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Geremia
Geremia
May 30, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Canticles and Candles--updated

CANTICLES AND CANTICLES

Canticles and candles
litanies sweet to the ear
incense like a serpent
dancing in the air
the holy kneel in prayer
mesmerized by the magic
murmuring of mysteres.
“Kyrie eleison”
“Lord , have mercy.”
“Miserere Domine”
“Lord, have pity”...
for we fear.

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weirdelf

weirdelf

13 years 10 months ago

mea culpa, mea culpa

I do like this very much, Joe.

I am a sucker for ritual and the piece is elegantly written, though the line
Ora pro nobis peccatoribus
unfortunately jars a bit, a pity Latin is not a more poetic language, eh.

It may not have been your intent but the last line really makes it work for me as an atheist, since I believe that all religion is based in irrational fear.

weirdelf

weirdelf

13 years 10 months ago

oh yes!

much better.

You didn't mention if you found my interpretation of the last line troublesome, I hope I did not cause offense.

It is a burden we must bear as writers, sometimes I have gone spare with frustration at misinterpretation of my poems. I try to remind myself of my anarchist ideal: once the poem has been released to the reader it belongs to them, to think of and read as they choose. But it's not always easy [smiles]

William Saint George

William Saint George

13 years 10 months ago

Wow

This piece made me happy. That you left it open ended, was great also. I just loved how brief it was. Yet it seemed to say a lot also.

It was the title that drew me in, and yes, I'm glad I read it.
You've made my morning.

O and btw, I recently wrote a Kyrie for a latin mass. Awesome huh?