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May 10, 2016
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TRUE LIES
TRUE LIES
You said you would love me
forever
that was true…..
forever ]
was only a day for you.
You told me there was
no other
that was no lie
there were at least
four or five
now you said
you would never
walk away
nothing was more exact,
the fact is you put on your little
red sneakers worn and torn
from use and ran like hell
to who knows where
but sweat pea, honey bunch
what is true is that I was doing
the same to you.
darling, sweet of my heart
have you seen my Nikes,
the ones with worn down
treads
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
alidzain
9 years 11 months ago
hmmm
bro, this one looks like a poem about betrayal.
Alid
Geremia
9 years 11 months ago
many times. joe
many times.
joe
jane210660
9 years 11 months ago
Made me laugh out loud.
Made me laugh out loud.
Still chuckling. Jx
Geremia
9 years 11 months ago
a bit of comic relief. My
a bit of comic relief. My poems are so dark.
mand
9 years 11 months ago
Hi Joe
LOve the twist at the end!
Seems it was time for them both to move on! :)
Thanks for sharing. :)
Love Mand xxx
Geremia
9 years 11 months ago
I am glad you enjoyed it,
I am glad you enjoyed it,
mand
9 years 11 months ago
:)
Always do - you're a clever poet. :)
brittle light
9 years 11 months ago
Joe
You still have a glaring brightness. Writing this witty little story proves it so.
And even if this is an oldie but goodie, the good sense to post it shows the light is still shining.
thanks
Geremia
9 years 11 months ago
the light still shines, not
the light still shines, not so bright, yet bright enough/
lovedly
9 years 11 months ago
a candle called Joe.....
can be seen from the galaxy so bright
souls abiding there
do hear him alright
Geremia
9 years 11 months ago
flickering candle not so
flickering candle not so bright
holding on with all its might
than k u, my friend