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EyeAmI
Member since August 6, 2026
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The Dame of Africa
Sunlight beams, scalding air
Waves of heat distort the land
Devoid of life and shelter there
Mounds of amber colored sand
Welcome stranger, to paradise
This sea of golden emptiness
Of days like fire, of nights like ice
Flats and hills my grainy dress
Think of only three things here
You’ll find no single water source
Travel when the sun has cleared
Rest as daylight starts its course
Vultures roam my empty dunes
Rotting corpses their reliance
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Gentle winds that murmur tunes
Cacti stand in stark defiance
Humans travel through my heat
And beg their gods when death is near
Reminding all I can’t be beat
I end their days with thirst and fear
I bet you wonder of my name
I’m known as the Sahara
All the lives I’ve had to claim
Are whispered through each era
EyeAmI’s timeline
- August 2026
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14 FriReceived a critique
on The Dame of Africa from @Geezer
"already been edited a bit, I can only go on from here. Think of only three things here You’ll find no single water source Travel when the sun has cleared Rest as daylight starts its course A possible solution to that pa…" -
14 FriReceived a critique
on The Dame of Africa from @Ray Miller
"The poem is at its best in its descriptions and no matter what the robot says, the strongest stanza is the 4th. The poem is weakest with lines like "Think of only three things here","I bet you wonder of my name" and "We…" -
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14 FriCritiqued
"Die Your Daughter" by @Iris Marlowe
"A dark, confession of sorts, is how I can best describe this. There is nothing more beautiful than life, giving it, protecting it, nurturing it, guiding it. Our troubles have a way of burying our innocence, and bringing…" -
14 FriCritiqued
"The evening I got fired" by @A Hot Photon
"This was for me a return, to the days when I felt angry, and when punching the nearest solid surface seemed like enough to quell my anger. A glimpse of the angry young man I was, in a not too distant past. I’ve been fir…" -
14 FriCritiqued
"A Coal Miner's Story" by @ritam
"I don’t usually like free verse, but this time I actually enjoyed a reread of the piece. The feeling of dread going in, the ambient, the cave, the darkness, the thoughts of the men, the earth being alive, like a beast…" -
13 ThuReceived a critique
on Pa’s Lessons from @A Hot Photon
"I enjoyed reading this one. The rhyme scheme is very crisp, kind of gives it that kind of old-fashioned “charm” (I use that word lightly bc the subject matter is not so charming) and the story it tells of generational t…" -
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10 MonCritiqued
"Kira ~ who rescued who?" by @Tink
"This poem you wrote, did so many things right. I felt like I saw the story in motion. The ending line of the first stanza was my favorite. Whether this was inspired by some truth or not, I would like to see more, especi…" -
10 MonCritiqued
"Kira ~ who rescued who?" by @Tink
"This poem you wrote, did so many things right. I felt like I saw the story in motion. The ending line of the first stanza was my favorite. Whether this was inspired by some truth or not, I would like to see more, especi…" -
10 MonCritiqued
"Rocky the squirrel " by @Trouble
"A genuine reflection on your youth, and on the unlikely friendship with Rocky, the Squirrel. The rhyme scheme varies. It is stronger in some stanzas, and looser in others. I think the piece would benefit from a bit more…" -
10 MonCritiqued
"Rocky the squirrel " by @Trouble
"A genuine reflection on your youth, and on the unlikely friendship with Rocky, the Squirrel. The rhyme scheme varies. It is stronger in some stanzas, and looser in others. I think the piece would benefit from a bit more…" -
10 MonCritiqued
"Just a reminder " by @A Hot Photon
"You manage to keep a consistent rhyme scheme, even though the lines are long. It’s beauty rests in it’s honesty, of what you want to do, and what you have to do for a living. A self reflection of your hopes and dreams…" -
09 SunReceived a critique
on May from @A Hot Photon
"This is some of the best modern poetry I’ve seen, genuinely. Your storytelling is very well-done, akin to the Song of Wandering Aengus, which it reminds me of a darker version of that. And how the ending ties to the poe…" -
09 SunReceived a critique
on May from @A Hot Photon
"This is some of the best modern poetry I’ve seen, genuinely. Your storytelling is very well-done, akin to the Song of Wandering Aengus, which it reminds me of a darker version of that. And how the ending ties to the poe…" -
09 SunNew follower
@kellustzall
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06 ThuNew follower
@Tink
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06 ThuReceived a critique
on An Ode to Time from @Trouble
"great poem i loved how you added new things like insects and trees and you didn't lose the rhythm and the rhymes flowed just right not too much or too little i felt like i was watching a movie good poem trouble" -
06 ThuFirst critique offered
on "Silly Girl" by @Kristy N Richards
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06 ThuFirst publication
An Ode to Time
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06 Thu
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06 ThuJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
31 year old male, from Cali.
I’ve been writing since May of this year, and this is the second poetry website I try. Hopefully, I can find a home here.
Location: USA
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