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Jun 12, 2013
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ISLANDS
ISLANDS
Somewhere in space and time
I lost a life that was mine.
all things seem strange to me
suddenly
I don't fit any longer
in a world
of cozy corners.
My days are understated
and the silence sinks deep
into isolation
I feel the edge of glass
cutting words
indifference
cold and sharp
rip and tear
into my heart.
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years 10 months ago
joe
This is a cry from a lonely place, it is hard to be alone as the mind drives the conscious level into many places not normally travelled.
Just an addition to Stanza 2..
into isolation = "I have become Isolated"
This extra would maybe make that part flow a little more ???
I do hope you are finding others to talk to and be part of there, it is a pity I haven't the funds to travel the world as I would have been there with you for a while, but I ask the children and Sister Teresa to visit instead..
Take care young Joe and know we care, Yours Ian.T
Geremia
12 years 10 months ago
thank you, Ian.
thank you, Ian.