Bonitaj

Member since May 31, 2009

Member for 17 years

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ENSCONSED

Posted Apr 17, 2013 · 21 lines · 2 critiques

Satin hand in velvet glove
Belly to buttocks, bodies enfurled.
Touching lugano- like softest fuzz
Bodies infused,
By this sublime love.

She repeats each word, before it's said.
Internalized and well rehearsed
Silently whispering:
"I know you better,
than what's in my head".

Exalted in the nakedness of Being
abandoned in moments
Not wanton, but wanting
no more than this

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Spent feeling.

The merger of minds
The sharing of seeing
The ultimate way to give to Life
More Joy,
More meaning.

17 April,13

Bonitaj’s timeline

May 2024
30 Thu

Anniversary
15 years of membership
December 2019
22 Sun

Received a critique
on REMAINS OF THE DAY from @Peggedit
"Hello bonitaj Since I'm new to the site, just stumbled on your piece scrolling through. (The title drew me in). I liked the poem, the tone, tinged with sadness throughout and the unresolved, rhetorically posed question…"
May 2019
30 Thu

Anniversary
10 years of membership
July 2017
06 Thu

Critiqued
"The Reach" by @themoonman
"It's good read you again after so long away. The summation of your love and the power of it shines through in these last lines... "tasting the sweetness that is you, was you and forever will be you." Bravo"
January 2015
02 Fri

Received a critique
on INSATIABLE from @weirdelf
"nice structure where are you?"
May 2014
30 Fri

Anniversary
5 years of membership
November 2013
06 Wed

Critiqued
"The Center of Desire " by @Seren
"You did it again! Took me to a place I too have been to - and what a magical ride it was... Your poem that is! ;) Lovely. I especially liked the closing verse! Tres magnifique! Boni"
October 2013
27 Sun

Received a critique
on WHAT YOU HAVE GIVEN ME from @loved
"left unread the dictionary one would have to refer that's why I compose simple in words a kid can't dispose"
27 Sun

Critiqued
"Lift me Up..tell me good news!" by @Rula
"Utopian, indeed. Well written - absolutely! Particularly liked these lines "where no one shelters the Man to Man abuse" Clever concept of giving abuse no quarter, place to hide! and then these are my favourite lines - "…"
27 Sun

Critiqued
"Passion and Obsession" by @loved
"You had me riding the crest of this mad and passionate thing called "Love"! ;) Liked the poem, it built up to a crescendo and then ... into the wishful thinking of the last line! All in all, spot on! I would just change…"
23 Wed

Critiqued
"Our fair share" by @loved
""Our fair share" Loved? Like how you've taken that turn of phrase and put it on it's head! Clever thinking I deed! Just one slight alteration I would perhaps look at IMO. The last line... "Steal they shall?" is that wha…"
22 Tue

Critiqued
"A new place" by @Ian.T
"Trying to assess so many details... Have you died in this scenario? are you standing in St. Peter's place? Structurally all fine, except for this one line which I find rather archaic: "You had your chance to with me tar…"
20 Sun

Critiqued
"Shifted" by @mand
"The "Shift" from Day to night? Think so, when I read the last verse! I like how you've set the pace and created a sense of boredom. too much internet interfacing perhaps? "Google eyes yawn, retired in fatigue," Would be…"
20 Sun

Critiqued
"beautiful places (rework)" by @2minichinz
"I love the content: it takes me to all the places of wonder you have been to and seen. One last suggestion - perhaps breaks with paragraphs would make more of an impact. IMO just too much to take in - in one long.... fr…"
12 Sat

Received a critique
on Post Script from @Ian.T
"It is in my teachings that no matter what send out love to those that hurt you, you will gradually find that the good memories of them will erase those of the bad. Then you can move away to pastures green, it takes some…"
12 Sat

Received a critique
on Post Script from @Ian.T
"Lovely short piece of fact, But I think there is too much back to back As this world turns Families into friends. Where a touch of a button replaces speech Things of value are not thought of so I wish that I could wave…"
12 Sat

Received a critique
on Post Script from @Roscoe Lane
"Love, an intense emotion that can drive people apart as easily as it brings them together. I like the visual aspect of this poem, two people so close that they pass right through and discard each other. Nice poem, Regar…"
09 Wed

New follower
@loved
09 Wed

Received a critique
on Floored (Haiku 5-7-5) from @Ian.T
"You just have to edit and reinstate your original, don't forget the Western way of writing Japanese poetry has a lot more leeway. Take care and have a great day, Yours Ian .T PS:- Give my love to the Southern Ocean, as…"
07 Mon

Received a critique
on Floored (Haiku 5-7-5) from @Ian.T
"Your original is perfect:- "Relationship flaws held up for inspection, show perceptible cracks" I just couldn't resist the extra works hope you don't mind lol. I love Senyru always remember that "Haiku" are to do with t…"
April 2013
17 Wed

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ENSCONSED
"Satin hand in velvet glove"
Open thread 21 lines
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14 Sun

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NO LOVE FOR LOVE
"I shall go quietly"
Open thread 13 lines
January 2013
11 Fri

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MOVED
"He touched me"
Open thread 12 lines
07 Mon

Posted a poem
WHAT YOU HAVE GIVEN ME
"I -"
Open thread 21 lines
March 2012
06 Tue

Posted a poem
Thought for the day (blog entry)
"A THOUGHT FOR TODAY:"
Open thread 2 lines
01 Thu

Posted a poem
WE NEED TO TALK ABOUT KEVIN*
"Class shootings, drive-by's, Columbines and such,"
Open thread 21 lines
February 2012
09 Thu

Posted a poem
WHEN I FALL
"This full catastrophe living"
Open thread 22 lines
December 2011
18 Sun

Posted a poem
Yule tide!
"A Wreath of Christmas Poems by Albert M. Hayes, James Laughlin, José Erasto"
Open thread 2 lines
November 2011
28 Mon

Posted a poem
AN ATLAS OF IMPOSSIBLE LONGING
"He is North,"
Open thread 24 lines
20 Sun

Posted a poem
XENOPHOBIC
"Xeno: I was never phobic"
Open thread 18 lines
19 Sat

Posted a poem
FUNERAL BLUES
"Stop all the clocks, cut off the telephone,"
Open thread 34 lines
May 2011
02 Mon

New follower
@lou
May 2010
30 Sun

Anniversary
One year of membership
April 2010
03 Sat

Critique milestone
1,000 critiques given
December 2009
28 Mon

Most-discussed work
JUDGE A FLAME BY ITS MOTH

40 critiques to date.
11 Fri

Posting milestone
100 poems posted
July 2009
15 Wed

Highest posting month
July 2009 — 26 poems
June 2009
01 Mon

First critique offered
on "The chaos below the belt feeds my notions" by @send my roots rain
May 2009
31 Sun

First publication
ANOTHER ARROW TO THE HEART
30 Sat

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

Write poetry to stay emotionally connected! Used to teach English, hence my love for the poets! Love my life, but it aint always easy! About to sign up for a Masters in Psychology...

Location: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets

Too many to narrow down

but briefly :

AUDEN

T.S. ELIOT

DICKENSON

RILKE

THOREAU

RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many

especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation

and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Workshops

		Skill level:
Working With Titles	(syllabus)	Wading Pool, Splash Pool	Started 2012-01-30	Concluded
More Meter	(syllabus)	Shark Pool, Plunge Pool	Started 2012-01-11	Concluded
Critique Quickie	(syllabus)	Shark Pool	Started 2011-11-11	Concluded
Deep analysis of poetry	(syllabus)	Shark Pool	Started 2011-08-01	Concluded
Olympic Pool (initial workshop)	(syllabus)	Olympic Pool	Started 2011-05-16	Concluded

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lou

loved

15 years of membership

on REMAINS OF THE DAY from @Peggedit

10 years of membership

"The Reach" by @themoonman

on INSATIABLE from @weirdelf

5 years of membership

"The Center of Desire " by @Seren

on WHAT YOU HAVE GIVEN ME from @loved

"Lift me Up..tell me good news!" by @Rula

"Passion and Obsession" by @loved

"Our fair share" by @loved

"A new place" by @Ian.T

"Shifted" by @mand

"beautiful places (rework)" by @2minichinz

on Post Script from @Ian.T

on Post Script from @Ian.T

on Post Script from @Roscoe Lane

on Floored (Haiku 5-7-5) from @Ian.T

on Floored (Haiku 5-7-5) from @Ian.T

One year of membership

1,000 critiques given

100 poems posted

July 2009 — 26 poems

on "The chaos below the belt feeds my notions" by @send my roots rain

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