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Betrayal (Final Version for Critique and Criticism Workshop)
Original
Lying on the bed,
two bodies lay entwined.
Sacred vows are broken
Lust is served as wine
Hands exploring
Hearts dancing in delight
after so many nights
they have long been deprived
Tasting the honey-sweet sin
forgetting the poison within,
the horned devil is laughing
the traitors' fates have been sealed
Edited Version