Sweet things & freedom

Hey thanks Richard, I AM loving this & I am actually excited about putting something up here that is a little more "worked" (as I suggested in my response to the last comment), the hour is half way up... Yeah, "sticky" I didn't get so much... could you elaborate? I would be guessing as to what you mean there, & I really am interested to pin what your point is. It's a valuable thing this process, I feel certain there's a lot to learn & I'm excited about refining a process I tend to be sloppy with sometimes.. In this case it was intentionally so to some extent, since I was just freeflowing, & didn't want to limit that too much, & maybe that's not such a great thing on this site, first day though & I am learning already how to manage my writing better under different conditions. Anyway, ta for the warm welcome & support & your feedback, it's just great, & so generous... Seems like a fantastic group of people here, not to mention the pleasure of the writing.. I am off to read your work now.. I'll "see" you around I imagine. Thanks again. Anni May I wish to walk gracefully..... so as not to spill water.

Wow, I feel really honoured to get such generous feedback on my first write here, I am almost feeling overwhelmed actually... & you guys all write so beautifully yourselves... I am so new here I am still learning to navigate my way around, so I was surprised when I discovered how many feedback posts there were... & as I work my way down I feel so moved by this acknowledgement of my first work here. Now first up ta for the spell check... oops, didn't even notice it so ta.. It's interesting you picked that latter part, I was unsure about it, wondering if it might not be a little too cliche... I had a sense of the "crown" NOT being any traditional overt pompous paraphernalia, rather a really noble & quite humble invisible halo of integrity... hence the assertion of losing "tradition" & "subverting the dominant paradigm". & as for the "gown", I really loved the concept that courage could be soft & pliable (again hence the response of looking at "loosing" rigidity - I was writing 'off the cuff' & responding to each thought process immediately as you can see), & even sensuous... Silk is such a sensuous tactile experience in my opinion... & courage is so often seen as a fierce, rigid & structured attribute, one we must bare & hold it like it's a heavy burdon, instead of a really beautiful thing we can step into & adorn ourselves with, with pleasure & grace... I have probably waffled about something you're not even interested in... (hmm, might be time to undertake some more study so I have an apropriate place to dissect things!!!!) Anyway, you know I admire your work also, so I feel honoured to have your kind acknowledgement. Look forward to more interraction. Cheers Anni May I wish to walk gracefully..... so as not to spill water.

Oh Ann (of Norway... how delightful... you don't get that much around THESE parts!), again I am so very honoured... Did you get my message to you earlier today... (it is now 2:24am... crazy & should be asleep, but cannot resist the lure of this unfolding experience!!! Greedy thing I can be... hedonism sigh!). I had already noted a magnetic call to connect with you & here you are! As for my writing - For certain that whole thing could be reworked, no doubt at all... it was a freeflow thing, as a first, intentionally, since I knew not what to expect... & as SOON as I had posted it I was disapointed with the whole first section in fact... especially when I saw that THAT was the only visible part on the "dashboard" initially. I felt a sense of sadness, & made a comment to my friend who was on the phone, (& responsible for me discovering this site.. Thanks Craig), that it was not very inspiring & I doubted many would read it, the latter part was more apealing... If it weren't a rediculous hour I would go back & rework it now... it will have to wait now since I will be away for some days... Still, the feedback is great none-the-less... As I always tell my students it is in our "mistakes" & weaker areas that we learn so much in order to refine & progress to a better place in our art.. They really are our blessings. Oh I WILL try not to write another essay (almost too late huh?), but there is much I wanted to respond to & so much gratitude I wish to show, I feel so beautifully embraced by this fantastic community... it's a little like heaven isn't it... to be so immersed as I've already pointed out! I was humbled by your comments & lovely praise at my first write here... I have now posted my 2nd piece.. much smoother in metre, though a long one I admit... Too long for a song I thought after I wrote it. I nearly snipped the last verse out, & considered snipping it into two songs & reworking, but I liked the journey of it... I still wonder if the last verse should go... but you might be a better judge... back to my point, I do feel humbled since I have a great respect for all of these writers & their observations & feel blessed to be so welcomed... But you Ann, pulled me in especially... I wonder if this is common for you? & how delightful that you could relate to the sense of the ride being unpredictable... it is how I felt... hope & fear vying tentatively amid a myriad of other emotional assertions... so I loved your metaphor of the horsey thing, lovely imagery... though at times it was more like a bareback ride, the comfort of the saddle even denied... though the stallion thankfully not too skittish, with moments of lovely grace & ease... Almost lulling me to a false sense of security before another change of pace & direction... Ahh you do pull lovely imagery & inspiration, I knew you would. I am very much looking forward to having a read of the work you mention, & many more besides, thank you for your invitation to do so... As for the line you mention I will have a look, though it really was an intentional pause that one, I considered pacing it, but wanted that pause to draw one into the import of the lull, the query, the sense of baby unknown experience... the leap of faith taken already, & now behind the inner walls the small anxiety of deceit though doubted, still, present as a teeny possibility... still, the fact it unsettles you shows me it could have been done differently... as I said I will explore it... This IS exciting... I didn't realise how lazy I can be with my writing mostly it just sits in my books & will probably never be looked at again, I wonder from time to time why I do it for that reason... but there is no real answer but the fact that I am purely driven to do so have been for most of my life... You write .."“Could you actually really be”….and on ca: 8 lines, I wonder if this part could be ‘strammet inn’(N)- pulled together a tiny bit to make it perfect as the rhythm gets slightly veiled here for me."... I am unclear what you are actually saying... sorry I don't have schollarly language regarding poetry, would you mind elaborating? It just occured to me this could be a Norwegian terminology for pulled in... it's kind of onamatapeic or something??? There is an Island here "Norfolk Island" where prison ships washed up, with Welsh & other UK folk, & islnders from surrounding Isles... the language is a mix of pidgin English & old English that was preserved because the Isle was hard to get to & had little outside influence. The Norwegion words you write on your prof are reminiscent... (I love exploring language... as I expect you do) Lordy better STOP! sorry... look forward to many more discussions. Cheers & huge thanks.. (I feel in awe that you already feel I am great in your eyes... the feeling is very mutual.. I feel we are kindred at some level, I hope that isn't presumptuous.) 3 am I must sleep... but can't resist a peep at the poem of your you mention.. Night!!! Anni May I wish to walk gracefully..... so as not to spill water.

Hi Ann, yes I think your ride is even more wild than mine here, what fun... It just cascades really - & that's a lovely ride. Actually I did feel at one stage that there were so many lovely bundles of expression/experience & passion that I actually lost sight of the beauty of it at times... I needed to stop to catch the view. I guess that's why we have pauses, to absorb & appreciate the separate concepts.. But when you write it, it's easy to let it flow isn't it, in a lovely cascading waterful of sentiment as yours has. In any case, I was in for the ride & galloping madly through the imagery.. Later I found a desire to go back & taste that imagery in smaller doses, I would have missed too much if I had not allowed myself to do so, they are lovely lines that, viewed as single trees, stood beautifully in their own right, & a little obscured as a forest... Didn't mean to critique.. it is a lesson for me if anything, since I do love a bit of a galloping pace myself as you know. & as for being pulled I do love to connect & you seem to have such a warm heart. I am pleased you have a lovely companion.. I have been without for some time & have finally connected with somone who DOES like to write (& doesn't feel threatened by my writing), a new thing for me, & delightful. Anyway, I love that you did the free flow piece here & I am yet to go & reread the poem you initially suggested,(apols, it's a frantic time preparing for all my classes & projects & choirs beginning for the year etc.) & it is 1/4 to 2 am here now, my eyes are fighting to stay open in truth so I hope you'll forgive me if I finish here, I'll come back to it asap tomorrow before I am off for the weekend. Ta for your lovely page, I've a few comments to respond to & am looking forward to all of them. Sweet dreams to me & happy day to you I guess Anni May I wish to walk gracefully..... so as not to spill water.

Dear Arrow Lovely to find you here, I am just letting you know I am looking forward to responding, but not at 2am again... I need more time so I can spend it on this site!!! & not at rediculaous times of the night! I'll write soon Cheers Anni May I wish to walk gracefully..... so as not to spill water.