zjeakin

Member since February 10, 2012

Member for 14 years, 3 months

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24 Poems

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Alone

Posted Jul 13, 2019 · 5 lines · 1 critiques

A man sits alone on the beach
A solitary tear washes down his cheek
The party rages and the lights strobe
But in his soul he is alone

Zachary J Eakin - 7 - 13 - 19

zjeakin’s timeline

February 2022
10 Thu

Anniversary
10 years of membership
September 2020
21 Mon

Received a critique
on Alone from @Pataphysique.C
"This is imagistic, possessing a compact ferocity. I wonder if altering the third line, making it more sparse, might make it a more intense piece. Like eliminating the first "The" and returning to your original scheme wi…"
July 2019
13 Sat

Posted a poem
Alone
"A man sits alone on the beach"
Open thread 5 lines
February 2017
10 Fri

Anniversary
5 years of membership
September 2015
11 Fri

Received a critique
on Battle from @wesley snow
"I guess you haven't been around for a while as I have not seen your work before. I'm not the best at critiquing free verse, so I won't try. The subject matter is disturbing, but that's intended. I agree with everyone el…"
11 Fri

Received a critique
on Battle from @Geezer
"with Ian. Replacing words and taking the time to keep the rhythm, can make a good poem great. Good work to start, keep striving to make your work better. That is what this site is all about. ~ Geezer"
10 Thu

Received a critique
on Battle from @Sparrow
"Great write and this flowed well, though I found a little stressed in places but that can be rectified easily. "It leaves me feeling so unsure" (Insecure can be used here it makes the piece more personal) Replacing word…"
10 Thu

Posted a poem
Battle
"I grow cold and hard,"
Open thread 25 lines
August 2015
12 Wed

Received a critique
on Demons from @weirdelf
"one of my favourite words- accountability. As a poetic critique the piece feels through the short lines to lack gravitas. Then again the short lines add punch."
08 Sat

Received a critique
on Demons from @Sparrow
"Welcome back, It is good to see members from a few years ago returning and writing so well, please ask if there are any problems, Look forward to your next write, Yours Ian.T"
08 Sat

Posted a poem
Demons
"Heart has hardened"
Open thread 16 lines
May 2013
20 Mon

New follower
@lonlyhrtsclub13
20 Mon

Received a critique
on You Can't Take it With You from @lonlyhrtsclub13
"What I have been saying for years...you can have all the money in the world and all the possessions but you can't take it with you in the end, so why bother hoarding it or focusing on it!!!! I love the line about a hear…"
20 Mon

Posted a poem
You Can't Take it With You
"Squander your wealth on selfish wants,"
Open thread 53 lines
February 2013
10 Sun

Anniversary
One year of membership
November 2012
19 Mon

Received a critique
on Here Comes the Rain from @Geezer
"who loves rhyme, I think that this one has a lot of merit. Look at your meter a little closer and try to eliminate the stutters. Nothing that can't be fixed. Nice job, ~ Geezer"
18 Sun

Critiqued
"Zombified..." by @Geezer
"Great write, I thoroughly enjoyed it. Keep up the good work."
18 Sun

Posted a poem
Here Comes the Rain
"Hope is gone,"
Open thread 19 lines
June 2012
04 Mon

Posted a poem
The Tendencies of Man
"Why do we have to kill,"
Open thread 13 lines
May 2012
31 Thu

Posted a poem
Night's Embrace
"Lying in my bed,"
Open thread 15 lines
24 Thu

Critiqued
"LATE NIGHT LULLABY" by @scribbler
"I fuckin Love this. Keep it up."
24 Thu

First critique offered
on "LATE NIGHT LULLABY" by @scribbler
23 Wed

Posted a poem
A Hill With No Name
"A puff of dust,"
Open thread 28 lines
22 Tue

Posted a poem
The Comic Cowboy
"With his goofy hat,"
Open thread 22 lines
April 2012
09 Mon

Posted a poem
The Marine
"As I lie here,"
Open thread 26 lines
February 2012
16 Thu

Posted a poem
Three Types of People
"Have you ever stopped and wondered,"
Open thread 28 lines
15 Wed

Posted a poem
Always There
"I may not have style,"
Open thread 29 lines
10 Fri

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
April 2010
15 Thu

Highest posting month
April 2010 — 8 poems
08 Thu

First publication
Three Types of People