Cloudthings

Member since February 2, 2009

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Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised)

Posted Jun 20, 2019 · 30 lines · 10 critiques

Somebody heard me today
- listened to the truth in what I say
This is when the healing arrives
Carried in gentle, non-judgemental eyes
A simple word of consideration
Let me gain a perspective of kind contemplation

So many times people cry unheard
inside & out - the crucified word
Threats if you don’t toe the bully's line…
Well I won’t! Not my toe… not mine!
I choose a dragonfly life
It might be short
& there are still those that prey
But with dragonfly wings I’m flying away.

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I will visit the meadow, beach, lily & pond
Dwell in grace & gratitude among things I am fond
Rise for perspective on all of the rest
Harmonise with the good ones, & the beat in my chest

& mistakes? I forgive them
of me & of them
Yes we’re none of us perfect
& we’ve all of us gems

- Glide on

thanking the open hand of care
that reached out today when I thought none was there.
All I want to do is nurture & grow
This whole big community I once loved to know.

& here it is – I leave it with love… only love, to me that’s what matters
But I won't pretend, or bare my heart til it's tatters
To those I ask - leave me in peace – that’s all.

Cloudthings’s timeline

February 2024
01 Thu

Anniversary
15 years of membership
September 2021
12 Sun

Received a critique
on Return (again) from @lovedly
"but I liked your line "Water the seeds of joy first" VERY FEW KNOW what really is a seed only aussies do ere they now root you know it JESS would have kicked me I miss his kicks most rgds"
November 2019
15 Fri

New follower
@Umeh Collins Ebube
July 2019
21 Sun

Received a critique
on Here & Walhalla from @weirdelf
"had a chance but blew it. Do you need more detail?"
21 Sun

Received a critique
on Neopoet legacy from @weirdelf
"Yeah, we all love it. I truly admire your capacity for disguising it as compassionate humanity."
21 Sun

Received a critique
on Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised) from @weirdelf
"you are very good at that."
15 Mon

Received a critique
on Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised) from @scribbler
"It is good to see that somebody else does multiple edits on their poetry lol. You know I've been saying for some time that I believe the future of poetry lies with neither traditional rhyme no free verse but rather with…"
June 2019
23 Sun

New follower
@quillsveinback
22 Sat

Critiqued
"Developing story" by @quillsveinback
"."
21 Fri

Critiqued
"A conversation " by @bjucks
"That's not a bad thing, I wanted to do it justice. My sense is that there are some great lines, I just got distracted by a couple of minor things... It's not a criticism, just letting you know how it lands... the use of…"
21 Fri

Critiqued
"JUSTICE" by @Simon
"I got some good emotive reaction from those first few lines, you came at the concept in a different way than I would have , & that is often a great thing... Loved the imagery of. "long as a snake, bites itself often" &…"
21 Fri

Received a critique
on Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised) from @Simon
"Wisdom stands from hearing just like when the truth is been told. Natural people teaches and learns on a bases of day."
20 Thu

Critiqued
"From Time To Time" by @jetz
"Clearly you are not new to writing. This is a great, concise expression of a too common tragedy in rhyme. It'd make a perfect song actually ... Look forward to more from you ."
20 Thu

Received a critique
on Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised) from @tyro
"I had to read the first four lines, and then I picked up your rhythm. It sparkled and delighted all the way. Enjoyed it a lot. There is one thing that came to mind when I read this couplet, Rise for perspective on all o…"
20 Thu

Critiqued
"metamorphosis " by @tyro
"I was pulled in more & more as the poem progressed & the last stanza was almost an emotional celebration for me. In the beginning I kept hearing "Today I am - a small blue thing - like a marble, or an eye" (Suzanne Vega…"
20 Thu

Critiqued
"The Quintessential Homecoming (June Contest)" by @gregwa8
"I found this a very enjoyable read... I know others will argue it should shock, provoke, cause distaste... Not my opinion, I love pleasant poetry, especially if it is relatable as this one is . There are many tendrils o…"
20 Thu

Critiqued
"Mellifluous Sky (Primal Poetry)" by @coosh1
"I truly feel there is not a thing to change here. Again, not in the workshop, but I plucked this from the stream. It reaches deeply into other hearts this write (mine for sure), pulling out beautiful echoes of empathy &…"
20 Thu

Critiqued
"Flowing Silk (primal poetry - second session)" by @coosh1
"!"
20 Thu

Posted a poem
Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised)
"Somebody heard me today"
Open thread 30 lines
March 2019
21 Thu

Received a critique
on Neopoet legacy from @Eumolpus
"Getting into this poetry thing I would consider a few things: I would keep scrapbook somehow (or on computer) poems that move you, poems that you want to go back to. In the bookstores or libraries see the section, usual…"
20 Wed

Posted a poem
Neopoet legacy
"Where can I spread my words"
Open thread 12 lines
16 Sat

New follower
@Lindsay
15 Fri

Posted a poem
Here & Walhalla
"In a harsh environment"
Open thread 24 lines
12 Tue

Posted a poem
Phenylethylamine (is just another drug of addiction) (MARCH CONTEST)
"Love is not a pretty ride"
Open thread 22 lines
10 Sun

Posted a poem
Alvioli over gum
"Through the filligree of naked branchlets,"
Open thread 31 lines
01 Fri

New follower
@lovedly
01 Fri

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In gratitude to breath
"Rosemary, Silver birch, Gum"
Open thread 19 lines
February 2019
21 Thu

Posted a poem
Step-drama
"I feel the cave in"
Open thread 33 lines
21 Thu

Posted a poem
Step-drama
"I feel the cave in"
Open thread 33 lines
15 Fri

Posted a poem
Return (again)
"Soft landing"
Open thread 16 lines
12 Tue

Posted a poem
Still (revised)
"Resilience -"
Open thread 21 lines
01 Fri

Anniversary
10 years of membership
February 2014
01 Sat

Anniversary
5 years of membership
May 2012
08 Tue

Posted a poem
I bring myself to these
"In the small purple spaces between the demands"
Open thread 24 lines
06 Sun

Posted a poem
Venus in violet and teal
"Venus in violet and teal"
Open thread 22 lines
February 2010
01 Mon

Anniversary
One year of membership
October 2009
10 Sat

Posting milestone
100 poems posted
June 2009
28 Sun

Most-discussed work
A taste for anonymity

40 critiques to date.
16 Tue

Critique milestone
1,000 critiques given
March 2009
15 Sun

Highest posting month
March 2009 — 17 poems
February 2009
02 Mon

First critique offered
on "Saith the Preacher" by @Rob Graber
02 Mon

First publication
Sweet things & freedom
01 Sun

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

A returnee from the Neo-clan of many years ago. I truly loved so much about this place, was inspired & enriched & I do believe I grew as a writer. I have missed it, though am still recovering from illness & adjusting to managing a far bigger family, so may be a bit sporadic in visitations here.

I have written songs & poems since I was pre-teen, though except for some songs I performed & recorded, the majority of my writing always remained a private passion until I found Neo.
I have been a diver, almost a pilot, a widow, a lecturer, a mother, lover, sister, protester, singer, director, ceramicist, teacher, student, leader, follower, doer & Witness, but most consistently I remain in awe & gratitude, since life & people continually inspire me & offer much joy & knowledge, food for my soul.
Missed you all!

Location: Australia, regional Victoria, AUS

Favorite Poets

So many... Rumi

Spike Milligan

Keats. Many of the Neopoet clan

past & present. A myriad of song writers

Dylan

Jackson Browne

Lior

& I must add the poetic influence of painters

sculptors & creators across the world... Life really

especially the sky.

Recent Work

Sweet things & freedom

Posted: 2 February, 2009

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Contest Wins

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Workshops

		Skill level:
Cellar Door	(syllabus)	Olympic Pool	Started 2019-03-27	Concluded
FROM PROSE TO POETRY	(syllabus)	Splash Pool	Started 2012-04-21	Concluded

15 years of membership

on Return (again) from @lovedly

on Here & Walhalla from @weirdelf

on Neopoet legacy from @weirdelf

on Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised) from @weirdelf

on Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised) from @scribbler

"Developing story" by @quillsveinback

"A conversation " by @bjucks

"JUSTICE" by @Simon

on Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised) from @Simon

"From Time To Time" by @jetz

on Glide on - truth & dragonflies (revised) from @tyro

"metamorphosis " by @tyro

"The Quintessential Homecoming (June Contest)" by @gregwa8

"Mellifluous Sky (Primal Poetry)" by @coosh1

"Flowing Silk (primal poetry - second session)" by @coosh1

on Neopoet legacy from @Eumolpus

10 years of membership

5 years of membership

One year of membership

100 poems posted

1,000 critiques given

March 2009 — 17 poems

on "Saith the Preacher" by @Rob Graber

Membership begins

About Me

Recent Work

Contest Wins

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