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Oct 04, 2011
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I am not a robot
I am not made of steel
I’ve a mind I’ve a brain
I can think, I can feel
Through my frame courses blood
Deep inside beats a heart
I am not a robot
Don’t tear me apart
You could never repair
The parts that get broken
You haven’t the tools
And words softly spoken
May lead you to think
That your game has been won
I am not a robot
The damage is done
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Comments
weirdelf
14 years ago
oh boy, when you get serious
you get serious.
So know the feeling, I'm sure she left some parts out.
Beautifully written, no suggestions.
shazbat
14 years ago
And it's not like me to get
And it's not like me to get serious, is it ?
But if I do you can bet it's for a good reason
Nice to know you enjoyed it.
I read your "Tough guy" yesterday and I've done my own take on it, needless to say it is a bit different from yours, the title caught my eye and away I went, going to post it next.
http://www.amazon.com/s/ref=nb_sb_noss?url=search-alias%3Daps&field-key…
weirdelf
14 years ago
I seee the revision back and forth,
wise to stick with the slight mis-stress without the contraction, methinks.
(A slight mistress maybe more desirable than a fat one, tehe)
Will you be joining us for the rhyme workshop?
shazbat
14 years ago
OK, hands up, I was having a
OK, hands up, I was having a fiddle but change my mind (love the pun) Rhyme workshop? who, what,why,where and when?
raj
14 years ago
Nice take on animate and
Nice take on animate and inanimate..i enjoyed the read...
shazbat
14 years ago
Thank you Raj, I'm glad that
Thank you Raj, I'm glad that you enjoyed it.
John
http://www.amazon.com/s/ref=nb_sb_noss?url=search-alias%3Daps&field-key…
shazbat
14 years ago
Well thank you kindly dear
Well thank you kindly dear Sir, don't expect many more though.
John
http://www.amazon.com/s/ref=nb_sb_noss?url=search-alias%3Daps&field-key…
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13 years 9 months ago
I loved it
Brilliant! I loved every bit of it. Usually I have some critique, but I wouldn't change a thing.
shazbat
13 years 9 months ago
I'm so pleased that you liked
I'm so pleased that you liked this one, it's a favourite of mine, your comments are very much appreciated.
John