"I understand, I have trouble getting my phone to say what I want, and mine is in English. Please don't text and drive. You just got here, I don't want your next text to be from a hospital bed, or while you are sitting i…"
16 Thu

Received a critique
on Crop Circles from @Geezer
"I like the short choppy lines, kind of like you are awakening from one of those dreams. However, I think that there is something that you have overlooked. The form of [ lose], should change when you use it in the line…"
15 Wed

Posted a poem
Crop Circles
"Stuck in this loop;"
Open thread 17 lines
June 2023
23 Fri

Anniversary
One year of membership
March 2023
01 Wed

Received a critique
on Awakened from @Lavender
"Hello, Jordyn, The entire poem offers much to think over, but I was very touched by, "Life is just an empty grand parade." A strong line with such clear imagery! I agree, wonderful language and well written. Thank you!…"
01 Wed

Received a critique
on Awakened from @Rosewood Apothecary
"Excellent job with your pace and language. Good theme and stays on topic. Everything moves toward the ending. Really nice job, Tim"
01 Wed

Received a critique
on Awakened from @Geezer
"goes on. The search for meaning, for the "truth". Do we all sleep? Will we all awaken one day? I think that one does not ever find the "truth". It's just not a place or a destination. You have written well, and maybe yo…"
01 Wed

Posted a poem
Awakened
"Touch my hand and I would feel."
Open thread 36 lines
February 2023
03 Fri

Received a critique
on Closed Captioned from @Geezer
"I too, have searched for the divine truth and found most everything wanting. I have no magic words to that will give you the meaning of life; I only know that I live by the truth given to us all. We are of this little m…"
03 Fri

Received a critique
on Closed Captioned from @Rosewood Apothecary
"Following the moon is a pagan ritual, I’ve gathered tomes and tales in my travelling. None of it very useful, only curious. Still, the dance continues without me. It certainly is a pagan ritual. Important In knowing whe…"
02 Thu

Posted a poem
Closed Captioned
"Exaggeration of the flaws in one personality"
Open thread 18 lines
January 2023
17 Tue

Posted a poem
Crimson & Azure
"My time ribbon expands."
Open thread 7 lines
10 Tue

Posted a poem
Not So Alone
"Criminal mind accused falsely,"
Open thread 19 lines
July 2022
01 Fri

Posted a poem
Vacationing at 20th Streest
"Riddled with guilt at overcomplicating the obvious."
Open thread 25 lines
June 2022
30 Thu

Posted a poem
Inspiritual
"Saturate this sacred ground."
Open thread 15 lines
29 Wed

Posted a poem
Embroidered Love
"Together, we are."
Open thread 23 lines
28 Tue

Critiqued
"The Power of Both Sides" by @Raven4life
"This is really good. It's nicely written and I really like how it captures the essence of two sides of a personality. Before I thought about that it kinda made me think of the movie Split, beautiful movie and James McAv…"
28 Tue

Critiqued
"addition to: Queen of Lies by: Jordyn Alyssa (response by: eddy styx" by @Candlewitch
"Eddy! This is amazing! I really loved the darkness of it whilst kind of kept the same vibe as my original. I really do love the fact that you added such a beautiful addition to my poem, especially because out of all the…"
28 Tue

First critique offered
on "addition to: Queen of Lies by: Jordyn Alyssa (response by: eddy styx" by @Candlewitch
28 Tue

Posted a poem
Common Criminal
"The walls in this room close in on me."
Open thread 18 lines
27 Mon

New follower
@paul
27 Mon

New follower
@Rosewood Apothecary
27 Mon

Most-discussed work
Queen of Lies

10 critiques to date.
27 Mon

Posted a poem
Queen of Lies
"This woman who was stolen dreams,"
Open thread 20 lines
24 Fri

Posted a poem
God's Gold
"Crossing external boundaries,"
Open thread 17 lines
23 Thu

First publication
Drifting Bliss
23 Thu

Posted a poem
Drifting Bliss
"I’ve been cross-examined and scrutinized,"
Open thread 22 lines
23 Thu

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
15 Wed

Highest posting month
June 2022 — 5 poems

About Me

About me

I'm a young writer. And whilst writing isn't something that I do often, I can still practice to get better. I hope people who read my stuff like it because, while it's not the best, it's something that I really like and hope to share with others. Also, if there is any poetry contests that you know of, aside from the ones on here, feel free to let me know about them as well. I'm trying to work on my work and I feel as if those might help. Especially in the confidence level. Because, after all, confidence is key!!

Location: USA

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Rosewood Apothecary

Apostolos "Pau…

on Crop Circles from @Geezer

on Crop Circles from @Geezer

on Crop Circles from @Geezer

One year of membership

on Awakened from @Lavender

on Awakened from @Rosewood Apothecary

on Awakened from @Geezer

on Closed Captioned from @Geezer

on Closed Captioned from @Rosewood Apothecary

"The Power of Both Sides" by @Raven4life

"addition to: Queen of Lies by: Jordyn Alyssa (response by: eddy styx" by @Candlewitch

on "addition to: Queen of Lies by: Jordyn Alyssa (response by: eddy styx" by @Candlewitch

Membership begins

June 2022 — 5 poems

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